I was LMAO throughout this entire chapter. This was some of the best comedic writing I've read in a while:
"He has an S curl, so no."
"Maybe he just has wavy hair."
"Oh please, look at how juicy it is, he probably has to wear a shower cap at night. Someone was a little TOO into Ginuwine back in the day if you know what I'm saying. Pass."
Please! Me and Jenelle must never, ever part! That was just great! LOL! (Why am I still laughing at this?)
I loved the little inner dialogue going on with Audre when she was talking to the son of a bitch I mean Greg! She kept her cool but dammit why'd she have to run into leaky eye! I wanted Audre to acknowledge her and move the fuck on but she asked her THE question. I can't stand chicks stuck on status because I think that's a bunch of bullshit. (I know that may have been too much but I had to let it out!)
Loved her moment of freedom. Painting is so relaxing. You can really get lost in the act and forget about all the crap going on in your life.
Anyway, your story is stellar and so are you! I'm really enjoying the hell out of this tale.
Author's Response: YEA that is awesome to hear thank you so much! I love Jenelle she's my invisible BFF and I love the comedy she brings to the story. Audre can at times be a glutton for punishment and she's still torn between a couple of worlds at the moment. There's still some growing up to be done but her tapping into her painting is definitely a major moment of freedom for her. I actually thought a little about you because I know you are an artistic soul and you've occassionally talked about it being a relaxing cathartic experience. Reviewer: idjunkie Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 05/04/09 06:07 am
Lovely! I really like Juanpa! Well, all of Hilts buddies are cool as hell and I'd love to hang with them. Fun times! All the guy gossiping was great and I loved the bonding over shots between Audre and Mags!
Christian is so damn adorable! Really, can I have him? I thought the note was sweet and funny and real! Not that fake ass kisses and hugs b.s. Great job GreatO! I'm so, so glad you're back and this story is love! :)
Author's Response: Thanks chica! I'm so stoked you are enjoying this story and I do enjoy Hilts' friends they are a riot, isn't it funny how guys can be just as gossipy as females even though they try to pretend otherwise. And it was a great opportunity to show a less buttoned up side to Audre. Thanks for reading, the stars the great review! Reviewer: idjunkie Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 05/04/09 05:42 am
First of all it's good to see you back ;-)
It took me a while to read the updates, but now I'm finished and the new chapters were A-W-E-S-O-M-E!!!I really missed this story and I'm glad you decided to give it another go.
I really like the dynamic of Christian and Audre, and I think it's nice to see that both are taking their time to get to know each other and not rushing to do the deed already (although I can't wait LOL!).
Please update soon, I can't wait to read more of these two ;-)
Author's Response: Yeah thanks I'm glad you liked the newer chapters! Two more updates posted. I know it's a bit of a pain to have the wait so long but I hope that added to the realness of the story, for me is was important that Audre gets what it means to be in a committed, equal relationship. Reviewer: shanesgirl Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 03/04/09 04:37 pm
This was soooo good. Cass obviously feels insecure about her man demonstrated by the need to make Audre feel bad. If her list of things are the reason her relationship works..that is a sad situation. I can't wait for both of them to get theirs. They deserve each other. As my mother says the best revenge is living well, looking good and loving hard.
I am so glad Audre had the outlet of painting. I hope this turns into a new avenue for her...maybe an art showing. I would love to see the look on their faces when Audre is applauded by her loving man!
Author's Response: Yep all is not well in Cass/Greg's relationship. You're mom is so right, that's great advice and I wanted to show Audre do exactly that. Art showing could be in the future, she is definitely going continue to rediscover her love of painting it's a part of herself she's kept locked away for too long. Thanks for reading and the review! Reviewer: Harlen Winters Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/04/09 08:04 pm
Girl you are back and in full effect!
I love your conversations. I get so drawn in to them. They flow naturally, while revealing the characters. I am so happy to see Audre enjoying herself and letting loose and doing and saying things that are not like her. I love Chris' friends too...I loved the huffy conversation.
Audre sure had Chris' attention with that kiss and she is definitely going to regret that conversation in the morning.
"Thank you. Are you a freak?"
"Do you spank?"
The one that guys fantasize about. Don't get me wrong, I know I'm attractive, and smart, funny, and loveable."
"Don't forget modest."
These lines were absolutely hilarious!
Great update!
