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Title: Chapter 1

Ok, so it seems the author hasn't been back since 8/7/12. After reading the 6 chapters... the incredibly rushed chapters I will say, I most certainly agree with Anon Reviwer of chapt 1 of fore mentioned date above. 

I felt like I was being rushed out of the story... lol. Come on and admit it reviewers, oh the story is good, but more character and relationship building is needed in chapter 7. And whatever happened to the pregnancy?! How could any1 comment on here and not mention that??

Any reviewer worth their opinion/words has got to bring that up. And what about the brunette in his condo, how did she know Evelyn was 1 month pregnant? Once again, come on.

Don't get me wrong, I like the story, I do, but plz explain the baby not mentioned and I'm good to go.

 Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: February 13 2016 09:33 am
Title: Chapter 6

did she have his baby or not? That story has not been updated in a while, will you come back and continue?

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: December 14 2014 06:44 pm
Title: Chapter 6

I hope someday you come back and finish this story. It has sooo much promise.

 Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 19 2014 06:16 pm
Title: Chapter 1

hey what happened?!  when u r going to update like where this is going...

 Reviewer: justmeplz Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 29 2014 05:52 am
Title: Chapter 6

OMG, please update this story. I love it sooo much. I cannot wait to see Evelyn and Senna's next interaction.

 Reviewer: Please... Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 08 2013 07:52 pm
Title: Chapter 6

I like Senna. Please tell me you plan to update. Did Evelyn lose the baby or did she abort it. When will Senna find out about it?

 Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25 2013 04:03 pm
Title: Chapter 4

Wow the passion was stifling! whoa!

 Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2012 12:05 am
Title: Chapter 3

Oh wow Senna is crazy about her I wonder about the baby she's pregnant with?

 Reviewer: NiaZ Signed [Report This]
Date: August 24 2012 07:23 pm
Title: Chapter 6

Great story!

Senna is a control freak, not abusive like Matthew, but close.

Dude needs to chill... and get a clue. Contrary to his usually usual and unfortunately successful practice, he isn't going to win Evelyn over with all his aggressive, heavy-handedness. That fact will either quickly, or more likely slowly, creep into the recesses of his impatient brain especially once the depressed Evelyn shows up for work.

Can't wait to read more!!

 Reviewer: Bluegardenia Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2012 02:39 am
Title: Chapter 6

Chapters are tooooo short!

 Reviewer: cuppacoffee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 04:12 pm
Title: Chapter 6

Thanks for the update.

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2012 02:38 pm
Title: Chapter 6

Loved the update!! Hope they can work it out as he really seems to love her.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2012 08:31 am
Title: Chapter 6

I'm glad Senna is going to be a complete jerk about it and that he really loves Evy.

Stages of grief for Evy? So I guess she lost the baby. That's a shame. I was hoping she had a little mini-me of him to show him.

Good stuff!



Author's Response: That's not quite what I meant, but thanks for the review!

Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2012 05:57 am
Title: Chapter 1

I have read the first three chapters and I am confused. You have rushed so much info in such a short span--describing the relationship between the two main protagonists that I fail to see any depth in either one of them. I think you should take some more time to properly set up a scene/setting instead of describing what is suppose to be something meaningful in establishing their bond instead of alluding to supposed bond in 2-3 sentences. It all feels rushed and disjointed, sorry :/



Author's Response: Thanks you for your review and I'm sorry you feel that way. Although I certainly appreciate that you've taken the time to explain your opinion, I don't particularly agree with your comment. Thanks again though!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 07 2012 05:33 am
Title: Chapter 6

Senna loves Evelyn and he's at a loss as to how to convince her of that love.  Evelyn is not receptive to that love even though she's feeling the same for Senna.  This is going to be good.  Thanks for the update!!!



Author's Response: Senna is positively smitten indeed.. Many thanks! Glad you enjoyed it

 Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2012 04:21 am
Title: Chapter 5

Loving this story so far. Did she lose the baby? Who was the mystery woman who rattled her? Hope Senna figures out the truth soon.

Author's Response: Thank you! All your questions will be answered soon, thanks again for your review.

 Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 06 2012 07:16 am
Title: Chapter 5

Very good story, but what happened with the pregnancy?

 Reviewer: Sandra Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 11:21 pm
Title: Chapter 5

Thanks for the update. I was just thinking about this story the other day and hoping for one.



Author's Response: Thanks, hope you enjoyed the update!

 Reviewer: AP Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 07:40 pm
Title: Chapter 1

‘Ow and Empress? Make no mistake, I will finish what we started.’

In this sentence, you mean to put "oh" and now "ow."  Ow, is the interjection people make to express pain.  Like, 'ow I just bumped by my leg."

It really changes the flow and meaning of your sentence. 

Now, taking off my grammar police hat and moving on to the rest of your story.  Thanks for sharing.




Author's Response: Thanks for spotting the error and pointing it out. Hope you enjoy the story despite it!

 Reviewer: Dee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 07:06 pm
Title: Chapter 5

I love it! Great story line and I want some truths to come out and get Evy and Senna together! 



Author's Response: Thanks for you lovely review! There are certainly some things to be cleared up!

 Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 03:56 pm
Title: Chapter 5

Enjoying the story but what happened to the pregnancy?  Did she have a miscarriage or give the baby up for adoption?  I hope this question will be answered soon.



Author's Response: Glad you enjoy it so far, I will answer this question as soon as I can!

 Reviewer: bookacholic247 Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 10:37 am
Title: Chapter 5

Thanks for a good update. What happened to Evelyn's baby? Thanks

 Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 10:09 am
Title: Chapter 5

I really enjoy this story. I can't wait for for the next update. Can please you make it a long one?

Thanks

Author's Response: Aaaw thanks, hope this update was a quicker and long enough. Thanks for reading :o)

 Reviewer: Emerald Taurus Anonymous starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 08:05 am
Title: Chapter 5

Good update .

 Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 05:51 am
Title: Chapter 5

Loving this story so far, did she actually have sennas baby?

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Date: August 05 2012 04:39 am


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