Chapter 22: Chapter 18 pt 3
I had to crack my fingers for this one. I don’t know where to begin, your story is life changing. As much as I love watching your story snowball into this epic yet “simple” love story you leave me floored at every turn. When I see that you have updated my heart literally flutters and drops all at the same time. I never know what tear drop size turn you have made that will ripple the ocean of characters you have. The people you have built are so real to me, so authentic to the point that I remember her tears in my life. I have cried those same tears and felt that same anguish. Valerie is my Heroine and she will win all the battles I lost. Battles I lost because I didn’t fight hard enough or was too scared of loosing to know when it was okay to let go. You are an amazing story teller and I am in awe of your efforts. I want to be the writer you are, how you take your readers on adventures out of their own lives even if its but for a short amount of time and I always strive to do that.
On to the story, I have been eager to review for the last three chapters first but I wanted to get the full picture first. Valerie is so brave but I wish she would share more of her struggles and be honest OUT LOUD about what really happened between her and George. I feel like we keep getting these bits and pieces of a horrible person but some of his “good” qualities that can be seen in Henry also. I don’t think that Valerie is a sad person, she has been beat down her entire life she doesn’t know how to win. It worries me how Henry can tell her anything can tell her anything but I love you and then leaves her high and dry when he KNOWS she has been hurt before. These two have to grow to be who they need to be for each other or they wont make it at all as a couple. That growth is going to come with pain and tears before we get to the rainbows and smiles. Valerie needs this so she can learn she is all she’s needs to make it.
Trust and believe your work is worth far more than publication and I would buy it. I know on your tumblr you post pictures of the characters, is there a way we can see that Ella, Peter or even that scumbag George looks like. When you update I am inspired to keep writing, thank you. BTW when do you think we will know the full story about Val and George, for some strange reason I feel like he may have died. I don’t know why I would think that, not that you eluded to that or anything lol. If not will he ever appear in the story? You probably had no intentions of doing this but can you tell Henry’s side of things at least for a brief moment in time. I just want to get inside his head to see what he’s thinking. One girl on fanfiction.net wrote a story in pov that was so HAUTE she had to write another in the other character’s pov. I don’t know if you want to do that but it’s just an idea. Happy Hunting!
Reviewer: Nita Roberts Signed
Date: February 03 2014