Good story with a plot. Hope one day u finish it. Is it published?
Reviewer: Cju Signed [Report This]Date: 24/04/16 11:30 pm
this is one story that i wished had more chapters. Please look inside yourself and start writing this story again>
Reviewer: sandra Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 04/04/15 04:45 am
this is one story that i wished had more chapters. Please look inside yourself and start writing this story again>
Reviewer: sandra Anonymous [Report This]Date: 04/04/15 04:44 am
This is cool, and I noticed the following stories are complete too, yippee... I know that was lame, but whatever! :)
Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]Date: 27/02/15 05:32 am
Great sequel!
Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]Date: 09/05/12 05:30 pm
OMG - this was an awesome fic! I so want to know what happens next...
Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]Date: 09/05/12 05:16 pm
This story can't be finished!
There can be so much more!
Author's Response:
This is the beginning of a series. There's more for you to read!
Reviewer: Jamilla Anonymous [Report This]Date: 20/04/12 05:21 pm
Great beginning I hope you continue soon
Author's Response:
This has been continued. Click on the series "New Beginnings"
Reviewer: Kishua35 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 06/04/12 04:24 pm
WOW! Henrietta has a very loving heart for the human race in general because, if I were in her shoes I never could have given a bone marrow donation to a biological father whom she has never known because he coldly abandoned her mother who had been a virgin, abandoned her and never looked back not even in thought after her mother told him she was pregnant. And he had told her young mother that he loved her. That surely made her mother's experience doubly painful because she loved Henry and believed he was in-love with her!
Very interesting idea for a short story Brenda1257 and thank you for writing it. Interestingly, even for this just one chapter these characters and their history were very clear to me and I felt their personal feelings and thoughts, due to your good writing!
Brava!
Author's Response:
LOl Keep reading. I'm updating this with every holiday. Valentines will be up soon, but I haven't even started that yet.
Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed [Report This]Date: 26/01/12 09:08 am
Wow, that was amazing! Henrietta is a truly good person. I hope Henry truly appreciates it.
Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed
[Report This]Date: 13/01/12 08:14 pm
Wow! Henry is something else. I hope he doesn't hurt Vanessa. Henny is another story. She will be less forgiving. What's the next holiday? and are we limited to American holdiays? :-}
Reviewer: BellaChica Signed [Report This]Date: 02/01/12 05:37 am
I don't know if it is your intention or not...but the character of Henry still leaves me cold...he is a very weak-minded and selfish individual...I know we all make mistakes in our youth...but what he did to Vanessa and then by extension was so incredibly unjust...I can't at this time root for him...they say that having a life-threatening illness changes a person...and by Henny giving him a second chance at life...he is out to rectify the past...what you've described of Henry's personality goes beyond just a youthful mistake...but is more like a huge character flaw at his core...
I would have thought that breaking through Vanessa's barriers would have been more difficult than Henny's...she is the one who faced direct rejection and she was the one who was left pregnant, alone, and heart-broken by Henry's cowardice...but there she is...accepting this man back not only in her bed...but back into her fragile heart....I understand more clearly Henny's resentment...it makes sense to me...if left up to this weak man and his parents...she might not even exist now...this is a very interesting story indeed...so glad you gifted us with another intriguing chapter in their saga...
Thank you again...I look forward to where you take this story...and I didn't overlook that no mention of protection was msde in Henry's and Vanessa's more recent encounter...wonder what Henny will make of that and what will the result of her parents' carelessness...excellent writing as always...
Author's Response:
Thank you for your in depth review. Yes, Henry is weak, but he's working on it. All men are not Alpha and strong. Henry's flaw is that he was born sickly with a silver spoon in his mouth, being waited on hand and foot. Of course by the time he had to make an adult decision at 19 never having to have to live in the real world, he did what was easy.
The good part is that Henry had a conscious. He knew he was wrong and was filled with self loathing. He deliberately married a lesbian because he didn't feel that he deserved to be loved again. He wouldn't date because he felt that he wasn't worthy to be loved after what he did to Vanessa. He went aimlessly through life, just existing. He was rich in money, but poor in health and spirit...until Henrietta.
