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Title: Got To Be There

How cute! This story is really good so far. I'm interested so far, and can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: Nikki Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 09/10/10 07:11 am

Title: Got To Be There

I just have this to say. Make sure you capitilize everything properly. Also when doing dialogue make sure to start a new paragraph when another person starts speaking.

Also when you use speaking, saying verbs use commas.

Ex: "That was fun," she commented, looking at him.

 

"Yeah, it was," he replied, smiling.

 

When you are just doing actions, you use periods.

Ex: "That was fun." She looked at him and smiled.

 

"Yeah, it was." He returned her smile.

I would suggest searching dialogue punctuation or dialogue writing for further information.  

Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/03/10 03:56 pm

Title: We've Got Together

I was so glad to see an update. Thank you for continuing and for a beautiful story

Reviewer: Cassius.Noir Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 10/02/10 02:44 pm

Title: We've Got Together

you final added a new chapter!!

lol, why is everyone so interested in their sex life? the 2 kids should be enough of a clue already! but that last part with Janet was cute. oh! and the lil tickle fight.

and Jermaine needs go somewhere and chill out. what he said about her mom and family was low. he put the woman in labor for petes sake!

and lastly, why could i truly picture Bubbles with Belly in his lap and both of them looking at Michael and Christie like 'WTH?'. sorry that really made me giggle.

Reviewer: sojo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/02/10 02:12 am

Title: Got To Be There

im a fiend for this story and YOU,Noobie got me addicted so u HAVE to update soon! please?

Don't worry about the reviews, this is an amazing story, some people just don't know how to appreciate good read anymore. U have amazing talent and i can guarantee that if u don't finish this story, i will go into a major state of depression!(jk) so, please, UPDATE SOON!!!!  

Reviewer: fiend91 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 11/12/09 09:20 pm

Title: Out take #14 Too Young

awww. its a shame how their families stopped speaking to them. but it brought them closer together in the end.

Reviewer: sojo Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: 07/11/09 02:20 am

Title: Out take #14 Too Young

Dead. I am dead. From all of the amazingness I just read. I love this story so much like I told you before and I can't help but hear most of his music ina totally different way. I am a total addict of this story I just cant help coming back every single day to check to see if you've updated. Keep it up. AND UPDATE SOON PLEASE

Reviewer: Aralei Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 04/11/09 09:47 pm

Title: Out take #13 Is it scary?

that was dirty trick he played!

but this part>> “I’ll be your night light.” was soooo cute!

Reviewer: sojo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 31/10/09 04:24 am

Title: Got To Be There

WOW I have to say that I did skip over this at first because I was like "Oh no a M J fiction" But I remembered never judge a book by its cover. So I took a chance and read it, and I noticed as I did I was on the computer all day because I couldn't stop reading it, LOL.

I love the way you betrayed Michael. You took him and molded him into this sexy character but yet you still kept the kind spirit that he always had. You never lost the true essence of who he really was and I liked that, and I think thats what made the story seem so realistic.

You included his shyness and his corky childish behavior that only a true Michael fan would understand. As I read it, it didn't feel like I was reading just a normal story it felt as though I was seeing his life.

I love the character Chrisie she actually reminded me of people I knew. Some women that are so broken but yet still have enough courage and strength to build up others in their time of hurt. Christie was a strong black woman who had lost love but who never lost herself.

I like how you related her pain with Michael's and made the viewer see that we all go through hurt and pain but if you have at least one person by your side you can make it through the rain.

The relationship between Mike and Chris was real. They got together, he cheated and she was a Mad black woman gone mad for a minute. But I loved how he was a man about it and admitted his mistakes. And even though he messed up you still had Christie admit her faults as well as to why he did cheat. Not that it makes it right or justifys it. But so many times us as woman want to continously blame the man for cheating on us and not take the time to realize that we were apart of the problem as well. And you did that.

I write stories too, and I wrote one including the late singer Aaliyah. But for me I was too scared to actually post it because often times when we loose a celebrity that was  special to us.

Some of us find it hard to really grasp the concept of them having sex or cursing or doing something crazy because they are never protrayed like that in our world.

They may talk about sex in their music but for us to actually write them in a story in this context. Its risky but reading your story really inspired me to post it, so I thank you. And your story is sooo amazing.

