Nava is showing strength and it's about time.Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2016 02:17 am
Justine is the spelling typically given to a female and Justin is typically the name given to a male...interesting that you decided to use the female spelling for a male...I wonder if you are trying to imply something about the character...in spite of that strangeness, good job...
No special emphasis just a mistake thanks for pointing it out glad you enjoyed it anyways stay classy.Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2016 02:51 am
Nava has finally develosped a backbone.Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 28 2016 01:40 am
The one thing that I love about this story is the use of descriptive colourful language. I actually feel like I'm right the besides Nava and the Dill trailing the land escaping the undead. I feel sad for the Casey but at the same time I kinda expected that she'd be eaten same with Lauren I sat with bated breath hoping for a miracle but expecting the same results. This story has grown to become one of my favourite stories and I can't wait to read more. Happy writing.Reviewer: Zoleka Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 15 2016 03:24 pm
I can't bring myself to watch the Walking Dead tv show, but I find myself reading your updates at 2 in the morning.
Your writing is so vivid that I find myself cheering our girl own when she is carrying Dillion or fighting zombies. She is not perfect or skilled but she is getting there. You have true talent in being able to make us feel your characters pain and hunger. So glad she has Dillion because she would have given up when Lauren met her end. She is a fighter and a survivor---it has always been in her.
I see Casey was still mad at her as she was being ripped apart. For some reason, I think Conner survived, evil usually does.
I am eagerly awaiting the next update. Thank you!Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: April 14 2016 07:02 am
I hope that the person conected to that voice will be friendly. Nava needs a break and so does litle Dillon. Thank you for updating!!Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 14 2016 03:35 am
I LOVE it! I legit cried whe Jack and Lauran died. So much emotion in this story. Keep it comin please.
Thank you so much I appreciate the encouragement I hope this story continues to meet your expectations. Next update hopefully in the next few days with new character list.Reviewer: amazing Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 11 2016 11:08 am
I am sad that Jack died, good thing the little boy came with her as Nava would've been dead. Lauren is dead that makes me sad as well, but Casey needs to left that little girl is hateful!! I really want Nava to toughen up!! I can't wait to meet the new man who will be her love interst, but will she quit being stupid?
Thank you for your review and yeah she's starting to catch on though I think she'll always have her dumb moments.Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: March 07 2016 02:11 pm
Hope you keep updating...though it's basically another version of the walking dead, it's well written...
Thank you! I appreciate your feedback and I'm glad you approve of my writing. When I first started writing my story I had no intention of it being like the walking dead. The only similarities I really see between the two is the actual undead and the fact that both characters are fighting to survive. However I hope you continue to read and enjoy my story. Until then...Reviewer: jahchannah Signed [Report This]
Date: March 07 2016 06:56 am
I forgive you and hope everything is all right now for you. Despite what is happening in your life, I really appreciate your respect for us, readers, with your determination to finish this excellent story.
You manage suspense like no one ! What did he do to Nava ?! Casey is THIS child, you know. the one whose stupid actions always bring bad luck to the characters...yes, this one...
I love that you take the time to develop Nava's personality. I think there's a difference between being automatically attached to a character because she's the main character and the love interest, and being attached to a character because we came to understand her. Your pace allowed me to meet her, pity her, give her the super side-eye, despise her cowardice, root for her and finally love her. It gives us the chance to really appreciate her as a person and get attached to her because we know where she comes from.
I tend to focus on the romance, look for the love interest like a mad woman and demand to only read about their interactions. To the point of being more interested about their relationship development, than the characters themselves and more importantly, be frustrated when the author take one tiny chapter to develop the story in which they evolve. Nowadays, being able to keep the readers' curiosity in a story devoid of romance, is really tough. That's why your pace is perfect and your talent rare.
Anyway, excellent update. I'm more than eager to read the next chap AND the second part!!
Thank you I appreciate your feedback. I was nervous that I was going a bit too slow but part 2 of the story starts in chapter 16 and that's really where you meet her final love interest. Glad you stuck with me this long and I hope you enjoy the next chapter.Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]
Date: February 05 2016 05:34 pm
@Kellyme, no, it is not wrong to want to smack the piss out of that kid. I would suggest tripping her so the walking dead can get her.
I don't think Conner had time to rape Nava, but he did some serious physical damage. Tyler and Conner are killers and can restore their kind of order, but in the meantime, Jack and the others need to get to stepping.
It takes a while to update, but thsi story is so good and scary...I never have to go back to refresh my memory.
