I enjoyed it, but couldn't shake the association with Lt. Dan from Forrest Gump. :-D
you might need a beta-reader to help iron out spelling and other errors that spellcheck won't catch (like "steer" instead of "stare").
is it just my imagination, that you skipped directly over describing the really tense scenes: the fight when Dan tells her that he's joining the Army; her months of not hearing from him; the pain of him recovering and going through rehab maybe with only her face in his mind to motivate.
Each of those would make a great chapter in itself, or as flashback. Don't rush yourself... Or your story. It's worth it!
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]
Date: September 24 2014 08:12 am
I liked the story however it could use some major editing. Also Daniel is not a quadraplegic if he has the use of his arms, he would classified as a paraplegic meaning he has no use of his legs. Other than that it was a good story!
Thanks, I will get to editing..Reviewer: BossLady Signed [Report This]
Date: April 12 2012 09:41 pm
a really nice story! at first i was mad at Daniel for not telling Tracy but i hear him and undetstand why he did it - and he more made up at the end with that sexiness and confidence, lol! thanks for the one-shot!!
Thank you much!Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11 2012 09:20 am
I like the story. What I like best is that Daniel came home whole even though he was not physically fit. He made sure that he came back ready to show his wife that he was the same man with a few changes. I hope that make sense.
lol yes it did. Glad you liked it. Thank you!Reviewer: Cherry Anonymous [Report This]
Date: April 10 2012 03:29 am