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Title: Chapter 16 UPDATE

Smh this is going to go badly in soooo many ways. I can always sense it. Poor Kira

 Reviewer: Tea Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 02 2014 02:28 pm
Title: Chapter 15

just when things are getting hot you leave me hanging



Author's Response: Lol i have a tendency to leave the reader in suspense

Reviewer: jadadominique Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 28 2014 06:38 am
Title: Chapter 15

Bring on Helena and Hesina. I wonder how she'll handle it? Looking forward to more. 

 Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2014 04:00 am
Title: Chapter 15

Girl u did, can't wait to see the next epi!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 27 2014 09:30 pm
Title: Chapter 15

There is definitely going to be some drama next chapter.

 Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 26 2014 06:41 am
Title: Chapter 15

Loved the update! Kira has met her match with Raad. Hope they can make it work.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 26 2014 05:06 am
Title: Chapter 14

What an awesome tale! I love how it jumps off the tablet like a movie. Your character selections are really good too. I know that your leaving Kira to our own interpretations and that's cool. You have made Kira so multidimensional it really doesn't matter. I love Dewayne Johnson as Raad, he is perfect and this story is moving at  good pace but I want more and can't wait for Sap to get his. I am curious to find out what has happened to Fatima as well as what Kira' s father will do next. He is acting like a mad man pissing on his whole family including his wife. Poor Keitou, no sister,no woman, and no throne; I feel for him. Well, l can't wait to read more from you.

 Reviewer: Charly43 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 10:27 pm
Title: Chapter 14

Considering the circumstances I think the Pharoah did good So glad Merit has Kira & she her their stations don't define the loyal friendship they've formed which I'm sure is gonna bestronger with the orders the king gave of protecting & only answering to the princess & non other except him loving this story continue

 Reviewer: kvgurl Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 08:06 pm
Title: Chapter 14

I'm soooo glad things are turning around for Merit. I just wonder how things will turn out for Raad and Kira with his two possible wives coming to his visit. I sense it won't be good

 Reviewer: tea Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 09:14 am
Title: Chapter 14

Loved the update! Glad Sap got a reality check! Those priests are evil!!

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 06:48 am
Title: Chapter 14

Why didn't you let her cut it off!!!!! Smh I wanted that to happen :( way to ruin my gun in seeing him scream... I don't take rape or harm easily shoo I'd hurt him to the core make him feel what it is like to be a female except dis formed... Maybe I'm getting tooooooooooo far but idk its just that rape and harm of a woman or man boy or girl makes me crazy and protective of the victim. Call me a Nubian warrior if you please... My ancestor is Zulu and spainard as well as India and Native American... (I got to many warrior tribes in my hold and plus I'm mexican as well as Irish too.)



Author's Response:

That is pretty goshdarn awesome about your ancestors!

 Reviewer: Keyajackson Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 06:06 am
Title: Chapter 14

These priests are ridiculous.  How can you practice being closer to the Gods and you allow one of your own to defile an innocent young girl and do nothing but turn your heads and spill lies and atrocious comments towards her.  They all need to be beheaded including Sap.  Someone who was there to protect one of their own and you want her put down.  That is your ignorance, jealousy and hatred.  They had no disputeagainst hte statements that Pharoah Raad put to them.  Now we have 2 women coming into the  household and he is more than aware that Kira is not someone to sit idly by.  She will be ferocious in her need to stay away from him to keep her sanity before she ever places herself as second or mistress.  I feel this is when she will truly miss being at home and possibly marrying the other guy because at that point she would have the respect of a wife.  I think if he decides on marrying one of these girls, he will have to send Kira home to Nubia.  I think I would rather be away and have some semblence of sanity vs being hit with reality daily of what cannot be.  Looking forward to your next chapter.  P.S.  They should have let her cut off his pleasure stick first. 

 Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 04:14 am
Title: Chapter 13

Nooo..you can't leave us hanging like this!! That damn Sap needs his to be castrated! !!

 Reviewer: Leogina Signed [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 01:00 am
Title: Chapter 11

Someone needs to step that snake!!! Kira needs to be careful. ..I am so in love with this story!

 Reviewer: Leogina Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2014 12:39 am
Title: Nubians~ Egyptians

I feel like I'm watching a movie while i read this story. Excellent writing and movement of the plot line. Keep up the good work!!!!

 Reviewer: Love Drama Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 24 2014 08:38 pm
Title: Chapter 12

You tell him mama!!!!

 Reviewer: Keyajackson Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 24 2014 07:11 pm
Title: Chapter 12

Great chapter!!

 Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 24 2014 07:08 am
Title: Chapter 4

Omg! I am on a long road trip and stumbled across your story! ! I am so in love! ! The first two chapters are amazingly written. I can't wait to continue.

 Reviewer: Leogina Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24 2014 02:27 am
Title: Chapter 8

Great story!

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Date: June 23 2014 05:31 pm
Title: Chapter 11

She definitely needs to watch her back with the priest. 

 Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 23 2014 10:36 am
Title: Chapter 11

Loved the update! They need to watch Sap closely!! He's trouble!!

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 23 2014 07:58 am
Title: Chapter 11

You re the best.  I always get extremely giddy every time i see you update this story.  I think i am getting too greedy.  It seems like Kira is really starting to notice Raad.  And Sap is one coy snake.  Good update and please keep it coming.

 Reviewer: rosa1234 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 23 2014 06:40 am
Title: Chapter 11

That priest is up to no good that's for sure.  Looking forward to more updates. 

 Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 23 2014 06:12 am
Title: Chapter 10

I'm in really and truly in love with this story!!!!

 Reviewer: shellyme Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23 2014 02:46 am
Title: Nubians~ Egyptians

I really like the flow of this story. The romance between Raad and Kira is proceeding very nicely. There is an attraction between them already, but i detect that Kira will deny her feelings at first. I like that Kira is left up to our own imagination. Keep up the good work!

 Reviewer: Love Drama Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 23 2014 12:51 am


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