I always thought the "YOUNG" Michael was sexy but wow you just changed my whole perspective and image of how I see him now. LOL

I'm glad that you were bold enough to actually say "Mike was human and he did have sex and he was a beast at it" This story is like a roller coaster it made me laugh, and almost cry and I loved it.

This is what I'm talking about! This is what I call a real STORY!!!!!

 



Author's Response:

OMG.

 

Thanks so much! I absolutely LIVE for reviews like this. After he died, I was SO hurt. I felt as if I could have changed it,  but obviously I couldn't have. So, I changed it in my mind. This story has helped me cope with his death SO much. I absolutely love that you enjoyed it, because I enjoy writing it. It gives me peace.

 All I wanted is to capture Michael the way I seen him. People always talk about the talent, he was more than just a great talent. He was perfect to me, in his every flaw. He's exactly what I want in a man. And it pisses me off when people talk about how his looks changed, and how he was unattractive. He was still a BEAUTIFUL person on the inside, possibly more beautiful with age because he knew more. Do looks really matter that MUCH to people? In my opinion, partly because of the inner beauty he possessed, he was still beautiful. But, of course, you have HAVE inner beauty to notice it in others.

 

AND OMG. MICHAEL'S SEX LIFE. Do NOT get me started on that, man. He was a BEAST, dude. SERIOUSLY. If you watch videos like Come Together, watch his hips. His pelvic thrusts. Then go talk to some of the women he's slept with, like Lisa Marie. They were so LOUD that they had complaints when they stayed in a hotel with Donald Trumph. He wasn't GAY; he was way to old school for that. He was just the way people should be now, he kept his business HIS business.

 

I'm babbling now, but thanks so much for understanding me.

Reviewer: Adria Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 28/10/09 07:10 am

Title: Out take #13 Is it scary?

I wish I had a night light like that.

Reviewer: guitarlovechild Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 27/10/09 02:01 am

Title: Out take #13 Is it scary?

this chapter was great! i love how you showed the more teasing side of their relationship and i love it! well I'm a bit biased because I'm in love the whole story, but thats not the point. Keep on writing and u can count on me to review!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 25/10/09 06:47 pm

Title: Out take #12 Always

OMG! It took me like, 3 days to read it but I love, love, LOVE this story!!!

at first I wasn't to sure about reading a MJ fiction, because of his passing and all. But you wrote him as a whole, complex person like he really was and I adore that.

And he and Christie a something else! Getting it in out in the woods. They're some kinda freaky. No wonder why her Uncle was watching them so close. He wasn't blind!



Author's Response:

Thanks! That's exactly how I wanted it. When he died, every one focused on his TALENT. Which kind of makes me sad, because people act scared to really talk about how good of a person he was, which is  a waste. I wanted to capture his personality and good soul, but at the same time not make him perfect.

 

But since this is an alternate universe, he has reasons as to why he is a little different in this story.

 

Reviewer: sojo Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 17/10/09 06:17 am

Title: Out take #12 Always

i love this story. it is single-handedly the only reason i visit this site anymore. CONTINUE PLEASE!! i cant wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Awe thanks!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 16/10/09 09:09 pm

Title: Got To Be There

ugh another GREAT chapter!! keepem comiin!! lmao!

Reviewer: Thespiandiva Signed [Report This]
Date: 13/10/09 04:12 am

Title: Out take #12 Always

I LOOOOOOOVE IT... This is too good for words i just spent 7 hours reading it all its phenomenal. Please update soon.

Author's Response: Gaah this story is gonna be so long lol.

Reviewer: Aralei Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 11/10/09 06:55 pm

Title: Got To Be There

Okay so, I figure why make an account, seeing as I only read on here...but I think I want one now just because, idk this story is amazing! I wanna write MJ fanfiction! But I don't think I'd be as good as you. Anywho keep up the good work, IN THE WOODS???! They DID ID IN THE WOODS, thats kinky...I think I like a kinky Michael Jackson....the way you portray him is just....WONDERFUL! Post anytime soon... ;)

Author's Response:

OMG i'm so happy for you! who cares! you should totally make one. It's really cool that my story inspired you to write one. As long as it's original, and you make it into your own, I think that's amazing. If you need help developing a story idea, I could try and help.

