I love love love this story. So beautiful so sad. I really felt andrew''s pain to begin with. How he''s torn between Dana and Ingrid and doing the ''right thing'' but it''s been a year later and he''s not choosing and the longer he keeps cheating the more complicated it gets and uhhhh... it''s just an amazing story. I''ll stop ranting now. I''ll be back to rant some more at a later date... But yeah... awesome work!
', '2011-07-16 20:18:42', 10, '0', 'ST'), (70634, 1882, 12574, 'intellectual titmouse', 727, 'i need more. then i'll have a more well-round review. for now though? this is soooo intriguing!Author''s Response:
Thank you so much mouse! I hope you like it and would love to know your thoughts, good or bad.
Reviewer: SPimpernel Signed
[Report This]Date: March 24 2011 01:24 am
I love the way this is written! your goood!
', '2011-07-15 10:33:11', -1, '0', 'ST'), (73420, 1882, 12574, 'Kristin', 0, 'Ahhh!!! He has a fiancee! I'm sensing drama aheadAuthor''s Response:
You sense correctly :P thank you so much kristin!
Reviewer: Sure_Thang Signed [Report This]Date: April 19 2011 06:25 am
Lovin this!
Reviewer: Sure_Thang Signed [Report This]Date: July 15 2011 05:31 pm
This is and awesome story. I have been reading since you first posted. Unfortionally Dana and Andrew's story is all to real, but something has to give. I believe that Andrews girlfriend knows something is up with him because of the on again, off again affair that she has and the fact that she has never demanded Andrew set a date for the wedding just shows you that she is okay with the way things are. Now Dana and Andrew will have to piss or get off the pot! What will happen if Dana gets pregnant? Since Andrew doesnt like using condoms with Dana, do you think that maybe is what he wants, that way the decision is made for him. It is clear that he doesnt want to let her go! I believe that they love each other. Now Mimi had ever right to tell Dana what she did, if a friend cant be truthful with you who can. I know it sounded a little hard but Mimi only said what she did because she loves her like a sister. I also think its time for Dana to be happy and girl let that man do you orally!! Of course there is something from her pass that is holding her back. Dana let go and be free enjoy your life with the man you love and that is Andrew!!
Reviewer: Kaye_kaye77 Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 14 2011 07:33 am
Damn, damn, damn!!
Reviewer: sjrucker Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 14 2011 04:49 am
I read all thirteen chapters in one night. This story is hot, and also very realistic. I love it. I hope you finish it. I check every day to see if it's updated. <3
Author's Response:
Wow, that's awesome! Thank you heaps Mariah! I will try to add as soon as I can, once my net situation is fixed.
Reviewer: Mariah Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 10 2011 07:30 am
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Dana is kind of weird. Why doesn''t she like oral sex? There must be something wrong.
I do not approve of what Dana is doing, but Mimi has no right to judge her. She was kind of a bad friend to her right now. And Dana is right Mimi is noisy as hell and she should mind her own business. Dana doesn''t have to tell her every single thing about her life. She deserved her privacy. I''m not saying that Mimi should encourage what she is doing. She has the right to give her opinion and tell her that what she is doing is wrong. However the way she is doing it is very judgmental. More than her friend she acts like she is Dana''s mother and that Dana has to ask her for her permission if she wants to do something.
Seriously Mimi really pissed me off in this chapter. I was glad that Dana fought back. She shouldn''t feel sorry for the way she countered Mimi, because she was clearly out of line. A real friend would never treat you like that. And what she told Dana about her parents was very low.
Author''s Response:
I agree with you, thank you so much for the great review!
Reviewer: Me Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 04 2011 06:38 am
Poor Dana...she''s in a really tough spot, but she did get herself into it...it''ll be interesting to see if Andrew steps up and finally does the right thing. It seems he is just as invested in Dana as she is in him, so I''m not sure what''s holding him back...he really doesn''t seem to care for Ingrid at all.
rnLooking forward to the next update whenever you get back; have fun with the family!
Reviewer: Amiefuzzy Signed [Report This]Date: July 04 2011 05:55 am
Dana is heading for heartache and trouble. Andrew is a dog for messing around with her when he''s involved with someone else.
Dana treated Mimi terribly. As her friend she told her what she believed in but Dana didn''t want to hear it but to throw her friendship away because of Andrew!! SAD!!! Hope she doesn''t regret it!!!
Author''s Response:
I''m sure it will be sorted :) thank you baha!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: July 04 2011 04:26 am
Loved the last chapter... Simply perfection. I like that Dana got out her feeling in one than another... I'm starting to understand her vunrability more. Oh and thanks for the added pic of Phillip I now see how attractive he really is. The first pic I thought he was ugly, LOL But I ran with it and as I read more he became more attractive to me.