When he realized that his daughter was his salvation, he felt that God was giving him a second chance to get things right. When he went to Vanessa, he didn't go with the intent to seduce her and she certainly didn't expect to end up in bed with him. But the vow they had made to God never left their subconscious minds and when they kissed, all their pent up emotions came pouring out.
Now they are at a crossroads in their relationship. Henry has not won her back, and Vanessa will back off from Henry because of her daughter. It will be an interesting journey.
Henry has to go through some things to become a stronger man. He will have to fight for what he wants which is something money can't buy.
You don't have to be on his side, but know that with his second chance, he would give his very life before he hurts either of the two women again.
Brenda
Reviewer: attheritz Signed [Report This]Date: 31/12/11 02:19 pm
You've done it again. I am so addicted to all your stories.<p>Henry and Vanessa have long way to go. I don't know if anyones pick this up but Henry didn't use protection. I can't wait to see what happens next.</p><p>Please update soon.</p>
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. No they didn't use protection. Their sexual encounter was totally unplanned and they both got caught up in the moment. I will update for the next challenge/holiday. I was thinking about MLK Day. A story for that holiday would be quite interesting. Valentines day will be easier. LOL Stay tuned!
Reviewer: juno Signed [Report This]Date: 31/12/11 11:29 am
like the pics
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: 31/12/11 06:03 am
I love this story...I truly understand her feelings
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: 31/12/11 06:03 am
Mom was receptive,but not daughter. He has a long way to go to win her over.
Reviewer: bayoumomma Anonymous [Report This]Date: 31/12/11 04:42 am
How about Goerge Clooney? OR Oded Fehr? Perhaps McSteamy?
Author's Response:
LOL PM I dont want Clooney, but I will have to look at Pix of Oded Fehr and who is McStemy? LOL
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: 31/12/11 01:31 am
Your cast is great!
Reviewer: sandra Anonymous [Report This]Date: 31/12/11 12:19 am
love the story so far :)
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/12/11 09:48 pm
Brenda I normally love your choice in male cast members but I am not a fan of Christian Bale. Christian don't do nothing for me, he don't rock my boat. Oh well, I still love the story!!! Happy New Year!!!
Author's Response:
I was having a hard time with the cast on this one. I am looking for a dark haired handsome man. Any recommendations? I'm willing to switch. LOL
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: 30/12/11 08:13 pm
Great update!!
I learned the hard way that children have no business getting involved with much less taking sides in matters of the heart between parents.
Henny has a right to take or reject Henry as she deems fit and as her heart and conscience can bear. However, she neesd to stay out of grown folks business. Her mother and Henry's relationship is separate from that of either one as a parent.
Henry needs to work on bulding something between both lades.
Brenda, I guess a Valentine story would be too obvious and too soon if Henry is gong to beat the new year's resolution odds. Perhaps for Easter. Or Mother's Day!!!
Author's Response:
Im sure I will have a Valentines day story, but that doesn't mean that he will have won them over by then. This is going to be a journey. I can guarantee you that. His resolution is to get his family back. That doesn't mean that it's going to happen right away or even the first year. He is just going to work on their relationship. He's not going to give up, come what may.
Have a happy new year!
Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed [Report This]Date: 30/12/11 06:44 pm
BRAVA!!!!!! loved it!!!! maybe we can catch up with these two on valentines!!!! vanesssas not too old to have another baby!! more please!
Author's Response:
LOL Vanessa is only forty about to turn 41. She's not too old, but that doesn't mean she wants another baby...but she did have unprotected sex with her baby daddy....uh oh....
Reviewer: brownskingurl Anonymous [Report This]Date: 30/12/11 03:50 pm
Good cast. Thanks
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 30/12/11 03:04 pm
Thanks for a great read. I was a little surprised that Vanessa caved in so easily. But Henry is her first and only love. The heart wants what the heart wants. As for his marriage just wow. Henry's parents are a mess, especially his father. Looking forward to read what happens next. Hopefully, Henny will come around. I thought that the things that she said to her mother was awful. Thanks
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 30/12/11 03:03 pm