Brian sounds like an ass. Kenny just might be the guy to help Kelsey win back her confidence.
Reviewer: juno Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 02:42 pm
Nice cast pics!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 06:43 am
Great start so far. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 06:10 am
I like it so far. The relationship between her and Mel is great comic relief!
Reviewer: Drea Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 05:50 am
Great 1st chapter!
Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 05:48 am
Me likey!! More please.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I will!
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 03:40 am
Nice pics. Thanks
Author's Response:
Thanks! I saw this hot Thai guy the other day and it got me to thinking! :)
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 02:31 am
Good start to the story. Thanks
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 02:31 am
Look at that man's abs, I could just lick em like a ice cream cone!! Hound doggy!!
Author's Response:
LOL! I know right!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 02:29 am
Be still my beating heart another story with a asian male lead!!! Thank you, thank you, Thank you!!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 02:28 am
I can't tell when people are talking, there are too few quotation marks and the format is all off. Its confusing. Also VERY cliche.
I realize that you are happy and nervous to get your ideas out there, but PLEASE try getting a beta, you need one.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading and critiquing! I'm a former scientist and I'm now in pharmacy school and writing is not my first speciality. I appreciate the constructive criticism, but if I don't know what the problem is then how am I suppose to fix it? If you're telling me something is cliche, then exactly which part is cliche because I wrote this from my own personal experiences. As far as the formatting goes, I submitted this from my iPAD and didnt realize the formatting was off until after I submitted it. Again, thanks for your response, but if you don't like the story that's perfectly fine. There are plenty of other stories and plenty of other writers on here that may be to your liking.
Reviewer: Brenda Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 01:23 am
more please! i love it so far
Author's Response:
Thank you! I will!
Reviewer: Sharise Signed [Report This]Date: July 07 2012 12:30 am
Nice. I like it. Forget about Brian, she has an MM fighter now.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review! I appreciate it!
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: July 06 2012 09:30 pm
I love bw/am stories. Please update soon.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Me too! I saw this Thai guy and it got me to thinking! :)
Reviewer: Dimples Signed [Report This]Date: July 06 2012 09:29 pm
Very Nice!!!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading!
Reviewer: Aiwen01 Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 06 2012 09:20 pm
Good start. I can't wait to read more and I am ready for the date. Update soon please
Author's Response:
Thank you! An update is coming soon!
Reviewer: primesgirl4 Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 06 2012 08:50 pm