Great update. Hopefully, Victor can remain civil with everyone. I am sure Magneto had something to do with the wiping of his memories.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed
[Report This]Date: 17/03/11 07:21 pm
For some reason I thought once Xavier saw that it wasn't him he'd stay around and try and woo Storm back, but I guess this really just highlighted the reasons he left her in the first place.
At least now he'll be upfront about it, though I doubt it's going to go smoothly or easily, even if Storm thought she wanted him to go, getting him back then losing him will just make everything harder.
Interesting way to show what's in Victor's mind. I was expecting a look into what he did the night before, not hsi actual mind. I wonder how it would look/does look after he commits a violent crime, although, from the Victor we see who *knows* himself, he could do it without turning crazed.
Great chapter as usual!
Author's Response: You've hit the nail on the head. They're going to have a "come to Jesus" moment. In the next Chapter. Reviewer: Jammi Signed
[Report This]Date: 17/03/11 07:02 pm
Storm, Storm, you can't save the devil.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 17/03/11 07:01 pm
Oh my what happened to Storm. I hope that her team saved her. Thanks
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 17/03/11 06:48 pm
Oh poor Storm. She is still in love with Victor.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 17/03/11 06:18 pm
What happened to Victor? He is more of a monster now than before. Thanks
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 17/03/11 06:13 pm
Good start to the story. Not sure how I missed this one but glad that I found it now. Storm and Victor wow. They were smoking together.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: 17/03/11 06:08 pm
Please continue this story.
Author's Response: I am. It's a work in-progress. It's going up slowly, because I am swamped with real life. But do not fear, it WILL be completed. There are three more chapters that have yet to go up, but are already written. I'm updating when I can.
[Report This]Date: 17/03/11 05:58 pm
I loved it but I feel that mystery man is setting him up!!! Who is this mystery man??? Please reveal him soon.
Author's Response: I'm working on it. Slowly, but surely.
[Report This]Date: 11/03/11 06:52 am
Each chapter of this story is better than the last. Loving this a lot.
Author's Response: Thank you.
[Report This]Date: 11/03/11 02:42 am
Did Victor kill those people? I don't think he did, but I could be wrong.
Aww, I love the way he watches her. You can tell that Victor really loves her.
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response:
He watches her. He loves her, yes, but he's also realistic to know that there are things about himself that are incompatible with a "normal" relationship. Which sort of echos his inner struggle.
Thank you for keeping up with this. I appreciate it. and I am glad you are enjoying it.
Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
[Report This]Date: 11/03/11 12:05 am
DANG, DANG. DIGGITY DAMN IT! Why oh WHY did it have to end, man!!! Dang it! I SO wanted Victor and Ororo to talk.
PuHLEEZE update soon!
Thanks for updating.
Author's Response: lol! Isn't that the joy of a cliffhanger? They'll be talking soon! I promise. In Chapter 11...
[Report This]Date: 10/03/11 07:45 pm
I don't think he did it. If he had I doubt he would've come back annnd he wouldn't feel the need to explain to Storm since she'd know why he left, he butchered a bunch of people.
I love that scene where he sees her with the little mixed child. I am really enjoying the way you're showing his softer side while keeping it believable to his character.
Author's Response: That is my favorite scene in this. I just really felt it was fitting. For Victor, its a glimpse of "what could have been" and for him, gives him a dose of a reality he's rejected. Now he's paying for the consequences of his actions. And they're painful. The sort of pain he's caused to others. Karma. Reviewer: Jammi Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/03/11 06:16 pm
Great update! I hope Victor isn't guilty, but then again why does he feel like he needs to leave..? Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Well...it's getting tense in the house, that's for sure. But Voctor isnt really the kind of guy to hang out and overstay his welcome. He's a restless creature, not really at "home" anywhere, except one place, which I think, he sort of feels he cant go back too, but at the same time, is drawn to.
Date: 10/03/11 05:24 pm
Aww, I felt bad for Victor. The man lay his heart at her feet.
