I enjoyed this chapter..I love Devyn's friendships. So she sketched Jason? Interesting. Even though I don't like how he is intent on Devyn telling him the truth (as if she owes him), I think they'd make an interesting pair. Honestly, why can't he just get his detective friend to follow Erin...since she's being sloppy and even fucking the club. Just saying...if he didn't want his detective friend to find out what he's up to...hire another. What was the point of having Devyn checked out like that? When he coud have just hired someone to see what Erin is up to when she's not with his brother? Oh I get it...that little background check wasn't about bringing Erin down, lol (though he definitely wants to bring Erin dow)/...his detective friend had him pegged. Hmm...wonder what his "social circle" is going to think when he brings Devynm "the Bohemian" to the dinner party? I'm intrigued by this story to say the least.
Reviewer: Natori aka R Signed
[Report This]Date: January 08 2012 04:01 am
I really like your story. Great writing, easty to following, and interesting characters. The only thing that jumped out at me was a misspelling of Orgasm. You spelled organism and it made the sentence read much funnier than you intended. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
My spell checker must have missed that one....lol! Thx for reading:-)
Reviewer: Dee Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 08 2012 01:10 am
The more I read...the more I'm loving this story!!! Update soon
Reviewer: vmck Signed [Report This]Date: January 07 2012 01:20 pm
I just started reading this and I'm hooked. Keep up the good work and happy holidays :)
Author's Response:
Thank you all for the positive feedback. Happy Holidays and many blessings from my family to yours:-)
Reviewer: LadyK Signed [Report This]Date: December 25 2011 02:59 am
im going to need you to update this. like today. its so good, im dying here. awesome writing style, i love it :)
Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed [Report This]Date: December 20 2011 06:46 am
im going to need you to update this. like today. its so good, im dying here. awesome writing style, i love it :)
Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed [Report This]Date: December 20 2011 06:46 am
im going to need you to update this. like today. its so good, im dying here. awesome writing style, i love it :)
Reviewer: apathetic_smileyface Signed [Report This]Date: December 20 2011 06:46 am
I love this! Please continue!
Reviewer: LuKohana Signed [Report This]Date: December 12 2011 02:59 pm
Extremely good start! Can't wait for the next installemnt!
Reviewer: Sandra Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 11 2011 08:22 pm
I am enjoyin thi read, can't wait to read more.
a new FAN!!!!
Kim
Reviewer: kimyso Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 11 2011 06:38 pm
Why did she not tell him the truth. Erin was a stranger to her. Now she bring trouble on herself, because he is not going to give up until he knows the truth. So she should not be angry at him but at herself for being stupid. More please.
Reviewer: skriver Signed [Report This]Date: December 11 2011 06:10 pm
I like this story a good start. Jason is on a mission and Erin is just nasty. More chapters
Reviewer: foxyprime Signed [Report This]Date: December 11 2011 05:45 pm
Great beginning. Can't wait to see how the story develops!
Reviewer: Yasmin Anonymous [Report This]Date: December 11 2011 02:09 pm