Author's Response: Thank you! Conversations are my favorites but I get really nervous because I want them to be funny but not too over the top! I'm glad you liked that, Audre gets a bit loose when the alcohol is flowing hahaha. thanks again for reading and for the awesome reviews, they're always fun to read. Reviewer: Harlen Winters Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/04/09 07:28 pm
Hi GreatO, I am so gald you, Audre and Chris are back. I have really missed them and looking forward to getting back into their story.
Well it seems as though you have not lost your touch! This was a great update. I loved the interactions btwn Juanpa and Audre. Chris is such a sweetheart...I would love to know what Hilti means!
Author's Response: Thank you! I adore Juanpa and I like this idea of Christian's friends being protective of Christian but also be really cool, open people. Hilts, yeah that's a mystery isn't it, Christian can be a bit of a bad boy lets just say. Thanks for reading and the great review! Reviewer: Harlen Winters Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/04/09 07:01 pm
*fans self*
This story was so chocked full of human and sweetness, I was laughing all the way through! Really good writing, I really like this story ... I hope there's more ... when will Audre and Christian consumate this relationship ... uh outside of their wicked phone sex?
*thumbs way up!*
Author's Response: Thank you, fanning is good! I wanted this story to be very human and very relatable so that's really great to read from you. And this is my first attempt at a comedic story so I'm also happy that I mad you laugh. There is more. Consumation occurs in Chapter 17, that'll be fun! Thanks for the review and the stars! Reviewer: N.Mahana Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 02/04/09 11:24 am
Oh hell naw! No he did not propose to that red dress wearing, you-know-what!
For shame, Greg, for shame!!!
This story is funny as hell, loved the first revenge fantasy!
-Noel
Author's Response:
Greg isn't right, he'll get his those. . .
Glad you liked that, I must admit I've had the same revenge fantasy hahaha. Thank you for reading and commenting and the stars!
Reviewer: N.Mahana Anonymous [Report This]Date: 02/04/09 08:22 am
def love this story its sooo hot plz add soon =)
Author's Response: Thanks Kell! I'm working on it. . .
Date: 02/04/09 07:08 am
i just discoverd your story last night. Wow!!!! i loved it!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Yea I'm glad you like it! Thanks for the review and the stars!
[Report This]Date: 31/03/09 04:23 am
Damn! So Christian is a dirty talker. It was refreshing to see Audre let loose.
Author's Response: Christian is definitely down for the dirty, he's a smutty boy and I love him madly. I like writing Audre's evolution. She's not a perfect character and she's a work in progress and I love seeing her realize that and grow into herself. Thanks for the review and the stars and for reading!
[Report This]Date: 31/03/09 01:02 am
Eeeeeeee!!! GreatO is back! *lovemboth does a cartwheel and a back flip*
I've missed this story so much! And I got so many updates I'm just tickled pink! Christian is the man, oh yes he is. I will have phone sex with him any time.
Greg and Cassandra deserve each other and karma is a b!
Welcome back, GreatO! I've missed you more than you'll know. Thanks to Minx and Divisionred for helping you get your groove back. Did it involve a young, sexy Jamaican hunk?
Author's Response:
Thank you lovemboth, cartwheels are awesome, so's your review! Christian is the man, and I had TOO much fun writing that phone sex scene, I've never done that before so I really wanted it to be tight and Minx was great about helping me up the sexy quotient. Greg and Cassandra are peas in a pod for sure but there's more karma coming and that's all I'll say about that. I didn't realize how important writing was to me and how much I missed posting at the Chamber until I started again, so thank you for the welcome back and for still reading the story.
Unfortunately there was no Jamaican hunk, I better tell them to get on that. . .
Reviewer: lovemboth Signed [Report This]Date: 30/03/09 04:32 am
ok Ima say it. I love Christian. I thought the name had been forever ruined by the hot mess that was Crave on OLTL. You have brought back my love for all things Christian as long as it's not that idiot David Fumero.
...that is alll....
Author's Response: You know what is funny, i didn't realize that OLTL had somehow crossed over into my subconscious when I created this artist Christian until someone else pointed it out to me hahaha, I don't know what the hell I was thinking. Anyways as cute as Fumero is, this Christian is definitely nothing like OLTL's version and I'm glad I have rehabilitated Christians for you! Thanks for the great review! Reviewer: monique32 Signed [Report This]
Date: 30/03/09 02:56 am
That was hot!! Keep it coming. Every women needs more Christian.
Author's Response: Thanks Gloria! I agree, a little Christian never hurt anyone. . .
