Wow, I really like this. So much going on, and only hints at where it might lead. I've never seen this movie, but you make me want to rent it now. I have a feeling we haven't seen the last of Oliver, though he is dead, so I could be wrong.
Excellent chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks Chica. We are going to see a lot of Oliver in flashbacks, the thing I love about the movie is how the pieces fall into place here and there, every little thing that happens is significant and I wanted to convey that in my story. I'm happy that so far this seems to be happening. Thanks for reading! Reviewer: TokenBlackGirl Signed
[Report This]Date: 02/07/08 05:30 pm
“Are you going to have sex with me Ollie?” The corners of his lips turned up in a smile, he pulled him towards her and held on to her.
“We’ve got a lifetime for that Kylie.” He shut his eyes and within moments they had both drifted off into a deep sleep, as though neither of them had slept for years, as though subconsciously their bodies had known that they were missing.
I loved this part. Great chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! Reviewer: BlackMamba Signed
[Report This]Date: 02/07/08 07:13 am
Very hot. Love the water aspect of the scene. 8 years before? Hmmmm....
Author's Response: You liked that did you. I'm just trying to switch it up a bit!
[Report This]Date: 02/07/08 05:05 am
Love this start greatodin. I haven't seen this movie though I've heard of it, so it's all new to me. Interesting that Kylie didn't wait to hear what happened before she ran away. I could be wrong but I think that's something that could come into play later.
Great job
BlackMa
Author's Response: Thank you! Though I'm using the basic outline of the movie, I'm not sticking so rigidly to it (it's a little more abstract and more tragic than my story) but I recommend it, it's a beautiful movie. Duplicating the feel of it is presenting its challenges but I'm glad you like it and hope you keep reading! Reviewer: BlackMamba Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 02/07/08 04:26 am