Thank you for the reviews the good and the bad. You guys are way cool, even the ones that got on me about my lack of warnings and spacing, thank u again.
Chapter 5 is actually kind of done, just waiting for the editing/beta-reader... I so need them.Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2016 02:57 am
This is really good! I'm enjoying this!Reviewer: Alexandria Glass Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 05 2016 03:12 pm
WTF!!!!!!!!!!!! Vincent has no redeeming qualities, I hate that a*hole. He needs to eat his own s**t and die.Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: January 01 2016 05:11 pm
I don't like Enrique either. They are both lunatics but Vincent's a special lunatic regarding Ember. Enrique or Ignacio will have to kill Vincent or they will die a horrible death. Vincent dude you need to calm down. He act like he's a 15yr old getting his first sniff of the vajayjay. He took more time to prepare her on the river bank for the first reconnection then he has since. Does he think he will overpower her hate of him with these tactics. I am just curious to see where you take this story and how it will end: Vincent, Enrique or neither.Reviewer: lajack1 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01 2016 05:21 am
Her shoulders were hunched as if she were attempting to make herself smaller.
This made me stabby. Good going Sinclairs. you've raised a delusional monster. Parents of the Year.
I hope she castrates him. And then slit his throat. He is sick mofo. And his "pals" are scum.Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01 2016 01:13 am
If you need to select multiple warnings in your story, hold down 'CTRL' and select as many warnings as you'd would like when you are editing your story. There was some formatting/spacing issues with your chapters 3 and 4. I manually went in and corrected the issue. I hope your story's formatting looks okay to you now and if you need any more assistance, just let me know. Happy writing!
Thank you for the CTRL and the formatting issue, yeah I noticed it but forgot to check on it right before I submitted my work. Thank you again.Reviewer: Missus James Signed [Report This]
Date: December 31 2015 06:58 pm
PLEASE FOR THE LOVE OF GOD PUT SOME SPACING IN YOUR STORY!!
I really enjoyed the first 2 parts but I can't read these last 2 chapters like this!Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 31 2015 06:39 pm
The writting is bizzare too small all collage impossible to read. I'm gonna give up on that story. too bad it was a good startReviewer: Benedicte Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 31 2015 02:37 pm
Holy shit girl! Your writing is so goddamn good, I'm almost rooting for Vincent. I love the way you've laid this story out, the character development is on point! I'm not sure I'm lkin this new character that wants Ember for himself though. I kinda want to see if Vincent is able to convince Ember, over time, to understand his obsession/undying devotion to her and fall for him too. Yes, I understand this is a dark story of an attacker and a vctim, I get that, but I gotta be honest. I've often wondered how many have ended up with their stalker, not knowing they were surveiled and watched for long periods of time. They just thought the guy was really sweet and attentive, and into them.
Anyway, Great writing! The imagery leaps off the page. Keep up the good work!!
Date: December 30 2015 08:02 am
After reading the reviews, I will say that Ember wasn't taking "pleasure" out of being repeatedly raped. Orgasm is a physical response to the body being stimulated, whether there are feelings involved or not. There is nothing about what is happening to her that she's enjoying. She is the victim here. Ember, unbeknownst to her, has been stalked over the years by a person she's known half her life, who has attempted, and now succeeded in kidnapping and raping her. He's crazy, violent and a criminal. And it appears he's trying to break her through rape. Plus, now his partner has taken an interest in Ember, in order to do more of the same or worse.
Poor Ember. All I want is for her to somehow get away from these nuts intact. and put them in jail.Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2015 04:08 am
So sorry, I was editing my response to chapter 1 and accidently erased my responses and 2 comments.
The 2 reveiwers if you dont mind reposting your comments, I would greatly appreciate that.
To the reviewer of 1., 2., and 3.
1. Chapter 1 takes place in the present. There will be flashbacks, at least 2 so far. I dont want to give anything else away... so please read on to follow the sequence of the story.
2. The image I used; I thought her expression represented how she felt or will feel about her situation and I thought her complexion was carmel (her face that is), but then maybe I should check the tint setting on my monitor.
3. And I think you inquired about this being a dark romance, it is. I do not take offense to your comments for 1 and 2, or even 3.Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: December 29 2015 03:16 am
Read this story on Literotica. I hope you will finish it, because I like the development of the characters. Some of the readers will not care for this story. They will get over it. Thank you BainReviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 28 2015 10:07 pm
This is a great dark love story. I followed it form Lit, please don't change the format just because it does not fit the ideal flowery romance of some readers.Reviewer: LOVE Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 28 2015 09:44 pm
Is that rapist the male lead ? if he is( and i guess he is), i just don't know what to say... like the previous reviewer said this story should have a rape warning, cause if i knew i definitly would have not red it. Too many women are raped every day and maybe some of the readers here. it's very disturbing to see the lead female taking pleasure while being raped. I really don't want my review to offend you but right now i feel really offended. Sorry and take care
Your right, I spent nearly an hour on trying to select that as an additional warning, I will resubmit and try to add that as well as BDSM. It would not let me select those extra warnings as well. I do apologize. I will work on it right now.Reviewer: siobhan Signed [Report This]
Date: December 28 2015 07:44 pm
You should have a rape warning because that disturbing and horrific. When I saw the summary I was intrigued but there was no indication that that would happen if I knew I wouldn't have bothered readingReviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 28 2015 05:13 pm