Yes I'm Sorry for the beyond late update i kinda lost my inspiration to write and became a borderline workaholic lol but I'm back I plan on completing this story. Thank you for sticking with me and reviewing. Till next time....Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29 2016 02:13 am
The sooner they get out of the warehouse the better. I keep thinking that while Conner is on his power high his going to come after Nava and demand they finish what Nava started . By the way I'm courious about those lines at the beginning of the first 3 chapters did you write those.
Before the chapter actually starts those are actually lyrics to some cool songs that relate to the chapter. Thanks for the feedback.Reviewer: Zoleka Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 27 2015 08:13 pm
Connor and Tyler are crazy as hell!÷ Nava is one incident away from a complete mental collapse. Why is Nava still numb in the head? I want to see her truly toughen up!!
Thank you so much for your feedback. Yeah Tyler and Connor have gone off the deep end, I imagine that they were like this on a smaller scale before the collapse of civilization and now there isn't any laws or moral codes being enforced to keep that side of them controlled. It's like a small part of ones self that's made up of what a person really wants to do. Like if someone at work makes you mad and a small part of you is like "if I didn't need this job I'd knock him or her out" but Tyler and Connors side is just a little more crazy. As far as Nava goes she is toughening up the numbness she's feeling is her body and mind trying to protect itself by detaching from the situation. It's kind of like going into shock (the minds way of protecting itself from further mental damage). You can't go through things and see things that Nava has seen and not be affected. Some rape victims go into a state of detachment as there mind shuts down because there not able to handle the mental trauma of being violated, Nava was almost raped by Connor. People who view murders most times have nightmares and mental breakdowns because of the shock, Nava just witnessed a brutal murder of someone who virtually saved her. Then she was forced to move the body and now with Tyler in somewhat control she fears for her life. Sometimes true strength isn't how you handle something but how much you can handle. In this story I'm pushing Nava to the mental limits. I'm trying to push her so far out of her comfort zone and past her limitations and see what she becomes. She can even breakdown and shut down completely or endure until the end. She has to survive yes physically but the real battle is surviving mentally. I know this answer was a bit winded but I just like talking about it. I hope I answered your question if you have anymore feel free to ask. Again thank you for your feedback.Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27 2015 04:20 am
Casey is going to turn on Nava soon.
Jack is using wisdom.
Nava is slowly coming into her own--through trauma, but still she is getting stronger.
Conner knows Tyler is psychotic, and will take out Tyler if need be, but for now he is using him for back up.
Poor Darrell & friends.
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Date: May 24 2015 05:26 pm
Now, Lauran witnessed why Nava and Jack wanted to make an unnoticed disappearance. They better stay under the psychos'radar. Especially Nava, since Tyler fantasizes about torturing her and Connor wants her. Casey better not betray them. But before they leave, I hope Lisa and her "demon seed" get what they deserve, in whatever form karma chooses....hehehehe!!! (whatever villain laugh style). Poor Darrel, he should have known better, what a waste, he could have been a valuable member to Nava's group outside the shelter.
As you explained in the previous chap intro, I love that you decided to make Nava stronger before any love interest. Too bad for Connor, he seemed to be a fine piece. Great job !Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 09:47 am
This is so hauntingly beautiful, I love this story. I pray that they are able to escape, they have a better shot at surviving out there with the living dead then in the warehouse with the 2 psychos. Loved it can't wait for the next update.Reviewer: Zoleka Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 07:30 am
Powerful. Ive been really looking forward to this update and you didnt dissapoint.Reviewer: nikol Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 24 2015 07:16 am
Girl, I so looove your style !! This chapter was intense, loved it ! I hope Darrel will be careful, Connor is conniving, he'll see him as a threat to his reign. An accident can always happen... At the same time, I hope he won't cower. It's ironical, Nava wanted to give Ciara the same fate, and Connor wanted to expel her for this. Now, Tyler did the unthinkable, and he just covers his ass! Something is fishy here... Needless to say I can't wait to read the next instalment !!!! Great job girl.
Thank you so much I appreciate the feedback.Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03 2015 03:31 pm
Darrel about to die because that crazy ass Connor is going to take him out. I was really hoping that Lisa was dead, that heifer and spawn are still alive. Tyler needs to die a horrific death!! Connor may be fine but he's crazy as hell!! I should have had some popcorn when I read these chapters. Awesome sauce!!!Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: May 02 2015 08:07 pm