Author's Response:
Thank you pretty eyes! I updated the picture of andrew and dana cause in part two a bit of time has passed since their first encounter which is 2003. Not many years but just a couple. I'm glad you noticed the topic on his looks, I didn;t want a traditional handsome guy, i wanted someone a bit rough looking. Thank you for the wonderful review and I'm glad you liked it!
Reviewer: Pretty eyes Signed [Report This]Date: June 26 2011 02:28 am
Great story. Please update soon.
Author's Response:
Update has been added, thank you kaye!
Reviewer: Kaye_kaye77 Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 19 2011 08:45 pm
You mentioned you never wrote a sex scene before. I surly couldn't tell. You did a amazing job... The literotica comment LOL The thing I liked is that you made the scene classy and I didn't finish like I just fucked the characters myself. Like I said you made it classy and left a little mystery behind it too. LOVED it. Now I'm curious to what will happen since they didn't use protection.
Oh and by the way the picture in chapt 7 so beautiful. I like how you ran with the imagination of it being a nude painting. Very clever.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much sweetie, Im so glad you liked it. I was actually worried it would be too graphic or crude so Im glad it didn't come across that way. Im uncomfortable with sex scenes but im hoping practice makes perfect lmao.
I'm glad you liked the picture, i did too. Seeing the picture alone inspired that chapterm, I love my visuals lol.
Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 11 2011 10:20 pm
I really loved this chapter.
Author''s Response:
Thank you so much!
Reviewer: anon Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 08 2011 09:28 am
Excellent
Author''s Response:
Thank you Bain! And I accidentally deleted one of your reviews when I was meant to respond, sorry about that!
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 05 2011 02:45 am
Excellent
Author''s Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 05 2011 02:38 am
Excellent
Author''s Response:
Thanks!
Reviewer: Bain Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 05 2011 02:33 am
Great chapter, as always. Nice to read Andrew''s POV.
Author''s Response:
Thank you DiamondLady! :D
Reviewer: DiamondLady28 Signed [Report This]Date: June 05 2011 02:21 am
(trying, struggling to breathe calmly)
rnI haven''t even read this chapter yet. I only made it to your chapter notes in the beginning about the cretin who gave you a bad review. I''m filled with so many emotions, I don''t know where to start first!
rnHad you stopped this story after that review, girl....I would have tracked you down to smack you around until you realized that YOU SHOULD NEVER STOP WRITING!
rnThe next time you start to doubt yourself, please remember Vladimir Nabokov''s ''Lolita''. That was and is a controversial book but yet is regarded as *classic literature* and is on several...let me say this again, SEVERAL lists for being one of the best books of the 20th century!
rnThis story is fiction and your right to free speech that does not spread hate.
rnBut better yet, this story is realistic with its flawed characters in a way that siezes many of us b/c we see aspects of ourselves here.
rnKeep writing. We''ll keep reading.
rnThat. is. all.
Author''s Response:
Aww thank you so much Islandlass! That''s so sweet of you, I will keep writing, not to worry!
Reviewer: islandlass Signed [Report This]Date: June 04 2011 12:28 pm
oh so ingrid is stepping out with this thomas dude, ok so no more sympathy for her. on you go andrew, just don''t do dana wrong.
Author''s Response:
lol! thank you grumpirah!
', '2011-06-04 00:19:34', 10, '1', 'ST'), (77496, 1882, 12580, 'baha_malo', 408, 'Loved the update but Andrew needs to do what''s best for him and not try to please Benjamin or Ingrid. Regardless of how long he''s been with Ingrid if she doesn''t make him happy or causes too much distress with her mood swings, he needs to get the heck OUT whether he forms a bond with Dana or not!!! He needs not to get caught up in the comfort zone and be afraid to leave her .Author''s Response:
I agree with you, it is the right thing to do. Thank you Baha!
Author''s Response:
I agree with you, it is the right thing to do. Thank you Baha!
Reviewer: grumpirah Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 04 2011 07:58 am
smh. i don''t know if i trust Ben, but we shall see. damn good chapter. love the link with Phillip; makes this all the more intriguing. Andrew is seriously stuck between a rock and a hard place. you make his plight so incredibly human and plausible. i feel for the guy and all characters, really. i know what it''s like to deal with bi-polar disorder in a very personal sense, so i really feel for Ingrid, but that chick needs help. more help than what Andrew can offer, to be honest. well done, as per usual. can''t wait for the next update.
