Sad to see the other version go, I liked it, but muses are finicky like that. I enjoyed the first chapter, can't wait to see what's in store! I will say that I was a little thrown off by the age of Simone, being 68 with the youngest of her grandchildren being 28 means she became a grandma around 33 or 34. It doesn't really have any bearing on the story, but I thought I would point it out anyway. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Thanks for the review. Elements for the last version will remain....the story just was unraveling...there was no clear consistency....as for Simone's age...that will come later..I can assure you that will come around later. I have done the ages like that deliberately. But thanks for mentioning it. :)Reviewer: Akira Jade Signed [Report This]
Date: September 27 2015 02:03 pm
I'm in love. You are a talented writier thus far. Your summary definitely grabbed my attention. I used to live in Tallahassee when I attended FAMU. Its nice to read about a familiar place.
Hope you update soon!
I had to switch up the location because I thought of doing it from the jump...it also helps that I lived there for 10 years and am a FSU Alum! The hubby is a FAMU alum lol!Reviewer: KeiKei Signed [Report This]
Date: September 23 2015 03:32 am