So finally I have got some time to review your story, I pulled an all-night reading, unable to stop myself even though I had to wake up early and go to work.  I loved this story, its so entertaining, I love the dialogue and I love Val and Matheson, and oh my gosh Emily is a little cookoo, but her cookooness makes her a very interesting character.  Who falls in love with a 13 year old boy?  How hot was this boy.  I am so glad you didn't make that relationship all roses and what-not, that there were other problems, outside problems sure but problems.  And i like that Val and Matheson had obstacles but still loved each other through it all.

That being said, I have to say that my favorite character is hannah.  I don't know why, but she resonnated with me.  And when Emilio came into the picture...I was like wow you go girl, I would have loved to learn more about there relationship but I understand that would be like a whole other book.  So I will take and treasure what I can get.

This disturbing scene and somewhat the most fascinating is the one between matheson and his grandfather, with the knife.  Oh the drama, it was unstoppable and it was intriguing.  And the story in between the Millie's mother and millie's father was so amarzing.  I stated hated him, and then gradually you made me love him and feel so sorry for him, for them, for their situation.  Imagine how many people could have been in love and because of the social structure, and the racism could not be together.  How many people had to hide their love in the shadows?  its a haunting thought, so kudos for letting me and everyone see that love between two people, in two ends of the social structure, with things such as race and laws keeping them apart, could have existed.

I love stereotypically yours, but I love that story between Millie's parents most of all, because its something that trickled down generations and no matter how sad and tragic it is, it touched me.  You are very talented, and I should know...I read a lot, I read the way some people breath.  I think you could be a proffessional if you wished, but if you just wish to share you imagination with the world regardless of money, then thank you so much for that.