Reviews For Lila's Thunder
Title: Chapter 8

Well, she will have a peace of mind and a lot of thinking.

That must have hurt Jack but get Chase a hope.

Meanwhile hope the brothers do something especially Chase.But see  I understand his hate against Jack (for the car keys) but you can't turn back time.

I guess his hatred is slowing him down.(for a good one on one talk with Jack)

Adorable update V.

 

Reviewer: Insomniac Sioj Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 01 2012 04:34 pm

Title: Chapter 8

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I'm "AA" by the by. Wasn't trying to be shady on purpose just hadn't logged in yet...

Ciao! ^_^

Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 04:26 pm

Title: Chapter 8

I am not in any way privelleged to the author, Voices, intent to what drives her characters and I willingly admit I might have overthought some things in my passion for this story. I hope this constitutes a disclaimer. This is only my opinion this far...

The caltalyst for this rapid deterioration of the Chase/Lila/Jack dynamic was the impulsive firing of Lila. It was done in such an offhand way with no regard to the intimate history they all share. That is all Jacks fault I fear. I still don't understand the reasons behind how it was executed.

Does a professional, an attorney at that, not usually have a greater sense of procedure and protocol? If not for sentimental reasons he should at least understand the importance of building consensus as  the way to have things go smoothly. Why didn't he do it the way he fibbed to Grams? I have a hard time believing Lila and Chase couldn't have kept to a "waning off period" of less and less interaction since Chase is graduating and moving to Boston in only months anyway.

As we have been reminded, Harvard is not a sure thing but to Chase Lila was and her support the reason he even has a chance to be accepted in the first place. Jack, always on Lila's case about not being by the book but when it comes to himself he wields power like an overgrown bully in a school yard. No regard to imidiate consequenses let alone longtime effects. He seems to prefer covering up his mistakes or lying so he doesn't have to face them. Wait, I Think I do understand why he fired her and when....

That morning he had two confrontations with Lila. The first one was an Epic fail in all the ways you can think of. The second encounter was more of a victory. With the Victory being the very real promise of having Lila in all the ways you can think of. He is aware that "Chase will have his head" if he tries to rupture his relationship with Lila even in the slightest. Jack may Love Chase as a brother dearly but as a man he also clearly sees him as a the threat he potentially could be. Tough spot?

*Rock, Meet Hard Place*

 

 

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 06:44 am

Title: Chapter 8

Maybe Lila is right, maybe they should go their separate ways. Or perhaps Jack is correct…, they have to their own lives to live but how do they fix what has been broken?


There’s only one culprit at fault here and that person’s name is JackLilaChase. This entity used each other without forethought, or malice; it just happened…and unfortunately…it has accumulated into debauchery for more than five years.


Jack. Jack hid behind his brother in an effort to mask what he needs the most:  a life with love from the woman whom he knew had already stolen his heart.


Young Chase clung to a mother-figure that somehow morphed into his own personal talisman, a beautiful amulet to behold but never touch.  The once frail orphan became empowered as he understood the dynamics of love and wielded morals as a shield, thereby keeping Jack at bay.


Ahh, the lovely Lila: caring, nurturing, and broken. She’d chosen the profession of mentoring to atone for her sister’s suicide; however, Chase was someone to take care of, and thus, assuage her guilt. While Chase became her Band-Aid…, Jack…is her thunder!! He commands emotion, desire too strong to resist, so, Chase is the excuse she uses to safeguard her soul.  Too late Lila!


I empathize with the trio; they are good people who has endured tremendous loss…now is the time to end this cycle of pain. Jack and Lila mustn’t sacrifice their romance; they don’t owe Chase their lives. What is paramount is for Jack to invest quality time with his brother, communicate with him, and respect Chase as a man by being honest about his relationship with Lila, stop hiding behind a lie. Jack should fight for Lila – fight with her if he must to be by her side b/c lawd knows the threat to her livelihood, and possibly her safety, is frighteningly real.


Ok, I'm done. Lol  Excellent job Voices!

