Interesting start but what's the story behind him leaving?? How old is she for him to be sneaking through her window in her mom's house???
It seems you have the same question as most: what's Ali's story? And I swear I will get to that, it's one of those things I'm hoping you'll come back for. As for their ages, neither of these characters is of legal drinking age. Do with that what you will. ~_^
Thank you so much for reading, I appreciate it.Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/05/11 06:16 pm
This is amazing, I am so so intrigued. It is a gorgeous one shot but I do hope you write more! Thank you so much!
I actually would like to write more and plan to now. Their story isn't quite finished, I'm afraid.
Thank you so much for reading this, your comment made me smile!Reviewer: dissociative_identity Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/05/11 05:30 pm
Please continue, this snap shot has more questions than answers. What I have read is brilliant.
That it does, indeed. I love asking questions and putting it out their for others to ask questions as well.
Thank you so much for reading, and I hope you come on back!Reviewer: bookacholic Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/05/11 04:51 pm
well I liked it but was confused b/c I didn't really understand who Adi was R Devin save 4 the girl who this guy is leavin behind I think U need 2 give us a little bk ground on these 2 & when U rite break it up think about giving her side & his N the story would make it more interesting read 'THE ONE' on here 4 an ex: P.S. keep writing Interested N where ur goin with this.
Devin is the girl being left, Ali is the guy doing the leaving. So far that is all the information given. Background will come soon enough. This was a preface to throw you into the story of two people you don't yet know to, hopefully, make you want to get to know them. ^_^
Thanks so much for reading.Reviewer: kvgurl Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/05/11 06:38 am
I want to read more, I want to know why Ali to leave? Why he acted like Devin's feelings didn't matter? Please continue!!
Ali, yes, there's a reason for him going. And I will explain it all in due time. He came off as a bit of a jerk, I know, but I have plans for that boy. You shall see.
Thanks so much for reading.Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/05/11 03:56 am