I am glad she realizes that her relationship with her colored her relationships with men. I am still not understanding why she chose David? In my mind David was the safe choice,  the man she really didn't have feelings for.  I was so happy when David walked away from her as she is undeserving of his love and affection.  I truly hope that looses her job as well, Journdan needs to grow up and quit playing games with people's feelings.

I would like for to apologize to both Neymar and David.  I want her admit that her feelings for Neymar are much deeper than her feelings for David.  I want to admit that David was safer choice. Am I asking for too much of Journdan? I realize that she is young dumb, but I do have hope for her. Good stuff!!!

Yes David should have punched Neymar in the mouth!! He totally deserved it!! Jourdan was overwhelmed with all the male attention and went a little crazy. Poor girl. She made huge mistakes. Unfortunately she may lose her job over this. 

Wow! Smoking chapter. 

Eccletic Charms and HermioneMalfoy08 you two have summed up all of my feelings in a nutshell. All I can see is the Jourdan that is being displayed now and right now she is not likeable and that is ok, she is not the first nor will she be the last heroine that I dislike, that doesn't mean that I dislike the story.

It doesn't matter if she hasn't finished growing yet, I can only review the Jourdan now, not the Jourdan she may or may not grow into, that doesn't make since.

Yes the story is unrealistic but it's fiction so that is no problem, I'm not here for real life stories in any case.

I am here to see if she can be redemned. If she is even worth redemption. I am here for Neymar and David and their progression as well. 

Looking forward to her next mistake and David's reaction to what Neymar just told him, drama!! Update Soon!!!

I still don't like Jourdan and it would do her good to lose them both because she needs a serious wake up call. She is stringing these 2 guys along and deserves all the bad Karma that she will get. Neymar is so childish and David is just being used.

You don't have to compromise your story but don't bash those who have taken the time out to read your story. If you didn't like what I said or others then just address me or them but the ending note was not neccessary and  I found that to be "annoying". You should be happy that people are feeling any kind of way and not just blah about your story. Any feeling is better than nothing in my oppinion. 

I could wait for the ending to review but you are posting it chapter by chapter and not as complete so I can only talk about the now because that is all that I can read. Bashing characters in your story has nothing to do with you as a writer but I was tired of the age thing because that is not an excuse for her behavior, nothing is because she is an adult. I am looking forward to the next chapter and I will be here to call Jourdan out on all of her crap.

Best.

I knew he agreed too easily! That was a punk ass move on Neymar's part. Smh.  Jourdan should leave both of them alone and concentrate on her new job. I dont trust David either he seems too perfect. 

Look, ignore and/ or delete the negative feedback. I like your story... I totally get it Jourda's indecision. You got women in their 40's just as confused as to what they want and what is best for them. I like every chapter. I especially love the fact that you routinely update this story, unlike some (myself included). I have a bit of writers' block and your story and writing style kind of uplifts me... So write on lmpw.

How old is David Luiz in this story?

I truly enjoy the way the story is going and I love the fact that the female lead is not perfect; that in fact she's human and is learning. This journey that she's on is refreshing and one I haven't seen reflected in various online stories especially those with a young Black female character.

Dude!! This update is like... Whoa! Shit could not be more fucked up for her. Lmao but hell she had that coming. BTW I loovve the gifs haha. Can't wait for the next update

Author's Response:

Haha, this review made me laugh. It's always fun to find new gifs to post.

Hmmm. I do like the concept of this story and I do intend to follow it to the end, simply to find out what the end is. This is my first review of the story and honestly I'm a bit baffled. Granted Jourdan is 19 but I don't think her age has anything to do with her inability to make reasoned decisions when it comes to guys. She likes to play games from the sounds of things and does not come across as a very likeable, reliable or trustworthy character. I'm not quite sure if she's supposed to be a football groupie (which is what seems to be the case since she follows at least 3 players around on demand) or stupid. I'm going to go with stupid groupie ha! She seems determined to bag a football player in any case so hmmm. Maybe it's not the author's intention that we like Jourdan anyway, maybe we are supposed to hate her until smth terrible happens, she learns her lesson and becomes a rational human being. Not sure, but I'll continue to watch this space. 

Jourdan should for once choose no one and start from scratch.  David is coming on too fast and Neymar was with Bruna (possibly sexing her, too) just to get back at J.  Chris just wants to hit it like N. did---I don't care if he did say he wanted to be in the friend zone.  I expected her friend to be the wild child---not this 19 yr old virgin.  J should just pull back, regroup, and do her job; wonder who the grown up would be then, Neymar or David?