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 27 2012 06:53 am

Title: Chapter 8

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!! Please update sooooon.....

Reviewer: LadyeT Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 27 2012 04:10 am

Title: Chapter 8

Your updates are so intense they get me riled up lol. That's a testimony to your talent as a writer.

I tried but I really can't with Chase. It's all about him, his emotions, his feelings, his comfort, etc... it's like get over yourself, bro. No wonder he surrounds himself with women who cater to his ego. First, it was Lila though that's understandable considering his parents had died. And now that she's finally getting away from their unhealthy situation, he lashes on to this Ashley girl who needs to fall back and have several seats by the way. He needs to grow up.

And Lila... sigh. I understand why she feels that by breaking up with Jack, things won't get messier. And for the time being, she's probably right. But ultimately, the message she's sending Chase is "throw a fit and you'll have your way" and that's wrong.

I feel for Jack because he's his loved ones' "punching bag".

Reviewer: paayush Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 26 2012 04:12 pm

Title: Chapter 1

Well what a chapter! Lila is doing what she thinks is the right thing, but for all of the wrong reasons. And how long does Ashley think that her little stunt will stay under cover, because she will have to gloat.

Reviewer: Sandra Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 25 2012 06:06 am

Title: Chapter 8

Really? I am pissed right now! I know that bitch Ashley took those photos. Chase is in love with Lila but I don't think, at least I hope, he could be that vindictive ARGH! 

 

Jack and Lila were so damn loving and cute boo'd up in line and I SO loved the gravesite openings...those two are my heart *meh creyyyyyssss*

Reviewer: got2luvmel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 09:09 pm

Title: Chapter 8

I think Ashley took those pictures....

Reviewer: Dani Cali Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 05:32 pm

Title: Chapter 8

this story is a very frustrating.I hate that a lil boy can do this to adults. but i look forward to the next update. Lila needs to get a clue and Ashley need to be punched in the face. Jack needs to reign in Chase, that kid is workin my good nerve!

Reviewer: kaci Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 12:06 pm

Title: Chapter 8

Oh dang girl :(

 

Reviewer: Jamilla Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 11:54 am

Title: Chapter 8

wow that was intense.   witI feel sad for them all.  I believe that AShley ad something to do with the picture that was  left at Lila's house. Thanks for a great update.

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 07:00 am

Title: Chapter 8

This was another intense chapter and when all is said and done Lila and Jack truly loved each other. Chase needed to be faced with the hard reality that Lila was never going to be someong that loved him the way he wanted. lila loved him but like a mother loves a child and I blame Lila for not being able to control te type of relationship she and Chase had. Not dealing with her sister's death changed her from being able to keep a professional relationship with those that she worked with.

Jack had the sense to not get to close but he let his guard down and Lila now wants to do the right thing. I don't feel bad for Chase or Lila they made their bed and Jack was forcing them to deal with the reality of it. I truly feel bad for Jack he has a hard time with opening up because he blames himself for so much. Yeah he gave his father the keys but his father and mother made the choice. Yeah he didn't know how to relate to Chase but Chase made the choice to keep it that way as well. He wants to be with Lila but yet again Lila has made the choice to break up with him. Maybe its time Jack makes some choices so that he can have a life full of the living instead of living a life full of regret. At the end of the day Chase, Lila, and even Jack need to see what is right in front of them and deal with that instead of dancing around it like they can make it not so.

Chase wants to be older and feel like he's an adult then he needs to face the fact that Jack and Lila truly love each other and if he wasn't so pissed off at Jack for a choice his parents made or Lila made he could see his brother struggles just like him, maybe even worse because he has more responsibility and the one thing that has made him happy is the one thing he tried to destroy so not to hurt Chase. Chase needs to stop being so selfish and deal. I know a lot were pissed off with Lila in the last few chapters but I think she and Jack are so much alike that she holds on so not to loose peeps and Jack doesn't let anyone get to close. I still love Jack and Lila and think if they get out of their own way they can make it. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 06:08 am

Title: Chapter 8

Okay.I dont like this Ashley chick. fck her. Chase hates Jack because he blaims Jack for their parents' death, beacuse he knowingly gave them keys to drive while they were extremly drunk, andddd because he is with Lila. 

