Thanks for a great but sad read. I feel bad for Cassie for loving a hit man that was indeed killed..YIKES. Is she endanger now as she has met the infamous Milo that can have people killed? Will she tell the police what she knows?
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed
[Report This]Date: 13/03/10 07:50 pm
I liked this story. It's different and not at all what i expected. I look forward to see were you take this story - thank you for sharing it with us!
Reviewer: Cassius.Noir Anonymous
[Report This]Date: 13/03/10 02:20 pm
Great update. Cassie needs to focus on life and not what would have been. As tough as it seems she needs to move on. Hopefully the people he dealt with don't come after her.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 13/03/10 06:37 am
This is really good. You write very well. I'm not really sure if you're doing the dialogue correctly.
I've seen it like:
Commas for said, talking verbs.
Ex: "I can't believe you said that," she said while looked at him.
Periods for action verbs:
Ex: "Alright, fine. Go." He opened the door for her to leave.
You still do use exclamation points (!), question marks (?), and the other forms of punctuation.
Reviewer: Flicker and Sparkle Signed [Report This]Date: 26/02/10 02:20 am
Interesting update.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 22/02/10 12:41 am
Very Nice update . He was a hit man ... that's kinda Hot . Can't wait to read more.
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/02/10 05:25 pm
Good chapter. Why we, women in particular think we can fix people is beyond me. Yet, we try to do it over and over again. When love is involved, emotions get in the way. No wonder she couldn't walk away. Poor Cassie! I love how this story is coming along.
Reviewer: jjazz59 Anonymous [Report This]Date: 18/02/10 03:45 pm
Interesting update. Hmmm, wonder who killed him???
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 18/02/10 05:45 am
Wow, Christian was into some serious stuff, sounds abit scary/shady at times. Hope Cassie is safe now that he's dead. Hmmm, wonder who killed him??? Hope they don't come after her. Loved the update.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: 12/02/10 04:21 am
This ie very well-written...I'm intrigued...never would have guessed his line of profession...or how someone as mild-mannered as Cassie seems to be would be attracted to someone like him...I'm assuming that most of this story will be told in retrospect since one of the main characters is deceased...this a fascinating premise for a story...
I actually feel quite sympathetic toward Cassie...though Christian appears to have been 'no-good' for her...she obviously loved him a great deal...was it their final argument that pushed him to a place that he no longer cared what happened to him...how will this affect Cassie...that has to be extremely painful to realize your last words to a person you loved were said with anger and can never be taken back...
Looking forward to revisiting their time together...though it's a damper to know that their love will end tragically...I still want to fall in love with them anyway...great job...more, more please!!!!
Reviewer: attheritz Signed [Report This]Date: 12/02/10 02:35 am
Damn, her love was taken away in a such brutal manner. Who is going to help her get past the grief, the Doctor Eric Plummer, or one of detectives? I am intrigued, please continue.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: 11/02/10 11:52 pm
Great Start . You've got me hooked . Waiting on the next chapter as we speak.
Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/02/10 09:57 pm
Just when it's starting to get good it's ends in a cliffy..
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: Renee Anonymous [Report This]Date: 11/02/10 09:04 pm
That was simple and very well written. Nice job!
Reviewer: Renee Banks Signed [Report This]Date: 11/02/10 09:03 pm
Really interesting beginning. Can't wait to read more. Plus, Speechless was the first Gaga song I actually liked.
Reviewer: Onimosity Signed [Report This]Date: 11/02/10 07:05 pm