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Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

It's a great premise but the name typos make it hard to follow the action. Please do a careful edit. For example in chapter 5, it seems  like Lea runs off crying twice. Isabella's nickname shifts suddenly from Isla to Bella in chapter 4 but in chapter 6 Janet refers to Lea as Isla. The only identity I'm sure of is Lance.

Reviewer: chme5 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 14/01/15 10:26 pm

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Can she give time enough to explain please.

Reviewer: simplydijah Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: 30/11/14 12:58 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Great story, I feel sorry for Lance though.

 

Thanks for sharing.

 

Alison

Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 21/02/13 12:29 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

I actually feel bad for Lance. Lea is entitled to her emotions because she is the innocent child in all of this. However, right now, I feel like Isla is getting a pass on the part that she played in everything. I get that when they were dating he hurt her, but when she found out she was pregnant she should have told him. Making the assumption and decision that he wouldn't want her or basing the decision of not telling him out of anger was wrong. He deserved to know, and she robbed him of the chance to see his daughter grow up and build a relationship with her. Women always kill me with the "I thought I was doing the best thing for the child." No, you were doing the best thing for you. Right now, I feel like Lance is doing all of the apologizing when he didn't even know he had a child. I hope that you continue this story because I would like to see where it goes.

Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/02/13 05:42 pm

Title: Chapter 1: Because Everyone Wears Louis V

Wow!  This is a great story. Would love to read more.

Reviewer: ShelbyD Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 15/10/12 01:19 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

WOW! Lea is a very intense child. She seems to be more together than her parents! I like her spunk! She has a witty comeback no matter what the situation is and she is not afraid to tell the truth! I am glad you made her strong or atleast she is trying to be! Bella and Lance will now have to get their Shit together and come clean with this amazing young person so that everyone can either move on or bond together like it should have been in the beginning! I am giving you the first of what I feel many 10's to come from this story! Thank You for being such a good story teller!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 10/12/11 03:09 pm

Title: Chapter 5: Part II

And now for the hard part! Yes, this is a very good story and so close to true life. I love it. I can actually see this happening to someone....this whole scenerio....keep writing I could stand to read 15 or 20 more chapters of this story. I think it will be thoroughly enjoy able read.

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/12/11 02:46 pm

Title: Chapter 4: Ghost Of You

No, I don't think it is moving too fast, although it is moving along briskly. But, I think it needs to inorder to get all of the back story out of the way. once everything is out, then the current story can slow down a bit! But that is just my opinion.

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/12/11 02:20 pm

Title: Chapter 2: Life's Assessment

Yes, it she is your daughter.....I can not wait until he gets the confirmation he needs!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/12/11 08:06 pm

Title: Chapter 1: Because Everyone Wears Louis V

Ok I know this is 2011, but I still can not get with kids cursing infront of their parents. I know I am old school. But anyway....that last statement sounds interesting.....hummmm can't wait to find out the meaning behind it!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/12/11 07:58 pm

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

story is awesome, pretty much flawless please continue to write!!!

Reviewer: choconilla89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 20/09/11 04:42 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Pictures of the cast, please.. And write more soon!

Reviewer: Anne Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06/04/11 12:33 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Kokey, please come back and finish this story.  I really would like to see how this situation is resolved for all the characters.  Love it.

Reviewer: Romance Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 20/12/10 06:29 pm

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

I so wish you would continue this story!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: qualidee3 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 28/05/10 05:14 pm

Title: Chapter 1: Because Everyone Wears Louis V

Please, please finish this story. It is so very good. I hope all is well with you. Please update.

Thanks

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 15/05/10 03:48 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

i am loving the story so far.   I like how you link the past with the present.    Keep it coming.

Reviewer: CARMEL BEAUTY Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 12/08/09 07:33 pm

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Oh come ON now Lea after all the bullshitting around she did to find out now she wants to punk out!!

 

Great Update

 

Joi

Reviewer: JoiousMaye Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/07/09 07:10 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

your story is really good..i think she should give her father a chance

Reviewer: Musicallywritten Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 28/06/09 08:11 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Love it. More please.

Reviewer: karen Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/06/09 08:44 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Great update. I hope she gives him a chance to get to know her. He just has to have patience this is a lot for her to digest right now.

Reviewer: bayoumomma Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/06/09 07:28 am

Title: Chapter 1: Because Everyone Wears Louis V

Hi Kokey,

I've bypassed this story a few times thinking but I'm glad I decided to stop and read it...It's a very interesting story..

Lance, missed his baby girl being born and seeing her grew into the strong intellegent young woman that she is...I look forward to seeing how their father/daughter relationship grows.

Bella, was wrong for not at least letting me know that he was a father and giving him the chance to build a relationship with his daughter.  I understand why she didn't think she should tell him she was pregnant or about the birth of their daughter..She was young, hurt and a little selfish..As the saying goes everything that done in the dark will eventually come to light.

I hope Lea gives herself and Lance a chance to build a relationship and have that father/daugther relationship that all little girls want with their daddies..

Looking forward to the next chapter...

 

Reviewer: Chocolate Girl Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 26/06/09 05:11 pm

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

That was great!  I feel so sorry for Lea and actually for Lance who missed out on so much.  Keep the story coming!

Reviewer: qualidee3 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/06/09 03:50 pm

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Wow all I can say is wow.

Reviewer: Dimples Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26/06/09 11:21 am

Title: Chapter 1: Because Everyone Wears Louis V

I'm hooked on reading this, so yes, keep writing it!!!

This is one of those situations in life where if you could look into the future, you would make your decisions a little differently.

Some men really do not give a damn, never care, and forget children as easily as they forget the women they made them with. Others, like Lance, just need that hard kick in the ass to get on the path to growing up and taking responsibilty for the biggest, most important job of their lives.

I can't fault Bella for not risking having her hear shattered twice by a man I think she still loves.

It's time to move forward.

Can't wait for your next update!!

Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/06/09 08:29 am

Title: Chapter 6: Someday - by Nickelback

Oh please update soon. I'm really loving this story. What a mess!!!!! I hope Lea gives Lance a chance. Isla is in hot water.

Reviewer: baha_malo Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 26/06/09 08:04 am

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