Yes, Chase may be acting immature, but you have to look at it from his perspective. I am by no means saying that he is not over reacting, beacuse yes, he could be handling this differently. But, Chase has been close with Lila for a long time, in love with her, and to watch her with his brother all of a sudden is going to sting. Anddd being accused of spying on them when he clearly didnt do it, seeing pictures of them in the throes of passion is going to hurt. Ashley is a slutty, easy, distraction, so leaving for 3 days is exterme, but being naive results in rashness. 

Lila has good intentions for stepping out of both lives, but unfortunatly, that does not guarantee that Jack and Chase will mend their relationship. Not after getting into a physical scuffle, and Ashley putting poision in Chase ear. Fck her for threating Lila. smh

Alot of emotions and rash behavior in this chapter. They all need to take a deep breath, step back, and talk without screaming and causing bodily harm

Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 04:40 am

Title: Chapter 8

Finally Lila is doing something right. Its a good thing that she decide to stay away from both brother. This is most partly her fault. Her relationship with Chase was very inappropriate. Its obvious that Chase did not take the pictures, so my guess is that Ashley took them or paid someone to do it.

I know that I may sound mean, but I don't feel sorry for Chase at all. He is being immature. And I'm still trying to figure out why he hates his brother so much. He needs to finally get it in his head that Lila doesn't love him the way he wants. Get over it and move on. Why is he so naive to even think that a grown woman like Lila will actually have a future with a teenager like him. 

Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 03:55 am

Title: Chapter 7

Oh! My! Lord!


 

Reviewer: Insomniac Sioj Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 02:33 am

Title: Chapter 8

Oh no, I feel bad about the way things are turning out. That Ashley is a piece of work. She had a lot of nerve calling Lila a bitch. Chase is young and naive so he can't see how Ashley is manipulating him. Lila is right. She needs to stay away from Chase and Jack. Their relationship is more important. I can't wait to see how you resolve all this conflict. Excellent chapter.

Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 02:23 am

Title: Chapter 8

This update was so amazing . So much going on. I feel so bad for Chase and Lila and even Jack . This was a super update . I truly can't wait to see what's gonna happen next . :)



Author's Response:

I can't wait, either lol.  Thanks for writing!

Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 01:03 am

Title: Chapter 8

OMG! OMG! OMG! OOOMGGGAAAAAAAA!

I haven't even read the update yet I'm so excited!!!!!

Can you believe I wrote fanfiction to the last update?!? I can't even believe myself. SMH. That's how invested I am in this Story,  That I actually can hear what they (Lila, Chase, Jack) would say and talk about enough to want to get it written down for my own entertainment. That has never happened to me before when I've read original fiction. EVER!!!

Voices, You are Genius in my honest opinion. I feel like I'm taking an inadvertent creative writing course or something. I'm so hyped i'm on the verge of being giddy, wait wait wait...I AM Giddy!!!

Thank you for updating so fast, I litterally don't kow what I would do if you hadn't.

Okay, off to read the Update...Yaaaaaay!*smiles"



Author's Response:

I have to tell you... my biggest dream is to write for television and I know when I love a tv show I can't help but write fan fiction about it to give it my own spin and hoped one day someone would be writing about stories/character I wrote so I have to thank the hell out of you for this review.  Everyday I have my doubts about my "dreams" (as do my parents) and reading this made me smile so big.  THANK YOU!

Reviewer: BabyPasha Signed [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 01:01 am

Title: Chapter 8

This story is just pure awesome! Loving the brothers and their passion for Lila, and great choice of cast by the way! The story is so angsty and heartbreaking in a good way - I can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 12:44 am

Title: Chapter 8

The twists and turns this story has taken...I have to say I enjoyed this chapter.  Ah, about the keys...I see what you did there....never would have thought about Ashley but that girl is pure venom because she knows how Chase feels about Lila (you wrote that he babbled about her all night while trying to hook up with Ashley)...and she knows that Chase will will NEVER feel that way about her. The way Lila reacted in her office with Chase...is what I expected (or wanted as I said as much).