O boy, someone is serioulsy about to piss Victor off by effing with his woman.
Author's Response: Yes he did. I admit, I did pull from personal experience with this particular part. But I really felt it was quite true to life, and given the way they separated, it wouldn't make sense for it to be any other way. :) Reviewer: Cholyn Signed
[Report This]Date: 03/03/11 08:41 am
Poor Victor trying his best, the only way he knows how. At least she got her necklace back.
She is home to him. That is the best.
Who I wonder is watching in the wings thinking that they are pulling the strings? Love it.
Author's Response:
To be honest...I am still debating on the identity of that person/ group. Im looking at two options, one which plays on the movie-verse, and one that pulls from the comics...good thing I'm doing a sequel!
Reviewer: Acorn Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 03/03/11 05:11 am
Oooooooooooo the suspense! Lol, awesome writing though. This story just sucks me in.
Author's Response: Oh, I am glad. :)
[Report This]Date: 02/03/11 04:30 am
Nice flow, nice chapter. Love the dynamic between Ororo and Victor, especially Victor’s love for her. How amazing it is that the tiniest woman can bring the beast man to his knees.
Thanks for the update, I'm enjoying the story immensely.
Author's Response: Im glad you're enjoying it. This is my first foray into XMen fanfic so I'm really working to capture the voices and present characters that are well-rounded. Reviewer: JV4ME Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 02/03/11 01:45 am
Great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you!
[Report This]Date: 01/03/11 11:50 pm
Great update! I love the way you've written Victor, the character, his inner turmoil - can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Victor Creed is a complex creature. I really enjoy writing him.
Date: 01/03/11 10:00 pm
Loved the update. Wonder who the mystery person is????
Author's Response: The sad part is...I DONT KNOW! Im debating on two antagonists: one that most people will know from the movie-verse...and another that pulls from the comics...Im going to have to make a decision soon though...
[Report This]Date: 01/03/11 09:58 pm
How much do I love the contrast between him being a hired killer who doesn't care about anything and enjoys the way he destroys people to him trying to express to her that she was too important for him to lose because of his nature? Very, very much.
I love the fact that he tried to express himself through the necklace how much she means to him, even if in teh end that's not how it came across.
And I should've known it wouldn't just be about him trying to win her back and getting his memory back while dealing with the fact that he enjoys killing things. Who is that watching from the shadows?
Great chapter as usual, love the emotions you manage to get across and the fact that even when he's trying to apologize or explain he doesn't lose his character.
Author's Response:
Its a really emotional scene, but Victor's not an emotional guy. So trying to keep his voice intact, while preserving his character was hard. This scene took a while to write, but I am glad it came out well. As for the person lurking in the shadows...sigh...I am STILL debating on two possibilities: one from the movieverse, one from the comic verse...Im waiting on the muse to come to a decision.
Reviewer: Jammi Signed
[Report This]Date: 01/03/11 08:19 pm
This is so good. I love your writing and your interpretation of these charcters.
Please update soon.
[Report This]Date: 19/02/11 05:48 pm
I felt bad for Ororo. I can't imagine how cheap she felt once she'd realized he'd gone and left her with a choker for services rendered. Her anger was a thing of beauty
Reviewer: Cholyn Signed [Report This]Date: 18/02/11 08:25 am
Had to get that off her chest did she? Payment? Well, that's certainly one way to see things. I am fairly sure he meant it as a non comparable gift. The closest he could get to expressing how valuable he thought she was/is. But one man's gift is one woman's pain here.
I love that you are actually writing this. Most authors I know, have let it go by now or just turned it into a oneshot. i love that you are still going.
Author's Response: You are spot-on with regard to the necklance. And trust me, there's more for these two brewing. I don't know whether to keep it all in one story or break it up into a sequel or a trilogy, but I know I am nearing the end of this first part. They aren't done with me, and I'm not done with them. Reviewer: Acorn Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/02/11 06:50 am