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Title: Fin.

I loved and understood this story.  After you have been abused and mistreated for you whole life you really don't know what good is until someone shows you and you take the time to feel the difference.  So I'm glad Li found what she needed she just needs to stop letting her family's ways rub off on her.

 

P.S. This ended so soon I would have love to see them reunite down the road.

Reviewer: kimyso Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/07/13 06:26 pm

Title: Fin.

truly touching story. And it's funny how people do and accept what they think they deserve. you see it over and over again and still fall into the trap yourself.

Reviewer: readwonderfully Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30/05/13 12:26 am

Title: Fin.

I really loved it!!! 

Reviewer: Loop Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 03/06/12 10:55 pm

Title: Fin.

I loved this prelude off to read more! I hope she finds Jake.

Reviewer: meme Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/01/12 06:50 pm

Title: Prey.

Oh my gosh my heart was in my throat! What an excellent story! Love the recommendation box. can't wait to read more from you... 

Reviewer: meme Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/01/12 06:38 pm

Title: Fin.

Alright, how could you end it here?  You know you have to pick it back up again.  LOL

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 13/12/11 08:00 pm

Title: Sever.

I'm loving this story.

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Date: 13/12/11 07:08 pm

Title: Fin.

That was a good story!

 Amir's death was an unexpected ending but, when Irene said he grabbed for the cops' gun I figured the police would shoot him to death.  In NYC cops shoot to kill a Black person at the first hint of violence and sometimes for no reason at all.  Perhaps, the cops have changed but years ago thru the 1980's some of the newspaper articles included and the shooting to death of an old Black woman who lived alone in her home (Eleanor Bumpers I think was her name) and another incidence of a very young Black child sitting on his own stoop, shot to death just because the White cop was having a "bad day".  Amir was a brutal man to Irene; so his habit of violence this time just drove him to show it definitely to the wrong persons.

It's a shame that Liandra lost Jake maybe they could have had a relationship, for however long it would last, still it would have been something; perhaps meaningful.

Thanks for this story DefunktDame, I enjoyed it and it was well written! 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 03:48 am

Title: Prey.

I am very surprised Liandra went to the apartment she had lived in with Amir by herself; or at least she should have waited until she knew he would not be home.  She knows he is brutal and likes to beat on her, so raping and brutality is what she should expect to receive by going there by herself.  That doesn't condone what he did but, I am surprised at her.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 03:04 am

Title: Gone, baby. Gone.

Well, Liandra's mean scornful words to Jake were in fact too much for him; he too being an abused person, now he's left Ms. Irene's!

I hope jake will be alright out there in the world again, alone again! 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 02:45 am

Title: Slut.

Maybe  Liandra's youthful horrible abuse and it's continuance with Amir have made it impossible to accept even a semblance of love, so she had to turn the loving intimacy that she and Jake shared last night into something base and meaningless.  I wonder if Jake will return to her but, he has been abused too, he probably has not that extra strength to take faith and ignore her words of pain.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 02:36 am

Title: Body Heat.

Liandra really needed that oil massage Jake gave her; Amir's injry to her back seems severe, all black and blue' but, LOL that did not stop her passionate enjoyment for her and Jake's sexing which was nice!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 02:20 am

Title: Liandra's Story.

AH!  Now, I know why Liandra was not afraid of Jake and could even perceive him romantically; her abusive young life was worse than Jake's because in addition to a lot of beatings she was continually raped by the men her father would sell her to.

Great story, Defunktdame and very good writing with well drawn characters! 

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 01:27 am

Title: Collision.

Good thing Jake came and helped Liandra or Amir would have hurt her more!  She really needs to get away from Amir permanently!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 01:11 am

Title: Jake's Story.

Liandra is something else, she goes right for the sex with Jake and only known him a week, plus he cuts on himself!  What's Liandra's story that she don't avoid intimacy with such a wierdo, he might kill her, she don't know!

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 01:02 am

Title: Sever.

I hope Jake is safe for Ms. Irene to have in her house; he's into self mutilation.  WOW!  

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 12:48 am

Title: Liandra.

Liandra might just get a liking for Jake but she's got a no good boyfriend she lives with who beats her; she's a dumb young girl and he's four years older, her first lover, I think that's why he can take advantage of her!  The bastard kicked her out of the apartment into the cold, she really needs to leave him instead of intermittently running to Ms. Irene for comfort and a place to stay the night, afterall she does pay half the rent.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 12:38 am

Title: Doilies.

WOW!  The charity continues, she has fed him and she and her husband have given a room for the night.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 12:20 am

Title: Jake.

Jake is fortunate, this is very unusual to find so much kindness in strangers to a vagrant such as himself, the elderly lady lets him keep the pastry he stole for his hunger, gives him a lift and offered him a job, that he turned down because he's too use to just being a vagabond.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 12:18 am

Title: Intruders.

OH!  Damn!  Now I'm really lovin this story; another young vagrant, this time a Black girl.  Jake was ready to cut out back to being a vagabond but I think her surprise visit, almost strangling him cause she thought him a prowler may get him to stay, I think he thinks she's cute.

Reviewer: 5Danielle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 02/03/11 12:12 am

Title: Fin.

ME likey!!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 05/05/10 03:02 am

Title: Fin.

Wonderful story and now I'm going to read the sequel. I hope there is a HEA in it. I loved it!!

Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 29/08/09 03:33 am

Title: Fin.

Really good... off to read the sequel...

Reviewer: femmenoire Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/07/09 10:10 pm

Title: Jake.

Working with victims of DV, I see how a young woman's future can be ruined by the loss of innocence and self-esteem that childhood physical, emotional, and sexual abuse undoubtedly causes.

Even the smartest, most talented person with great people like Henry and Miss Irene loving and caring for them cannot resist being drawn to the Amirs that darken their lives and paths.

Recognizing, accepting and giving healthy love, having healthy relationships and lives is such an uphill battle of hope and preseverance... understanding and encouragement.

I won't do my soapbox about the throwaways of the foster care system like Jake...

Thanks for the great heartfelt story.

I'm on to the sequel!!! 

Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/07/09 04:42 pm

Title: Fin.

WOw.. i luved it. and now that i've read this one u GOTTA make the prelude/AND A SEQUEL bcuz theres sum unfinished business between "LI-ON-DRUH" and Jake that i need to know about. lol. :]

Reviewer: Elli Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 20/06/09 11:55 pm

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