I will have to say that some questions that I wondered about were finally answered in this chapter.  In a previous chapter, Chase mentioned something about their parents' accident to Jack....and it made me wonder if Jack put those keys in their hand the night of that fatal accident.  So now I know...and it's so sad about Lila's sister.  You've added a new twist to this story with the Ashley character...and I'm wondering just what is going to happen next and is Chase going to be there for Lila (well if the story goes that way with the Ashley character)?  Yeah I'm not too keen on Chase and Lila but at this point...it's like whatever.  

Once again, I have to say that you are a good writer with some really amazing skills...to get such strong reactions from your writing is a job well done. 

 

 



Author's Response:

I apprechiate your indepth reviews and can always tell that you really READ the chapters, which is awesome.  Thank you Natori.

Reviewer: Natori aka R Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 12:44 am

Title: Chapter 8

Wow.  This was intense.  I do believe that Ashley took those pictures hoping that Chase would get over his obsession.  I hope Jack finds out that it wasn't his brother and I hope that they will work through this before Chase has a total breakdown.  

Great chapter.  Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thank you Brenda. :)

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 12:37 am

Title: Chapter 8

All I can say is wow!!  I don't believe that Chase took those photos, I think that that ho Ashley had took his keys and paid someone to take those pictures.  Chase you deserve so much better than that little ho, Lila is not the woman for you  but there is a woman that is perfect for you.  I am glad that Lila took responsibility for her actions.  She needs to apologize to Chase for not  dealing with his feelings long ago.  Jack your little brother needed you but let Lila be his everything.    You both responsible for this situation and the price that each of you should pay is being apart!!  Excellent!!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for writing! :) 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 12:18 am

Title: Chapter 8

Well, the last chapter was very good, as well as this one, and as worked up as I was, this story is fiction. One hell of a fiction tale, lol, but fiction none the less (I think, lol unless you're not telling us something, Voices, lol!) written by a writer, who in my opinion is writing her ASS, off, lol. Anytime you have a writer who can evoke so many emotions, good, bad, neutral, or whatever.....that writer is the bomb. I love stories that send my blood boiling, lol!

Anyway.....Chase didn't do it....well that just leaves Ashley's junkie self. That girl is a witch. I cannot wait to see how this story continues to progress. Lily just broke off with Jack, damn....Chase is confused......damn.....Lily thinks she's solved the problem, damn................LOL!!

Update soon!!



Author's Response:

Thank you for the review!  I realized that I was a little sensitive earlier and scaled down that BOOK I wrote in the chapter notes lol.  Regardless of how some reviews make me feel I've never wanted to TELL people what kind of review to leave because the honest ones (good or bad) are the BEST ones-- yet somehow that's exactly what I ended up doing lol.  I apprechiate you telling me exactly what you think... Thanks again! :)

Reviewer: Anna Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2012 12:11 am

Title: Chapter 7

I honestly think Lila loves them both in her own way. But, what's stopping her from being in love with Chase is the fact that she's always looked at him as a little brother versus seeing him in a romantic light. Yes, she's now noticing him as the man that he has become but, in her mind, that doesn't take away from the fact that she still sees him as a little brother figure. She's one of those morally correct people, she won't ever see herself with Chase in that capacity and I'm glad about it. 

IDK about anyone else, but I'm rooting for Jack and Lila. I do think Lila and Chase have some amazing chemisty but I think Jack's her soulmate. And the way she told him that she has always been his *le sigh* LOVED it! 

Great writing; this story is deliciously sexy, complicated and just perfect. The amount of emotions I go through just reading a single chapter makes me want to scream, laugh and cry all at once. I haven't read anything like this story before, which makes me love it all the more! Thanks for writing and sharing this gem -Mel

Reviewer: got2luvmel Signed [Report This]
Date: March 22 2012 11:30 pm



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