I'm wondering if dad knew she was seeing someone outside her culture and made up this story to break them apart. Loved the beginning of your story!
Author's Response:
Hey bayoumomma
Thanks so much! The beginning of a story is always the highlight for me until you need to write the rest of it...LOL!!! Jengo is all about control and since he lost that control over his wife he needed to focus it on his daughter...Thanks for giving such an awesome review!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed
[Report This]Date: 25/04/10 02:00 am
Wow, this is so good Chocolate. I feel so sorry for Zuri loneliness she flet for the last few years and she and Peter has decided to moved on, but I have a feeling that the moment they see each other again, they aren't going to be able to move on as they first thought. Zuri's home life seem so dated yet she was there for her brothers. Her step-mother is a trip and and father some had been more understand to Zuri feelings, but at the located and culture of her people, it may not happen. Peter's parents are so concern for their son, but he are pushing them away because of his heartache. Hopefully time and love will heal Zuri's and Peter's heart especially with each other. :) Thanks for updating dear
Author's Response:
*hugs* Thanks for all your support M!
This is the type of home life that African women have to deal with sometimes and others have it much worst than this. Like I told another reviewer don't expect Zuri's father to come to her aid because they feel entitled, they are the kings of their castle.
As for Peter he believes moving to London will help him get over Zuri but he doesn't understand as yet that moving away won't solve anything. His love for her was so deep that it overwhelms his sensibilities but he will have to face her one day. It has to happen.
Of course you know me M, we are both hopeless romantics!...LOL!!! Always good to read your excellent reviews!
Reviewer: Megumi Signed [Report This]Date: 08/04/10 07:35 pm
Loved the update. I'm feeling for Zuri. Her life is being stifled at 26yrs. Why is it her stepmom not taking over her responsibility and doing more instead of causing strife??? Her dad needs to step up to the plate also. Now that her brothers are off, maybe Zuri can now have her life back. Its as if Zuri is the maid, so sad.
Author's Response:
Thanks for posting such a wonderful review and giving me an awesome rating!
Zuri will shoulder a lot of responsibility because she is the daughter of the former wife. She is lucky that her father didn't put her out on the streets (its that sort of thinking) So don't expect her father to step up to assist her. Right now Zuri has accepted her fate but we'll see how long she will truly accept it.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 08/04/10 08:09 am
YAY - I was so happy to see the update on this story! Loved the chapter, a great read, and I feel so sorry for the couple...can't wait to see what's happens next!
Author's Response:
I'm happy to see that you are enjoying the story so far. For now they are a heartbreaking couple but who knows what is in store for them. Not even the author knows could you believe...lol!! Thanks for posting a review!
Reviewer: aprilool Anonymous [Report This]Date: 08/04/10 01:03 am
When will they run into each other? I don't like Zuri's father he is a selfish jerk. He deserves his wife. He should tell his new wife about herself and her treatment of his daughter. The daughter that he made give up her life of promise for one of stagnation and no promise. Can you tell that I don't like her father?
Author's Response:
Patience grasshopper...LOL!!!! It's just the culture of men in their country and they expect women to cater to them. They expect women to give up their lives because they ask them to or suffer the consequences. So yes I can tell that you don't like the father...LOL!!! Thanks for posting your review!
Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]Date: 07/04/10 09:46 pm
Great beginning Chocolate. I felt their pain so much. Please continue this story soon!! *HUGS*
Author's Response:
Thanks M,
I'm trying to apply some emotional qualities to my characters even though its hard to find the words sometimes. Visualization is easy but the words are difficult...lol!!! Don't worry I am putting my fingers to the keyboard but all the rewriting in my head now that will be the problem...LOL!!! Have a Happy Easter mi amiga. Thanks for being so awesome!
Reviewer: Megumi Signed [Report This]Date: 31/03/10 06:48 pm
What Language is that?
Author's Response: Weird, the language is Swahili but I try my best not to go deeply or I may be putting down a wrong word or phrase...LOL!!
Date: 27/03/10 11:15 pm
Great opening chapter...I really loved reading it and I could really feel the characters' emotions.
Author's Response: R., Thank you so much because I wanted to bring that across to my readers because that has been one my failures in some of my stories. I know I haven't really arrived there as yet but I'm still working on it. Readers need to feel part of what you're writing. Thanks for giving me such an awesome review!
[Report This]Date: 27/03/10 04:27 am
Great start!! Very, very sad start!!
I look forward to reading more!!
I also love, love the banner.
Hmmm... you're working on the next chapter, right?
Author's Response: Bluegardenia, I'm happy that you enjoyed both the first chapter and my banner for this story. The reason why I told readers that I won't be updating quickly because some are familiar with me posting a new chapter weekly but I've decided not to force the issue with this story. Everyday new words, phrases, ideas pop into my head and I don't want to regret leaving some things out like I did for my other stories. Yes I am working on the next chapter. Thanks for giving me such an awesome review! Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed
[Report This]Date: 26/03/10 06:20 am
Interesting start.
Author's Response:
baha_malo, happy you found the first chapter...interesting...lol! Also thanks for giving me such an awesome rating!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed
[Report This]Date: 26/03/10 12:52 am
That was a sad beginning to what I hope will be a wonderful story. Please don't wait to long for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks pmgayles and I also hope that I don't take too long to post the next chapter or I might be forced to remove the whole story which would be sad.
Date: 25/03/10 11:45 pm
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Renee, thanks so much for reading and posting an awesome review! Reviewer: Renee Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 25/03/10 11:33 pm
OMG..that so sad! Great start for a story, love the cast and charcters! So looking forward to next chapter - soon I hope...!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for enjoying the beginning of my tale. Yes I have started working on the next chapter that I hope I can post at the right time.
Date: 25/03/10 11:30 pm