That rape scene made me cry.
thank god she had that one friend who decided to find her.
fuck iris, you don't try and get in the way of a relationship that has that much of a connection. Quite frankly, don't even get involved with a man that has a fierce relationship with a woman that ain't his mom or sister.Reviewer: Soledad Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 08:21 pm
This story is what I like to call a pallet cleanser. It is different, refreshing and engaging. It is not over wrought with cliche and we'll thought out thus far so I should be thanking you for sharing! (And although I meant every word, can you tell how I am sucking up for another chapter? lol)Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed [Report This]
Date: April 12 2014 01:37 am
Great job! Anticipating the update. I think that Jonah does love Sydney in a romantic way.
Do you now? Well, I guess you'll have to keep reading to see just who loves who...haha Thanks for the review :)Reviewer: Harrie Holiday Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11 2014 02:15 pm
What the hell hit her? I do hope that her shows signs of the initial impact and that it wasn't her imagination. I hope that Sydney will be okay. Good start!!
Author's Response: Remember the first screech Jonah heard? There was a car behind her driving recklessly, which slid and slammed into her. Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2013 01:29 am
I'm curious to see who walks in on who with a woman between his legs and she isn't upset about acting him in a position like that.
General Question (to all readers): If you are not in a relationship with someone, is their justification to be upset (aka jealous, or whatever you want to call it) about what they do?
-@Chocolate Girl, this is by no means a slight or attack towards you. Thanks for the review!Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2013 04:44 pm
Good start. Now I wanna read more .
That's what I'm hoping for, thanks!Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 21 2013 02:44 pm
I think you have a good start going. I am a little confused on what narrative tense you are going for. But I am sure it will unfold more as it goes on. Just be sure to stay consistent. If you are not sure what kind of car just generalize... ie gold sedan, black suv, red truck, blue compact car. You don't have to specify yet.
Constrictive criticism is appreciated. Honestly, I was so eager to get the prologue on the site that I obviously didn't notice some mistakes after reading it a million times. Thanks for helping me out!Reviewer: Artamiss Caine Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2013 12:59 pm
this a great first chapter and i look forward to readiding more.Reviewer: nightpleasure Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 21 2013 12:54 pm
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Date: March 21 2013 07:26 am