You should reconsider not re-editing your work. I read as far as 3/4 of the way through the first chapter before I stopped. There is at least 1 simple gramatical error in every paragraph. Simple things like plurals and past or present tense. It it difficult to read when I have to mentally correct your word choices just for the story to make sense.
Reviewer: Dinndee Signed [Report This]Date: August 24 2015 05:16 pm
loved it!!MORE!!
Reviewer: silentwriter Signed [Report This]Date: June 08 2013 02:08 pm
You get 50 billion points just for using Jimmy Q! Ah I love him!!
Author's Response:
hahha Ah. I love Jimmy Q. His sexiness can not be described :)
Reviewer: chocachocacandyland Signed [Report This]Date: June 07 2013 04:22 am
The person who you have chosen for Ailyanna is so beautiful . Very good start so far. Can't wait for their first meeting.
Reviewer: Amaya Signed [Report This]Date: June 02 2013 09:21 pm
loved it!
Reviewer: silentwriter Signed [Report This]Date: May 31 2013 04:40 am
Dang Sergei looks delish :)
Author's Response:
the sexy jimmy q.
Reviewer: LadySade Signed [Report This]Date: May 31 2013 04:20 am
love the pics
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: May 31 2013 03:57 am
I emailed you!!!!
Love the beginning!
Author's Response:
Hey thanks. I emailed you back you were really sweet. Taking it all in and hopefully you will see results.
Reviewer: idiotendenial Signed [Report This]Date: May 31 2013 02:43 am
Me likey!!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: May 31 2013 01:33 am
Very nice looking cast so far
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]Date: January 02 2012 01:08 am
love the build-up. please continue the story!
Reviewer: katie Signed [Report This]Date: January 01 2012 06:17 am
Finally Woman that has dark skin...Love the pics
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: December 31 2011 05:01 am