 

And yeah, I LOVE kinky Michael Jackson. He was, actually really kinky. He was a sexual human being. All that, "he was a kid, he didn't have a chance to grow up" yeah, that's partly true. In some ways, he was childish but they make him out to be some freak who liked children.

 

He was a little childish, but he KNEW how to control his business. Certainly, no child could have been as successful as Michael. And definitely, no CHILD could have been able to thrust his hips and make those sex faces.

Reviewer: Tania Rochelle Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 05/10/09 02:32 am

Title: Got To Be There

i was sceptical about this one at first... and then i read it and fell in love with this story. i love the way you made micheal into a real, desirable man. an image so far from what was painted in the media. i also love that christie and mikes relationship is real and not a fairytale. keep up the good work with this one! 

 

 ps. and mike was sexy! i did'nt find the sex scenes weird at all! has anyone heard Break of Dawn? he was definitly NOT a virgin!!! lmao



Author's Response:

omg i know right! even the song, in the closet! lol. yeah, when he died, i felt so, sad and just strange. i felt as if i let michael down, for some reason.

 

so i made this story to vent, and end up totally falling in love with it. like all this michael was an asexual stuff is BULLSHIT. lol, he was a normal, sexually active, human being. watch COME TOGETHER, notice all the wild hip movements and sex appeal he had.

 

if you pay close attention to some of his performances, you can tell he was a straight up FREAK. no one pays attention, though.

Reviewer: Thespiandiva Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/10/09 01:27 am

Title: Out take #11 Folkin' Around

What the hell you just don't go and have sex in the wilderness without a blanket. But I guess if your fucking Michael Jackson, who needs a blanket right?



Author's Response:

well, how do you know they did it on the floor?

 

lol. in my mind they did it against something...

Reviewer: guitarlovechild Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 04/10/09 09:40 pm

Title: One More Chance

Well, I finally read the chapter and it was amazing! I loved every second of it. I really like the way that you write and I cant wait to read the next update. Thanx for the story.

Reviewer: fhjl88 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/10/09 10:36 pm

Title: Got To Be There

Awesome Update!!! Love all the angst, drama, and of course the LOVE ;-)  You're an amazing writer...keep up the GREAT work!!!

Author's Response: Thanks. Just wish I could get more reviews.

Reviewer: SophisticatedLady Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 28/09/09 08:31 am

Title: One More Chance

Such a hott chapter - thank you for the update!

Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 26/09/09 12:31 pm

Title: One More Chance

YEAH!! First you have my man Michael seduce the woman and know they they getting it on in the rain? Fucking genius!

Reviewer: guitarlovechild Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: 25/09/09 11:38 pm

Title: One More Chance

Thank you for updating! I am such a fiend for this story. 

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 25/09/09 11:08 pm

Title: Out take #10 I'll Come Home to You

Hey i love the story. i was just wondering if you had a person who you thought of as christie? you know as in a celebrity.

Author's Response:

Well, honestly no. I hope the readers imagine themselves as Christie...

But here's the real description.

 

She looks a lot like me, actually. Christie is based off of me, lol. She is chocolate compexioned, chocolate brown slanted eyes, long eye lashes, beautiful smile with full lips. She's also a short thicker woman with big breasts, big thighs and a big bottom.

 

She always wears her hair curly, adds extensions to make her hair look fuller. Straight bangs, high cheek bones, soft bone structure.

 

Not every one who sees her thinks she's beautiful; it's a beauty that can possibly be over looked if you don't have inner beauty, yourself. And Michael does look slightly different. Because of the confidence that my character Christie gives him, he doesn't get as many surgeries.

 

He only gets his nose done, and because Vitiligo is triggered by stress ( which he has none of because he's so happy with Christie ) his skin doesn't start changing until the end of the 1980's instead of mid 1980's.

 

Does that make sense?

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 17/09/09 12:55 am

Title: Out take #10 I'll Come Home to You

They're going to get back together right? whatever u decide to do, please,PLEASE do not make MJ have the perm. I love him regardless, but the curly hair is sexy.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 16/09/09 09:55 pm

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