Reviews For The Better Life
Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

Lovin' your story. So sad about Jason's mom and her unhappy ending with Jason's father.

Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 13 2013 07:01 am

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

Loved the update and the fact that he and his mom are in a good place.

Reviewer: baha_malo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 13 2013 06:16 am

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

This update was truly worth the wait.  I hope that everything will all work out in the end.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 13 2013 01:30 am

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

so good u rock more soon

Reviewer: faye Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 13 2013 12:09 am

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

love this story, great to see that you're back

Reviewer: keikei2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 07:57 pm

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

I'm glad that she said yes and they are getting married and going to have a baby. I love the talk she had with jason's mother and breaks my heart what that woman went thu with Jack Jr he was so  cruel to her. I cant' wait to Keisha has that talk with him. Thank for the update.

Reviewer: wwefanforlife Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 05:22 pm

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

Looking forward to the epilogue! Great update and love them together.

Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 03:45 pm

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

Jack is an asswipe how could Alessandra still love him?  I can't wait for this conversation, Keyshia will chew him up and spit him out!  I hate to see this end as it was so good. I am that she told Jason that she was preggers and he reacted just like I thought he would. Jason is a good man unlike his father! Jason is a real man!  Good job!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 02:50 pm

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

I love the story however, I hope that Jason man's up more..He comes off as a weaker of the two personality which long term can be a problem. Great update, thanks!

Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 02:36 pm

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

I enjoyed meeting Alessandra and finding out her side of what happened. I do wonder what happened after those 8 years to make Jack change so drastically? I'm sad to see this end but glad a HEA looks to be in sight for Keyshia and Jason. 

Reviewer: AP Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 01:04 pm

Title: Chapter 21-Part 1

Thank you for the update....I love jason's mother..please update soon

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2013 08:18 am

Title: Chapter 20

omg dying to read the next chapter.plzzz dnt end the story so soon there is so much more potential to this story....dnt rush into a quick ending and ruin this awesome story......dying to see jasons reaction.......wil keisha say yes....what will they do about the pregnancy...will the new york people get to know about it...and hw will they react...will there be more drama with jasons family and will everything become public....will jasons dad ever meet his mom.....wil keishaa move to braazil permanently..,...dying to knoww....love ur sstory updaate soon!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: lizzie Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 16 2013 12:07 pm

Title: Chapter 20

I just caught up with this story and its fabulous.

Reviewer: juno Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 15 2013 07:51 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Ending already? But this is only chapter 4 right? No? But seriously.....I have loved this story from the first paragraph to the last period. You gave Keisha the strenght she needed and Jason the balls to walk away from his overbearing father and that ridiculous family tradition. Thank you for such a wonderful story!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 14 2013 06:51 am

Title: Chapter 20

Ending already? But this is only chapter 4 right? No? But seriously.....I have loved this story from the first paragraph to the last period. You gave Keisha the strenght she needed and Jason the balls to walk away from his overbearing father and that ridiculous family tradition. Thank you for such a wonderful story!

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 14 2013 06:50 am

Title: Chapter 20

No, suggestions, just keep writing your vision, and I'll keep reading...

Reviewer: LadyeT Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 13 2013 04:26 pm

Title: Chapter 20

Great update

Reviewer: nightseer Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 07:14 am

Title: Chapter 20

love it!

Reviewer: PetitteBelle Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 06:45 am

Title: Chapter 20

Loved the chapter.I'm glad his mom turned out to be so sweet.

Well this is good; she's preggers and he asked her to marry him before she told him. Thats makes all the difference, I think.

Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 04:16 am

Title: Chapter 20

LOL!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is a great update.

Reviewer: HumorMe Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 03:51 am

Title: Chapter 20

Love the story!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 03:03 am

Title: Chapter 20

This chapter actually made me tear, between Key finding out she's pregnant to Jay finally meeting his mom, than to the wedding proposal and than finally telling him that he's going to be a DADDY!!! I'm so excited about the next chapter...10



Author's Response:

AWWW! Thank you so much

This really means a lot to me :))

Reviewer: keikei2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 12:50 am

Title: Chapter 20

  First of all great upate that was well worth the wait.  As for what should happen is that they should get married.  They have always workde things out and this situation with Keyshia being pregnant is not too different.  I know Jason is a better man thaen his father will ever be and will no doubt be a loving father.  They will both get what they always wanted a family that will love one another not matter what life throws their way. 



Author's Response:

I'm looking forward to posting the next chapter and I will definitely refer back to your suggestion! They're strong individually, but even stronger together :)

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: February 12 2013 12:48 am

Title: Chapter 20

Wow! Love this update. Please do not take so long to update. 

Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]
Date: February 11 2013 11:37 pm

Title: Chapter 2

I really like where this story is going. It's different and the story unfolds nicely at a good pace. And I can't wait to continue reading to see where it goes.

There are a couple of things that are bugging me. So Keyshia (K-E-Y-S-H-I-A Lol that was funny) has her skanky friends that are a little wild and loose, but that's fine cuz we all friends like that. But what bothers me is that she lef the "private dancing session" after basically being sexually assaulted by a guy and finds comfort with a stranger via alcohol.

She just seemed to get over that kinda quickly. IMHO But maybe I chalk it up to the fact she's only 21 and inexperienced. Getting drunk with a total stranger that doesn't know your name is NOT COOL. I mean what is she thinking? She's never drunk before and wants to get wasted on her own? Smh.. Crazy!

Also from the get go, Keyshia had this thing against the wealthy but for someone who is "down-to-earth" she sure seems to admire and comment on money A LOT. She either has never ever been around wealthy people and has a secret admiration for it OR there's another reason she is the way she is. But she seems a little uncouth. It's funny how invested I am in your characters.. your that good! :) 

But I'm excited to continue reading- thank you so much for letting us read this interesting tale. 



Author's Response:

:') thank you

For some weird reason, I have a hard time with constistancy and I just go with whatever comes to mind.

I think Keyshia saw something in Jason that she didn't see in the weird creepy guy. She knew deep down inside that he was trustworthy. She also wanted to let loose that night by drinking and if it wasn't going to be with her friends, why not with a sexy charming guy?

ALSO, thanks for pointing that out about the money thing! She can be a bit of a hypocrite at times, but trust me...she's not with him for the money and she has issues with people who have so much of it because of the way she grew up

<3

Reviewer: Anon Anonymous [Report This]
Date: February 11 2013 11:20 pm



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