Ummm...who dis chick Kalani Zoldyck and can we fight her? I already took off my earrings. 

But seriously, please do keep us updated on your publishing. I love your writings and will happily purchase.

I loved this story and your others. Are you going tonpublish any of them. I would gladly pay you as the originator of these stories. It’s so messed up that someone would intentionally take someone else’s work as their own. Anyway many blessings, hope to see further updates some day.

Coco is tough, like Mal...they seem a good match...masked sensitivity under a tough exterior...good story so far...

Confused... "Frannie... when you saw that white bastard...you should have never said anything to him! You know Mary watches people like a hawk...Pop will find out about this shit and Darren is good as dead." Where did that verbal exchange between Francis and Mal take place? I kind of like the story, but just when I get the gist of what the story or current dialogue is about, the characters or discussion change. Conversations pop up that seemed to have been started way before me, the reader read them. This story is all over the place.

New characers are introduced here and there and then through their quick chit-chat ( hospital room with Derrick and Francis), I have to decipher who is related to or who is with whom. 

I'm sure this sounds picky of me, on the positive this is a good story, loved the 1st sentence in chapter 1, but you really need an editor. I do kinda get what you mean or are leading up to. It just comes across like your ideas are all over one another. It seems Lyon have soooo many different relationships going on at the same time. Personally you should focus on your lead characters and ONLY those that they directly or indirectly interact with.

i gotta ask what is with the Benny character is he in love with Tabby or a racist? Both he and his soon to be ex both referred to his current girl friend either as a nigga or a monkey. That was made me have to back up. The reference didn't bother me, but why is Benny that seems to be in love with another black woman easily using the n-word. Your characters come across a limitless rough or street. The Scottish people not believable.

okay, I'll stop. Before you delete my review (really look for what I said, which was only the tip of the ice berg), know this was not done to be malicious. The things I commented on I'm sure others hae noted as well.

BANG! Wow what an opening. I'm already hooked.

DAMN!  Francis is always getting a Hellifyed beating because of all the Hate she has for CoCo keep making her do mean actions, I feel kind of sorry for her since her beatings are always so severe just like in the fight she caused before Jace and Tabby's wedding in the story Full Bloom.

Nevertheless, Darren showed himself to be a real punk by hitting Coco in retaliation for her fighting Francis.  I mean REALLY!  WOW!  Darren is muscular and strong and he hit Coco with full powered fist as he would a man.  I guess he also been repressing a lot of strong hatred on Coco.  Real glad Mal beat his ass, in defense of Coco.

Wow can you say intense. Gotta say for all the short chicks out there Coco did me proud. I'm guessing the story in the beginning is her mother and father. Guess i'll have to read and find out. Great opening.

OMG OMG...He got knocked the f**k out!!! (chris tucker voice)

Mal is a mess, really rage gives you a hard on? Sounds like my kind of man...IJS. Loved the ending! So why is everybody so upset that Cayenne is a slut. I get why Coco is upset; but why is it such a big issue for everyone else. I can't wait to see what is going on with her.

And finally....

GET SOME SLEEP CRAZY WOMAN!!!

So it seems like Durbin and Francis are brother and sister. Does this mean that Coco is also their sister? I hope I am not confused. They're plotting against one of their own.

I'm glad Mary gave her an intro to a beatdown. Francis just doesn't learn. Too bad for Darren, but he put himself in this position. If he would just wise up and see her for who she really is, he would be better off. Welp! So glad they have been kicked out of town. But I know Francis has more tomfoolery up her sleeve.

Sebastian was trying to put on game and was shot down . . . LMAO! Linette is hilarious and a very strong woman. I like her.

Ginger's karma is raining down on her and hopefully this is just the beginning. I'm proud that Benny had a change of heart and is ready to start over fresh. Their child deserves parents that are unselfish and are looking to be a better example. Benny has wised up and Ginger hasn't. She is still being foolish and thinks she has done nothing wrong. Stoopid girl! If he can get someone that genuinely loves him and their child, then I say go for it. Ginger will corrupt anything she comes into contact with.

I just knew something was bound to happen when Coco and Mal woke up. Seems like they were trying to make their dreams a reality. And boy was it getting good. Calise had me dying and of course Mal had to have the last parting shot. Officially dead. These two are hilarious. Wait til Junior finds out.

Update soon. <3

So it would seem that nasty ass durbin and loose booty franc are brother and sister to each other and also to Coco if I am reading and understanding correctly.

I am glad you are not finished with Ginger yet she needs so much more punishment bestowed upon her and she should not only lose her husband in divorce but maternal rights over Evie allowing another better woman to be able to adopt her.  Benny has seemed to man up and know he franked up in the worst way but never anything close to that skank way of doing things and now he is will to do right and be a better father and I hope and pray a better man all around for the next true woman.

Mal and Coco were about to get it on in real life cause apparently their dreams had already made it there.

Loving the story...Thank you for sharing.

More please.

Happy writiung

Well Sam it would seem that your grandfather brought bad karma on the family and you are getting the butt end of it.  It would seem that the recipe that your grandfather stole which I am thinking it came from a relative of Coco's or Tabby and now the rightful family that owns it has taken it back.  Aint karma a bitch then on top of that your wifey apparently wasn't getting enough from you and was getting servered properly by someone else.

It would seem seem that not only Coco is goimg to encounter some past demons and mistakes but Mal go a few heading his way as well and Mr. Sam when wakes up will be on the war path I hope his ass fall like a big ass tree in the forest.  But durn I can feel the drama already.

Jace and Tabby are now married yeeeeeeeah (I have to say I looked at the cast pic and Jace just doesn't look like the hottie in "Full Bloom" cast pics, but I could be wrong)

Franc seems like she can't learn from warning alone so needs a follow up of some serious open a can of whip ass for her to fully comprehend.

Thank you for sharing.

Happy writing.

Wonderful update just be mindful of verb tense.