Author''s Response:
Thank you so much mouse :D I always look forward to your reviews, they make my day! The thing with Phillip is a background story I am working on at the moment, I am tempted to stary posting now but I''m forcing myself to wait until this story is finished. Again, thank you for all your support!
Author''s Response:
Thank you so much mouse :D I always look forward to your reviews, they make my day! The thing with Phillip is a background story I am working on at the moment, I am tempted to stary posting now but I''m forcing myself to wait until this story is finished. Again, thank you for all your support!
Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Signed [Report This]Date: June 04 2011 05:34 am
Why is Andrew still with Ingrid? Is it guilt? Why can''t admit how he feels about Dana? He is in complete denial, and his so-called friends are aholes!!! I love this story!!
Author''s Response:
lol you always tell it how it is and i love that! thank you gayles!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: June 04 2011 02:16 am
I guess the rude person that came to you like that was probably mad because you used Aaliyah's face as one of the characters. I'm guessing, and they may feel that if a form of disrespect. But hey its a great story and this is a fanfiction site. That person obviously doesn't know what Fanfiction means. If they don't like it than they shouldn't read it. Don't let anyone discourage you from doing something just because they don't like it.
Bottom line is you have a good story here and you are very talented. And I don't care if you use Aaliyah or shrek I"m still going to read you're story because its the BOMB DOT COM and like I said if a person doesn't like it, then don't read it.
Author's Response:
Hey pretty eyes, you are right it was to do with my casting mainly. But the thing is, all my characters in all of my stories are flawed people. I used the previous casting in a drug addiction story and scrapped it when I got the same complaint on the forum. I'm not using their actual names or real lives so I didn't understand why people took issue with it.
I will keep writing this though, thank you so much!
Reviewer: Pretty eyes Signed [Report This]Date: May 31 2011 02:27 am
okay, so i missed two updates, but i''m all caught up. so glad i am too cuz i missed this story. it''s moving along well; that scene with them at the party last chapters was a-mazing! talk about hawt! so wrong, but damn that was good! and as far as this chapter, i friggin'' knew he felt obligated to her! smh.
rnnow onto what really kinda pissed me off: who in the hell told you that you ought to be ashamed of yourself for writing this story?! NEVER, EVER LET SOMEONE MAKE YOU THINK TWICE ABOUT YOUR STORY ON A MORALITY TIP. this person must live with rose-coloured glasses on, because affairs happen, people meet others and fall out of love to walk into lust all the time. it''s human, it happens. who ever wrote that to you is not a writer, at least not a good one. this story isn''t about promoting infidelity; it''s simply a story that is well-written with complex, realistic characters and a heavy plot. don''t let that person get you down. this is a free website for people to show talent and you have it.
rnthat shit pissed me off beyond belief. do not take this story down b.c of that email. that was rude, inconsiderate, and bull-headed of that person. i''ve received negative feedback on a few of my stories but i only use it as fuel to write more. they don''t have to agree with what i write; this is a free country. go read something else or if you critisize, make it constructive and not some pseudo-morality lecture. ugh.
rnoooo, who was it?! i wanna email them!
rnplease continue with this story. haters gon'' hate.
Author''s Response:
Hey mouse, thank you so much for your show of support, it means so much!
rnThe writer had an issue with the casting of the story as well as the content. The thing is I am not using actual names or true life events, but she still claimed it disrespectful. I wasn''t really sure what to say, because I had the two main leads used in a story about drug addiction which was shot down too so I didn''t end up posting it.
rnWith all my stories though I used very flawed, messed up people. Writing happy characters in happy love stories is just not my thing. So I guess those who don''t like will just have to deal with it. My concern was that everyone was feeling the way this one person was, and I thought if that was the case, I would have to just delete it. But since it isn''t I will keep writing. Again, thank you for all your support, I will keep updating!
Reviewer: intellectual titmouse Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 29 2011 07:09 pm
awww please dont take it down i love thiss story its exactly what ive been looking for since ive been on this site nd i always look forward to your updates so pretty please dont take it down your a very gifted writer dont let other peoples negative opinions stop you
Author''s Response:
Thank you for the review Nikki, I''ll continue writing, not to worry. Thank you so much!
Reviewer: nikki Signed [Report This]Date: May 27 2011 10:04 pm
Please do not pay any attention to the people that are trying to bring you down cause Honey your story is amazing! I hope you feel better to continue this story because I defiantly want you to, I need to know what happens! please update soon. xo
Author's Response:
Don't worry Catherine I've decided to keep going, thank you for the support!
Reviewer: Catherine Anonymous [Report This]Date: May 27 2011 09:24 pm