Reviews For The Karate Master
Title: Chapter 1

Updates please!!!!!! :-)

 

Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 27 2013 11:31 pm

Title: Chapter 5

So glad you are back.   Great update

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 17 2013 08:38 pm

Title: Chapter 5

Great story, hope you update soon

Reviewer: Toya23 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 17 2013 05:05 am

Title: Chapter 5

Cute. I hope he helps her heal and doesn't have a negative reaction to her traumatic past.

Reviewer: Acdromance Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 17 2013 04:52 am

Title: Chapter 5

Hmmm. This story is interesting, but first there is a big problem with the editing: the sentences are much too long without punctuation and it makes the reading more difficult.

Now, about the plot. I still don't understand why has Tai been living for 5 years in NY, without anyone really close to him, while he misses his (former?) girlfirend and his family. The stuff about his mum having some kind of premonition about a woman he is supposed to fall in love with (if I understood everything correctly) is a bit far fetched.  Also his father is supposed to be that big ass international trader, his familly send him all the way to NY to get the best education possible and he ends up going to the Police Academy? No offense to PA but it is not like he went to Harvard and then chose to go to PA.

As for the 2 sisters, the abuse storyline is clearly upsetting, and sure it seems coherent that they both have been traumatized, but I really can't understand why Lana hasn't said anything to their father. I mean, the guy is a cop, the police commissioner even!! Especially now that she doesn't live in that place anymore and now that she has realized for some time that her sister is being abused too.

Also the bit about her ex is not clear: in the 1st chapter it was said that he loved her and wanted to be with her, now he is supposed to have cheated on her? I also disagree with the idea that a vulnerable man, a man who shows vunlnerability is a weak man, ans stated in previous chapter about him. Now him behaving clingy and stalkerish is another story. But the way he was depicted in the first chapters was more of him being vulnerable and too caring so she considered it to mean he was weak. For someone who has been a victim of abuse, it is quite harsh a statement.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the honest review. You're correct this story is unedited, and I'm pulling it straight from the TST site where I first posted it about a year or so ago.

Reviewer: RedHobo Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: July 16 2013 11:00 pm

Title: Chapter 5

Lana does have a troubled past and she sees herself as broken and that there is no man out there just for her.  Tai is trying to find himself or a part that completes him in a foreign country can be difficult.  Two people being brought closer as each day comes and goes.  How it will it happen only time will tell.  



Author's Response:

Thank you more to come.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 16 2013 04:21 am

Title: Chapter 5

Yes, this story is back!!  I love stories that pair Asian males with sisters. Looking forward to the next update!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 16 2013 03:24 am

Title: Chapter 4

I love your story please....please.....please UPDATE!

Reviewer: fangirl1968 Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 23 2013 02:54 pm

Title: Chapter 4

I just have this huge feeling of dread while reading this. I'm looking forward to more updates but please take care of yourself. 

Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2013 03:04 am

Title: Chapter 4

this story has great potential, however, the absue storyline does not sit well with me, the sibbling who is first abused does all to make sure that the other suffer the same to the point of confessing, they watch their sibbling like a hawk and as soon as there is a shift the protector come out in them.

Reviewer: dounome Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 19 2013 07:51 pm

Title: Chapter 4

I really wish that Lana and Chan NY would tell their father about that ahole Bruce.  Amanda their mother makes my teeth itch.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2013 02:57 am

Title: Chapter 4

I really wish that Lana and Chan NY would tell their father about that ahole Bruce.  Amanda their mother makes my teeth itch.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2013 02:56 am

Title: Chapter 4

please update soon..

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2013 12:57 am

Title: Chapter 4

  It seems that the sisters have more to deal with than i originally thought and that makes them realistic.  Channy has more issues than i thought and the fact they are not telling will only hurt them in the end.  As for the father, i know he sacrificed alot to be a real father and it is time to to start living his life.  I hope they will be able to overcome their obstacles and find some type of happiness.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 18 2013 11:54 pm

Title: Chapter 1

Btw, will there be pictures.



Author's Response:

yes there will be eventually

Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 18 2013 10:06 pm

Title: Chapter 4

This is sad, but I can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 18 2013 10:05 pm

Title: Chapter 3

I can't wait until they meet.  It still puzzle s me that they didn't immediately tell their father what Bruce did.  Since Lana is really skilled in Matial Arts why is Bruce still alive? If it's concern about their momma it's a concern that she doesn't deserve! Any woman that chooses a man over their children deserves to loose everything that she holds dear! Said woman should die lonely and unloved! Can you tell that I don't their human incubator and demon spawn of a child molester husband or boyfriend? Bring on the meeting between Tai and Lana!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 28 2013 02:01 pm

Title: Chapter 3

So now I'm wondering if she's going to end up with Tai or the other Asian dude at her job who's damn near in love with her.  I get the feeling she's not into dude from the job though.  I'm not a fan of love triangles but I will continue to read since I'm curious how this will play out.

Reviewer: Natori aka R Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 28 2013 01:39 pm

Title: Chapter 3

So far so good. I am curious to see how all their lives will be affected by their choices.  I t seems That Tai is a man that is in store for the twist of fate as well as Lana.  I know that Channy feels her life is over as most teens do but time heals all wounds and any guy that cannot see how wonderful she is is not worthy of her.  I support Lana for breaking up with her ex because she knew that he was not for her, fate has someone better in store. As for kent i hope that he will find happiness as well and learn to open up just a little.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 28 2013 07:07 am

Title: Chapter 3

great update

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 28 2013 05:39 am

Title: Chapter 2

LIfe has a tendency to throws obstacles and matters of the hear are no different.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2013 11:50 pm

Title: Chapter 1

Nice start.  Lets see where this will lead them.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2013 11:48 pm

Title: Chapter 2

nice update....please update soon

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 25 2013 07:05 am

Title: Chapter 2

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Reviewer: Emy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 25 2013 02:47 am

Title: Chapter 1

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:)

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Date: February 25 2013 02:31 am



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