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Title: Chapter 1

How old is she to let a stranger in the house? O_o

Is the stranger related to her mother's death or was more than one person involved?

I'm on to the next chapter!

 Reviewer: Insomniac Sioj Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 23 2013 11:53 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Tanya makes no sense. Her opening the door to a stranger then leaving the stranger alone in the room then she tries back in the room finds the stranger gone, phone off the hook and the door wide open yet she didn't see anything wrong with this picture??? Not once did she think to turn around an mention this to her mother or check the house to see if the man left the house. No, she just rushes off to school. Makes no sense to me. Regardless if you think you live in a nice neighborhood you don't open your door to strange men, you don't let them in your house and you dediney don't live them unattended in a room. 

 Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 23 2013 02:21 pm
Title: Chapter 3

Hmmm....I'm really not feeling homegirl at all at the moment. And it shouldn't be that way because she's supposed to be one of the victims. This last bit didn't help the cause, either. I'll see where this goes with her. 

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 06:48 am
Title: Chapter 3

SHe gets more stupid with each new chapter.  What kind of Mike, her mother was murdered and wants her to smoke weed.  The pain and the guilt will still be there where the high is over.  Why is this grown man dating a high school student?  The answer is because she's stupid!!!  Her mother didn't like him for a reason, he's grown man doing nothing with his messing with a teenager.

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 05:17 am
Title: Chapter 3

I think she needs to heed her mom's advice in regards to Mike. I'm pretty sure getting high and losing her virginity during unprotected sex is not a smart move. 

 Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 05:16 am
Title: Chapter 2

Lord, was Tanya stupid. She repeated that story and it sounded worse with the second story.  How dumb can you be?  The child leaves in la la land!!

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 05:12 am
Title: Chapter 2

Her teachers seem very insensitive. I noticed that last chapter in how Mrs. Wesly relayed the news. At least Det. Romeo wasn't judgemental about her letting the stranger in the house.

 Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 05:09 am
Title: Chapter 3

nice update

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 04:55 am
Title: Chapter 1

I'm enjoying your tory so far...So keep up the good work

 Reviewer: aries20 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 04:54 am
Title: Chapter 1

THank you to everybody following my story...I will be writing more chapters very soon

 Reviewer: Shameekqua24 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 03:18 am
Title: Chapter 2

love it.

 Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 02:48 am
Title: Chapter 1

Tanya is dumber than a box a rocks you don't people in house that you don't know and you most  certainly don't leave them alone.  Because of your stupidity your mom is dead.  The story just started and I really can't stand Tanya!!  She makes my teeth itch!!  I bet you that she can't even identify the murderer that she allowed into her home.  She is going to be arrested becasue they will no evidence of the this man in her home. I am so disgusted right now, more please!!

 

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 01:20 am
Title: Chapter 1

Interesting start. Who is this man and what was the reasoning behind her mom's murder? More please.

 Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 01:04 am
Title: Chapter 1

Huh??? Why would she just open the door to a total stranger like that and then give him the run of the house? She was all blase like her mother was the stupid one to ask her about him? Then she just leaves, appearing not especially concerned where this stranger might be in her house with her mother there all alone? And I hope her rationale doesn't turn out to be that they lived in a good neighborhood with friendly people and nothing bad ever happened there. Beause then that would mean this girl, who is clearly old enough to know better, lacks basic commonsense; given that these are two women that live alone.

Wow....I definitely need to read the rest of this.

 Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2013 12:48 am
Title: Chapter 1

That was a good start  brought tears to my eyes

 Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2013 11:52 pm


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