OMG - this was an awesome fic! I so want to know what happens next...Reviewer: aprilfool Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 09/05/12 05:16 pm
This story can't be finished!
There can be so much more!
This is the beginning of a series. There's more for you to read!Reviewer: Jamilla Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 20/04/12 05:21 pm
Great beginning I hope you continue soon
This has been continued. Click on the series "New Beginnings"Reviewer: Kishua35 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06/04/12 04:24 pm
WOW! Henrietta has a very loving heart for the human race in general because, if I were in her shoes I never could have given a bone marrow donation to a biological father whom she has never known because he coldly abandoned her mother who had been a virgin, abandoned her and never looked back not even in thought after her mother told him she was pregnant. And he had told her young mother that he loved her. That surely made her mother's experience doubly painful because she loved Henry and believed he was in-love with her!
Very interesting idea for a short story Brenda1257 and thank you for writing it. Interestingly, even for this just one chapter these characters and their history were very clear to me and I felt their personal feelings and thoughts, due to your good writing!
LOl Keep reading. I'm updating this with every holiday. Valentines will be up soon, but I haven't even started that yet.Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/01/12 09:08 am
That was great, I hope you do continue with this story, love to see Henry explain to his parents that their unwanted black grandchild was the one saving their only son's life, it's a good thing she did not inherit the selfish gene from them.Reviewer: Jules Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 28/12/11 11:03 am
Damn Girl! This story is already good! I can not wait to read more! I do not know if I would have been that generous to the man who got my mother pregnant and abandoned her, because of my family. Wow, you write some powerful words!Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/12/11 08:27 pm
love your story. please up the good work.Reviewer: pocketrose Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 23/12/11 06:24 am
wow that was good! will there be more?
I have made it a series that I will update for the challenges. Most likely the next one will be New Years if there is a New Years challenge. Merry Christmas!Reviewer: brownskingurl Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 23/12/11 03:05 am
I hope there's more! Glad Henny put him in his place!Reviewer: Jujubee50 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/12/11 05:42 am
Wow, that's deep. I want more Brenda, lol!!!Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 22/12/11 04:15 am
See you can't write just one chapter, because now I want to know if Father and Daughter ever have a relationship and if Mom and Dad ever have a relationship. Great story either way!
Alright. Since everyone likes this story so much, I think I will make it a series and update when there are challenges, especially at holiday time. So I'll update for New Years. LOL.Reviewer: jovanfan4evr Signed [Report This]
Date: 22/12/11 01:52 am
Love it!!! You are an amazing writer.. You have me wanting to know what the outcome will be.
Thanks! Have a very merry Christmas!Reviewer: Reneek Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 21/12/11 05:46 pm
This was an amazing read. I know its just a one shot; but it would be great to see these characters again.
thanks Minerva! I'm trying to keep it a one shot. LOL. I may update it next Christmas unless the muse kidnaps my brain again. Have a merry Christmas!Reviewer: Minerva Vesta Signed [Report This]
Date: 21/12/11 05:31 pm
WOW, Very touching story. I wonder if Henny and Henry will build a relationship. Did Henry really love Vanessa? I mean if he really cared, he would have at least try to contact her secretly or something.
Please please continue with this story. Or at least make it a short one with 3 or 4 chapter. This is just too good for just one shot.
Thanks for the review. I'm really trying not to go there....LOL. Maybe next Christmas I will give an update unless the muse says otherwise. Have a very Merry Christmas.Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 21/12/11 05:12 pm
I KNOW I KNOW I KNOW that this is a challenge shot for Christmas, but I'm sorry this story asked so many questions like will Henry meet with Vanessa again, the bondness between Henry and Henrietta, and the reaction of Vanessa seeing Henry and etc...This is so good that it needs to like have three or five more chapters. This can't end...nooooooo!
Anyway, I love it and if I was in Henrietta's position; I would still do it. If you seek revenge on the person that did you wrong, then you are just 10x's as bad as that person. Revenge is never the answer, maturity and common sense is.
Henry and Vanessa story is so close to home with me because I had gone through the same outcome of my previous relationship, except the dude didn't try to make me take his money or anything and we don't have any children, but...I almost cried but didn't.
Henrietta making her speech to her father, Henry, was what kept me crying like a baby. Henry should've known better. That's all I could say. If you choose disappointment of others about your relationship over your true love, then to me...you're not strong enough to actually fall in love in the first place. However, you want that person back...you have to do anything in your power to make him/her trust you again. I know cheating is the worse thing that a anyone could do, but I think if someone dumps you because a person's family and friends don't agree with one's relationship because of race, status, or money and afraid to be disowned is just as bad. Just saying.
All in all good story Brenda. You did so good! MERRY CHRISTMAS!
Thanks for the wonderful review. I am very tempted to pick this up, but I have other stories I need to finish. I will say, however, that Henry really did love Vanessa. They were both on 19 and Henry was spoiled. Everything had always been handed to him and he lived a life surrounded by people who did everything for him. He didn't have any idea of how to take care of himself. He never forgot Vanessa and he never got over what he did. The wife he married was hand picked by his father and he really didn't love her. He never tried to find Vanessa because he was consumed with guilt about how he had treated her and he assumed that she had remarried and most likely hated him. He thought that cancer was his punishment for making Vanessa get an abortion, especially after his ex told him that she didn't want any children and left him.
Now Henry has his inheritance, a big mansion and no one to spend his life with...the life that his child gave him back. What will he do? I will only say that he will use all his efforts to right the wrongs he feel he had inflicted on the one person he knew that loved him unconditionally. Can he win Vanessa back? Can his child forgive him and come to terms and accept him. Who knows? If the muse allows, I will continue, otherwise it'll be next Christmas. LOL
Have a merry Christmas!Reviewer: luvrayne Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 21/12/11 05:08 pm