GIRL NO YOU DIDNT

I think some of y'all are being too judgmental about the situation. Its apart of his job and he gotta do what he gotta do to support his children. Personally, I wouldve been hella jealous but if I notice that he paying more attention to the crowd and his mixes then my anger would go down, then he would just have to prove to me that he wont be after the girls if we start a relationship. 

But the baby momma though, that would have to be talked about. I believe him when he says he wants a stable relationship but if that baby momma aint ready to let go of whatever type of relation ship she has with him I'm sure she'll purposely cause problems. I really dont wanna say yet cause we dont know what she's like. 

Lastly, image is important but theres a limit. She should give him a chance cause though they've only been around each other for a day he hasnt given any reason for her to be suspicious. He told her right away about the baby momma situation, he took care of her and her friends. I dont think he wouldve done all that if he was just about one night stands.

This is a great example for people who say "blood is thinker than wate" or how they let others walk all over them just cause their related. Like no, these people are harmful to you emotionally, mentally and or physically you should have to put up with that. Cut them off if you need to. She gave them a second chance and they messed it up, now she should live life without regret cause she triex.

I would want to fight Helena too. She knew how he is and now she up in her feelings. 

The song is Casual Affair by Panic at the Disco. 

Also I'm liking the story so far and can't wait to see what the plot is.

Personally I think its overdramatic when people say each other's names more times than necessary, but that' just my thoughts on it. When dialoague is alternating between two people like how Katrina and Phoenix were talking,  you just have to Starr a new line with each dialoge( if that makes sense.) That way you don' have to be redundant with names in the actual speaking.

Oh and, Katrina is annoying. Like I understand that people will stay for love but it doesn't even seem like she really loves him, so for her to keep going back is like, baby what is you doin.

This is the juiciness I was waiting for. The main love interest, yeah? You wrote this chapter really well. Descriptive enough and to the point. I love it. I don' want to sound like a kiss up, I really don't but Kalan seems like a Great friend like the other two. 

Also I have a research paper due tonight but since I've been good all semester I decided to slack off a bit. And my major is international studies! I'm trying to become a translator.

"She's  my sister, she wouldn't do that." Ok. Sure ,Jan, keep lying to yourself. I honestly connect with Nix cause I would be so hesitant if someone asked me out, I would be hesitant too. I never dated so I would be like "What's the catch?" . Alex is going to make me throw hands cause he being mad disrespectful. If you want something speak up. 

With the details, I usually say, don't add anything that won't contribute to the story dont use it. Like dont write out her whole morning routine(brushing teeth,taking shower or bath, picking something to wear) if there's no purpose. Definitely take time to paint the scenery though. 

Lumberjack? Girl shoot that shot. A story I abandoned on here had the main guy with a lumberjack aesthetic. I would die. 😍😍

He's a dom? That could be tricky to write. You have to be careful not to make him come off as emotioally abusive. But other than that, great chapter. Karina needs more of her ass beat, but I understand it's a part of the plot. 😤

I'm a beginner in riding songbirds but it' hard for me to practice cause 1. I don' have friends and 2. The area I live in has too many inclines, i get scared when it picks up speed quickly. 😝 About my story, I just did one chapter and never sent back to it, but maybe I'll start it up again I don' know. I feel like it' so amature.

I think the first person is fine. Also I'm such a glutton for jealousy, just thinking about Ethan walking in on Shawn supporting Mia instead of him, gets me so excited. 

I' loving it so far. Also this is a concept I haven't seen before so I' curious to see how it plays out. Great job.