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Title: Chapter 1

i like the way you wrote this and it shows that you normally do spoken word but that just adds to your own unique style

 Reviewer: Viraz Vitalia Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/07/11 06:56 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Thank you all for your lovely responses.  I appreaciate your kind words.

LOL.  I just realized when I read it today how intense it was.  Eeep!

Thank you Adele for the inspiration and TheSouthernScribe for the oppurtunity.

 Reviewer: Kea Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/06/11 12:43 am
Title: Chapter 1

Wow this was really powerful. I feel like I felt her frustration, sorrow, and baited breath at the end. I think that your background in spoken word helps to convey the point maybe more than someone writing a fanfic. You should write more, it was really great!!!

 Reviewer: Alixermixer Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/06/11 03:20 am
Title: Chapter 1

That was excellent sweetie..it actualy read like spoken word..I could actually hear your voice telling this story....and that is not a bad thing..original, stirring, emotional and thrilling!!Excellent!

In such a short story I was caught 100% up in the emotion and my heart was with the Dominic's woman and her anguish, aniety and fear!!

It was very well done very..!!I wanted to know more but that much was enough!! You said so much with just afew words!

 Reviewer: neneburge Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/06/11 03:18 am
Title: Chapter 1

Interesting short. Wish there was to read.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 21/06/11 01:15 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very nice and real

 Reviewer: Moni Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/06/11 01:13 am
Title: Chapter 1

This was lovely. It reads lyrically like apiece of poetry. Great job.

 Reviewer: TheSouthernScribe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/06/11 12:03 am
Title: Chapter 1

Very, very powerful and poetic. As I was reading, I could almost feel her pain to see him leave and the tension she was feeling as she waited for him to come home. The street life isn't glamorous and when love is thrown into the mix it can get messy. The waiting game is a torturous one sometimes.

The poetic delivery behind your words deliver a deep punch and I like the sting. It's a shame that it's an one-shot, but the message is strong and satisfying. Thank you for sharing! :)

 Reviewer: Missus James Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/06/11 11:25 pm
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