Bomb of Sex: Leto S. Bourges
Reviewer: TRaberah EH Signed
[Report This]Date: 10/07/11 04:38 am
dude, first off. loooooooooooove me some Tom Hardy. i'm convinced once we meet, he will leave that bird and take up with me instantaneously.
two, i'm excited for this. not even really sure where you're taking it, but from this first chapter, i trust you.
also, i'm not sure if you may have meant 'gobsmacked'. godsmacked is a bit more yankee. but godsmacked is cool too. lol
Author's Response: Your absolutel right, I did mean gobsmacked. Microsoft word is messing with my story, lol. Thanks for reading Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed
[Report This]Date: 08/12/10 11:56 pm
A good start; I really like that you used the gent from Luther. Can't wait to read more!
One thing, though -- I think you mean "Lucius" for your character's name; it's a bit distracting to think that he's named "Luscious" -- which calls to mind some sort of performer.
Author's Response:
I thought about changing his name to Lucius, but have a friend who's name is Luscious but we pronounce it Lucius. When I asked him why that was, he said that his mother told him it meant 'light' so it kinda stuck with me. But I am going to change it so I don't confuse people, Thanks for reading!
Reviewer: alices Signed [Report This]Date: 08/12/10 04:11 am
More please =)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading
Date: 07/12/10 04:52 pm
Interesting start.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 07/12/10 07:09 am