Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

Wow, Blue and Card really are ignorant. Instaed of encouraging their sister they want her to be their servant. Shon is too much. He's too controlling and makes me wonder if he's screwing around while keeping Dove on a short lease. I hope she gives them all a reality check!!

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2011 06:44 am

Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

Great update! Great story.  I can't wait til she gets to NY she needs a break from her "family".

I was trying to give Blue the benefit of the doubt when he first came in the kitchen but he blew that all the hell after continuing to talk.  Card is still on the hit list and now finding out that Shon and the brothers' were friends from the jump. I can't believe that her own brothers' can't seem to support her in anything concerning herself and why wasn't they there more for THEIR father and she sacrificed her higher education to take care of their father all by herself but they were with hands out when he passed.

Ahhhh! So it's Dove that could not have children bummer but I suppose it is for the best since she is with vanilla boy.

Thank you for sharing...I need more please :D

Happy writing!

Reviewer: Thundakat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 30 2011 12:55 am

Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

Nice chapter! Her brothers are insensitive to her needs. They sure seem to love what she can give them. Her brothers need to be more respectful and not so self centered.

Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 11:14 pm

Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

This is really good story.. I am hoping the character will grow into a thicker skin soon

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 10:03 pm

Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

I totally understand how Dove feels about her family , you just wanna kick them in the ASS . But you don't 'cause they are after all "family ". Super good update , can't wait for more.

Reviewer: Stacie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 09:51 pm

Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

Her brothers are selfish punks, and her husband Shon is a jackass.  I hope that she does find herself in New York so that she can kick all of those losers to the curb.  Starting with her husband!!!  Reading that chapter made me feel so sad for her, I know how it feels to have no one on side in your family.  It sucks!!  Great story, and I can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 06:57 pm

Title: Chapter 2 (part II)

My mouse wanted to keep scrolling and read more...

Oh Alices...you're such a tease...

Reviewer: TheSouthernScribe Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 05:50 pm

Title: Chapter 2

have just finished the two chs and i know i'm going to enjoy the read - look more than forward when Dove arrives in NY and meets Xavier. it's going to be something else! thanks for posting your story!

Reviewer: Cassius.Noir Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 02:01 pm

Title: Chapter 2

I'm so loving this story!!!, CAN'T WAIT UNTIL THE NEXT CHAPTER

Reviewer: Tracy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 11:24 am

Title: Chapter 2

Love it....please update soon

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 29 2011 08:46 am

Title: Chapter 2

Obviously, very well written :-)  I'm enjoying Dove's character, she's not the conventional woman you usually find in these stories, and I like that.  She's realistic.

Looking forward to the next chapter ;)

Reviewer: Lavina Lanae Signed [Report This]
Date: July 28 2011 11:42 pm

Title: Chapter 2

Well damn! I don't think I care for SHON very much.  He is lame and a whiner where the alpha at surly not in his ass.  He probably a mama's boy too.

I don't think I am going to like her brothers are that much either but we shall see.

Back to that prick of a husband dang can you say vanilla.  He has not a romantic bone in his body.  He is selfish.  Sounds a bit chauvinistic which sounds about that messure with her brothers as well.  He acts like she can't do better then him and apparently she has it in her head imo that she can't cause she gives up the excuses as to why he is a good man so what he cooks and occasionally loads the dishwasher and puts of his clothes excuse me but they are his clothes. Then the only thing that excites him is playoff games and bachlor parties but he doesn't like her to wear sexy lingerie and thinks she is a sexy fien or nympho when she asks for what she wants then when she tries to tell him what excites her he tells her he knows what he doing...BRO apparently NOT.  Yes, sista girl you could do worse but honey could also do a whole lot better.  Then he is not supportive of her passion in writing calling it just a book what's so important about it. 

I want to also know who is having the problem with having a baby even though it maybe good since he is an ass wipe that they not have children together I bet or hope anything that's his fault to his swimmers are not potent enough.

Sorry getting off my ranting box Shon just royally pissed me off.

Thank you for sharing enjoying the story.

Happy writing.

Reviewer: Thundakat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2011 11:08 pm

Title: Chapter 1.

Interesting....I am waiting to see what you have in store for us.

Thank you for taking a chance and sharing your writing.

Happy writing!

Reviewer: Thundakat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2011 10:29 pm

Title: Chapter 2

I'm feeling for Dove. I'm sorry but her husband is just selfish. No wonder she's writing about erotica. Its missing from her life. Shon is boring and isn't making any effort to make things exciting for Dove. Do they really love each other or did they just settle??

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2011 09:23 pm

Title: Chapter 2

I loved that I was in Charleston riding over the bridge when I started this chapter.

More...yes...Please...if it will hurry your posting along :)

Reviewer: TheSouthernScribe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 28 2011 08:58 pm

Title: Chapter 1.

I'm straight digging this!! More please!

Reviewer: Elizablu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2011 08:06 pm

Title: Chapter 1.

Great start; can't wait to see what Dove gets into in the big city...sounds like this trip is going to be quite the eye-opener.

Reviewer: Amiefuzzy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2011 06:07 pm

Title: Chapter 1.

Pierce is an ass, and an arrogant one to boot.  Don't like him much!!  She's not going to cheat on her husband is she?  I hope not!!!  Me likey!!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: July 27 2011 05:02 pm

Title: Chapter 1.

Yaaaaaaaayyyyyy!!! I am all happy dances and joy Alice! Yay!

Reviewer: Onimosity Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2011 06:30 am

Title: Chapter 1.

Me likey!! More please. Can't wait for them to meet.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2011 06:24 am

Title: Chapter 1.

well, this is intriguing. i give a ten, just for pulling me in. but i shall hold off on in-depth until there is more.

Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2011 05:43 am



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