[Report This]Date: 30/03/09 02:17 am
YOU'RE BACK! YAY! I was so missing this story and you brought it with a vengence! Lovely, lovey chapter greato! The opening with Audre and Christian was so absolutely adorable. I really love the fact that he's so into her and wants to bring out the best. I was all smiles when he told her to paint him something as a thank you.
I heart you so much for the following:
1) Roller Derby- I haven't thought about this in ages. I used to watch roller derby with my mom when I was really young. It's the reason why I wanted to learn how to skate when I was five.
2) Ani DiFranco as the Predator and Sonny Sandoval as Juanpa is pure genius. I love your casting.
Wonderful update! Glad to see you back! :)
Author's Response:
Yea I'm back feels good! I love this idea that she's with someone her that is encouraging her to find her passion and that actually listens to what she says and what she wants so that's fun to write. I wanted to make the roller derby as detailed as possible so I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! Ani DiFranco is my personal goddess, Sonny is beautiful - somehow I had the feeling you of all people would appreciate that! Thank you for the welcome back and the awesome review and stars!
Reviewer: idjunkie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 29/03/09 07:07 pm
Awesome!!!!
Author's Response:
Hahaha Thanks!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: 29/03/09 10:33 am
a few chapters back you said these two were your favorite characters to write...well they are my favorite characters to read. this last chapter (towards the end) reminded me of some good ol' freaky times. LOL. you are very talented and this story is SOOO good. can't wait for more!!
Author's Response: Wow, that is so great of you to say. I do think or at least hope that how much joy I get out of writing this story is conveyed to the readers. I really enjoy writing an old fashioned courtship and romance with some sexy times. Thank you so much for coming back, reading and reviewing!
Date: 29/03/09 06:51 am
yayyy!!!!!
Author's Response:
Double yayyy!
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 29/03/09 03:11 am
Gotta love Audre, her internal dialoge is hilarious. I wish she did whoop that leaky-eyed trick... lol
More power to you girl!
Author's Response: Thank you! I like writing the internal dialogue I think we've all had that moment where you just want to knock the mess out of someone but you don't becaue you're better than that. Anyways thanks for reading Miele! Reviewer: Miele Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 29/03/09 02:36 am
I just started reading this story last night & imagine my surprise at seeing not one, but four new chapters!! I feel like I've died & gone to heaven!! This is one of the best stories I've read in a long time...definitely coming back for more!!
Author's Response: Aww thanks that's so sweet! I'm so glad you enjoy the story. Thanks for reading and leaving the great review and stars!
[Report This]Date: 29/03/09 02:31 am
i finally got re-caught up with this story and this chapter so hot! christian is the man and i cant wait until they are finally together!
Author's Response: Thanks lady, Christian is super hot. Chapter 17 it's on like donkey kong hahaha. Thanks for reading and leaving a review and stars!
[Report This]Date: 29/03/09 01:43 am
Wow !! What a comeback. That last chapter was.... something else.
l LOVE Christian, hes hot and cute. Tatooes !!*sigh*
Im glad you are better now, keep up the good work!!
Author's Response: Thank you I felt like I owed to people to not half step it on the update. Really enjoyed writing that last chapter and I'm thrilled you enjoyed reading it! Love Christian, love tattoos. . .come on who doesn't love the bad boy with the heart of gold? I am feeling alot better and thank you for the well wishes and the great review and stars! Reviewer: Princesa Signed
[Report This]Date: 29/03/09 12:25 am
WOOHOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thanks for the updates and especially this last one.
I'm so glad Audre is finally feeling free.
Author's Response:
Yes I didn't want to leave ya'll hanging without giving a small taste of what's coming up. I'm glad Audre is feeling free too, I get the feeling that may not last though. . .
Thanks for reading and reviewing and the pretty stars!
Reviewer: jcdeppfan87 Signed [Report This]Date: 28/03/09 11:51 pm
I missed this story, so glad its back... Audre's so sweet and Christian, I love him. I can't wat for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad to have the story back. I'm also glad you think Audre is so sweet hahaha, she's definitely a quirky one. I love Christian too, I'm working on the updates now. Thanks for reading!
Date: 28/03/09 11:22 pm
Oh this is rocking mami!! Damn Junapa is HAWT, whew chile! Maggie is a lucky girl. Love it! You did marvelous!
Author's Response: Thanks chica, and thank you for all the help! Yes me loves Sonny Sandoval and this was the perfect excuse to use his face. Maggie is a lucky girl and she's not the type to let anyone hijack her man hahaha. Thanks!
[Report This]Date: 28/03/09 10:38 pm