This was different from my usual kink, if you raise, get an editor. The typos did not distort this tale, but the story changed here and there as to who was who in the story or as to who was loyal to who (Craven or the Desire'/un-named queen)?; those parts really irked me. It was confusing at sometimes. I got the feeling that they (the twinz) were jealous of Desire' but not of Perri, because they knew Perri was needed for Craven's plan. Oh well, this was different from my usual kink. Oh, and this was... soooo rushed.
But loved how it ended with Bradley, young Deacon, and Perri! I couldn't help but to have a slight smile at the end. Very sly ending. One other point, um hoe did Sundiata get the dagger or get to Ghana. Still leaving confusing throw-ins.Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/03/15 05:14 am
No Thank You! I really enjoyed this story.
Author's Response: Glad you did. After all of the stories I have wrote between here and TST, this one means the most to me because it was the first one I scribed. Poor thing got abandoned. But I dusted it off and brought it back to life. It's truly a bittersweet ending!
Date: 28/08/09 06:22 am
Damn Bradley maybe I should feel pity for him after all Deacon is his son but he knows what that kid will become. Han hunts on and on with no rest in sight. Hunting these two down has become his mission in life since Trish isnt around. Thankfully Perri is alright. Wish she could take him away from the darkness but I guess she does sometimes. Thanks for the great story because I thoroughly enjoyed reading it including that tribute to Aaliyah!
Author's Response: You're welcomed Chocolate470 for reading. Appreciate your comments and the best suggestion ever was incorporating Aaliyah. Fabulous idea! :-)
Date: 27/08/09 09:27 pm
Ah and the plot continues...I am thinking there is another story in the works or just me wishful thinking?
Great story thank you for sharing your imagination.
Author's Response: I decided to leave some openings, always the possibility of a sequel. We shall see! I appreciate you reading and commenting! Thanks for the wonderful review! Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/08/09 07:59 pm
No, thank you loved the story it was very interesting and on one of my favorite subject vampires and supernatural things that go bump in the night. :D
Author's Response: Smooches to you Thundakat! Vampires are awesome characters to write about. :-)
Date: 27/08/09 11:26 am
YES! But in a way I'm sorry that Desire is gone but it was necessary. I could imagine the look on her face when the baby wasn't Craven...all the plans rolled away...LOL! Sundiata had a hand in saving Perri who would have thunk it. Well at least my man HAN came to the rescue!
Author's Response: Han did his best, but his best still wasn't good enough. EPILOGUE will wrap up shortly. Thanks chocolate for reading. Reviewer: chocolate470 Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/08/09 10:07 pm
OK, So that was interesting Sundiata turned out to be the good guy after all wonderful.
Perri has vampire powers from the drop of blood from Sundiata and she is no longer consider pure. Will these powers last or are they only temporary?
What happened to Sundiata since he was sired by Craven and Craven is now dead does that mean that all he has sired are dead as well.
Bradley and Desire had a child but the child is not completely a vampire because Bradley was not brought over completely or does that make the baby a daywalker?
I can't wait for the last chapter so many questions.
Thnx for the update
Author's Response: EPILOGUE has it covered for you Thundakat. Thanks for reading. You are one of the long time firsts who stood by this story. Thanks again! Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]
Date: 26/08/09 08:37 pm
Wow! That was good! Can't wait for the epilogue.
Author's Response: Awe...thanks Jujubee. I'm glad you enjoyed it. That chapter needed no interruption. I couldn't do it. As much as I love sticking to a word count...breaking it up would have killed the flow. Thanks for reading. The epilogue is almost done!
Date: 26/08/09 05:21 am
WOW! to the last part. Well I knew Craven wasn't such a dunce when it came to Desire's plans for them both. After all he is the one that created her and knew her mind.
Can't wait for the last chapter. I hope Han makes the rescue and sends Craven back to the depths of hell. But you never know with you authors...LOL!!!
Author's Response: What you trying to say huh chocolate??? LOL. Final and Epilogue cometh. Reviewer: chocolate470 Signed [Report This]
Date: 24/08/09 06:59 pm
Ah! I have always wondered where Sundiata fit into the story line other then being the doorman. He always seemed so knowledgable and knowing for some reason.
Craven now sees that Desire was to betray him so what is he to do now. Durn this is getting so good and to think it is almost over.
Great update! I can't wait to see what happens next. I so hope that the update will come soon.
Author's Response: This one will be wrapping up soon Thundakat. Stay tuned for the frequent updates! :0 Thanks for reading. Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]
Date: 23/08/09 04:49 am
Ohh the plot thickens! Desire my type of woman - knowing when the take charge especially against Craven. We are definitely in for a battle. Is Craven mind so involved with Perri that is unaware of this plot against him? I'm not sure about this one because usually he senses when Desire is causing trouble unless she is able to keep that part of her mind hidden...interesting.
She's tenacious...I'll give her that! Thanks chocolate...love reading your comments~Reviewer: chocolate470 Signed [Report This]
Date: 18/08/09 09:05 pm
I thought I wouldnt love this side of Desire but she is actually a fascinating character. Craven thought he had everything under control but by making Desire a part of his crew isnt working out as he planned. The more I read this story the better it gets.
Author's Response: Desire is comical to me, because she is such a vamp in that she's goal oriented. She lusts for Craven and that's not entirely her fault...he sexed her and left her thirsty for more of him. She's planning to turn the tables.
Date: 18/08/09 08:58 pm
Glad I caught up. Excellent story.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading. The Table of Contents can be frightful because it's so so long. But the chapters are small and tightly packed. Thanks for happening upon it and for sticking with it! I really appreciate new readers taking the time to read through it.
Date: 17/08/09 06:33 am
Ihad started this one over at TST. I'm going to start over here.
Author's Response: Thanks Jujubee50 for following this fic over here. I try really hard to run the updates concurrently with TST, but I have to spend an extra amount of time formatting so I often forget I haven't posted the update. Eventually I will sync up. The story is coming to a closure really soon. There are 25 chapters and an EPILOGUE.
Date: 17/08/09 02:33 am
Alrighty then...So Desire has become the Queen of the Damned interesting....interesting indeed. So her friendship with Perri means nothing. This story definitely has not come out as I predicted it would I will have to say that is a good thing.
I want to know what power Perri wills.
I can't wait to see what is the outcome...
Author's Response: Or so she thinks. Plan away...Perri's power cometh. Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]
Date: 16/08/09 11:35 pm
OH MY! What powers does Perri wield...girl you are killing me. Please update again soon very soon. I know I know probably won't be another update until next week but I am feining here.
OK, I don't know if I want Craven to win or not. I was liking Craven and Perri together but he talkinga about she was no use to him after he cloned himself and all that jazz and that she might not even survive the birth but then at the end you gave us that interesting little tidbit about her wielding power greater then Craven's and now I don't know what to think. I want the good guys to win but I want Craven and Perri together @ the end and that can't happen since sexy Crave is the bad guy.
Great update can't wait til the next one. Thanks
I could tell you...but then I'd have to leave you vulnerable to Craven's wrath...LOL!
TY for reading and enjoying my darkly fic!
Reviewer: Thundakat Signed [Report This]
Date: 11/08/09 07:28 pm
OH MY! Sex with these vampires are amazingly hot and raw and everything! It seems that Craven cannot control Desire all that well...nor his twins. Major drama done by his own hands. What a scene Perri ran into and of course those vamps have the gift of not letting you remember. Wonder how Craven will rectify his disintegrating plans.
they are some sexy mofo's aren't they...
thanks for reading...and for the review!Reviewer: chocolate470 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/08/09 08:32 pm
Craven is in big trouble with Desire and I couldn't be more delighted...LOL!!! Serves him right! At least I saw that Perri wasn't falling for all of his charms - her eyes are beginning to open to see something isn't quite right. Maybe I'm underestimating Perri we'll see. I did read it before but didn't have time to add my review...sorry!
Perri's power is lies within...
If you haven't caught up to it by final chapter...I'll spill it in the epilogue.
Reviewer: chocolate470 Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/08/09 08:28 pm
Dang, that was a freaky scene Perri walked into...so Craven's already employing mind control on his intended...and poor Perri is defenseless against it...she's really no more than a means to an end (or in his case a beginning) for him...
I hope Han can somehow defeat Kai/Craven again...looks like the fate of mankind will be in his hands...and maybe his soul can finally find peace again...
Author's Response: He can't seem to connect with her and he wants to, rather he wants her to come willing. 'power trip!' Reviewer: attheritz Signed [Report This]
Date: 03/08/09 08:58 pm
I actually started reading this over at TST but couldn't remember where I left off. So I'm going to start over here. I do remember I liked what I had read so far. Besides, the image of Russell Wong is too much to pass up. *BIG GRIN*
Author's Response: Yes, Russell is hella sexy! Thanks for reading. I hope it continues to feed your interest. ;-)
Date: 31/07/09 06:15 pm