Reviews For Twice The Fool
Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

I like this story and the fact the woman is dark is awesome.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 10:20 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Paying the Piper

Cara is pissing me off, Stephan has every right to be angry with you kept the knowledge of his son Josiah from him.  You didn't even try to notify him that she was pregnant the first time.  The excuse that she gives him "You’re a businessman.  You’re gone all the time.  I didn’t think you’d want a family.  I mean…I didn’t plan for this to happen.  You used condoms and I didn’t realize I’d get pregnant.  I thought you were a confirmed bachelor and that you didn’t want to settle down. I figured you’d blame me for getting pregnant.”  Cara didn't realize just how dumb she sounded.   She expects her parents to be on her side when she was in the wrong, I am so glad that Joanne and Cecil called her mistake.  Saying I am sorrry just can't make for keeping a man from his children.  I am looking forward to Cara growing up an allowing Stephan to be a part of her children's life.

 

I hope that she looses her attitude about rich people when she meets his family.  Again people who are in the wrong shouldn't have an attitude.  So loving this story Brenda!!

 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 10:20 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

I have a whole new respect for Stephan, although that kind of stuff happens when you have sex with child.  Cara may have been grown in age but she was a child in her brain.  She ran from him twice, I am can admit that I am not fan of Cara yet but I am loving Stephan!!



Author's Response:

LOL PM, you are right.  But children have to grow up and face the music.  More is coming soon!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 10:10 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Paying the Piper

Loved it! Hope Stephan parents aren't prejudiced and will accept Cara and her children!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 08:46 pm

Title: Chapter 3 Paying the Piper

LOL, her parents set everything in motion for them. An arranged marriage kind of. What in the world is Cara, thinking. This man is offering to take care of his repsonsibility and she says no. Ridiculous!

So happy parents were there to stop her from acting like a 10 year old.

Reviewer: bayoumomma Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 08:36 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Brenda! I love all your stories and I can't wait for an update on this one! Great job!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 07:52 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

And that's why I withheld my initial comments about them; I would have misjudged Stephan, somewhat. He came off as a highhanded snob, but that's not exactly the truth regarding him. However, if he know about hard work, scrubbing toilets and the like, he could show that with a little more humanity in the workplace. I can also see he will take his responsibility to Cara and the children extremely seriously. He wants them all and he's not even trying to hide the fact. And I can see how he's taking offense to looking like some careless jerk who would run out on his kids when he didn't know about them, in front of her parents. I'd be mad, too.

Well, Cara really has no excuse. No good one, anyway. She should have told him. She was willing to drastically change the lives of her children based on an assumption. There are women out there who have had a helluva lot less to work with and told the fathers. Now she has to face the music.

Good stuff!

 


Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 06:55 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

Brenda¡!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"! You always do this to me. Now Im going back on that Brenda crack.  Checking for updates all day and nigh.

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 06:27 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

Good chapter I loved. Cara's daddy that scene was. so cute. I hope Cara. tells Stephan. about the baby. please please please update ASAP

Reviewer: primesgirl4 Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 06:12 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

Dad was ready to handle his business with the shotgun. They however should have allowed him to tell his side of the story first. Loved the expressions on their faces when he said he was a millionaire. If he didn't want to be apart of the childs life or the new babies life, he would not have tracked her down. It's obvious he wants to support them.

Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 06:03 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

OOOOhhhh she is isn soo much trouble!!

I am so glad to read a new story from you!  I hope you update this one soon!

Reviewer: Redbird Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 05:39 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

oh wow.

 

I see she comes from a family who love jumping to conclusions. will make for an interesting chapter 2. So dish up next chapter with a quickness please.

Reviewer: cuppacoffee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 05:07 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

Oooooh! Can't wait to see how she explains herself. I love that he wants his child to have his name...

Reviewer: LadyeT Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 04:45 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Wow!!! Loved it. Dare, I say, I can't wait for more. I swear Brenda your chapters are long, but they are so good until it does not seem that they are long enough, lol. What is Cara going to say? Get her, Stephen, lol. He is mad, but he I am pretty sure his like for Cara will override everything else. Please update soon. I am sorry for being greedy, but I can't help it, lol.

Reviewer: Anna Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 03:47 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

Well to bad Stephen had to find out on his own about his son. I love Cara's parents they seem like hard working decent folks. I can't wait to read the conversation between the two. Thanks

Reviewer: Divsionred Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 03:15 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Can't wait to see what reasons Cara give him for keeping everything a secret. Thanks for the update.

Reviewer: Minerva Vesta Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 02:28 pm

Title: Chapter 2 What's Done In the Dark...

Lady B, you are the best.  I hope your muse stays on over-drive.

Stephan looks like he's about to pop a vessel. Oh my... let the drama begin. With that said, you know your wrong leaving us hanging again. Please update soon.

Reviewer: juno Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 02:22 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

This is getting good please update soon

Reviewer: jackson1973 Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 01:32 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Interesting premise. Twice the fool indeed. You certainly garnered my attention, mostly because your use of the English language is standard. It's sooo tiring reading stories on here filled with the most primitive use of the English language, especially when it doesn't fit the premise. I think some "authors" are unable to separate their lives from the fiction they're writing.  Hope you'll keep on this track of proper use of language in this tale. I will comment often thusly with a review.



Author's Response:

Thank you for your comments.  My english isn't always the best, but I try.  I accept all constructive criticizm.  Thanks again!

Reviewer: Bajan Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 12:21 pm

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

oh my. Stephan is going to bust a gut when Cara delivers the news. This is going to be really good. Brenda, I just love your stories. You have a way of engaging the reader and writing something that makes sense. Love it, just love it. Cara's real fertile, isn't she?

Reviewer: BellaChica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 09:52 am

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

I LIKE ALTHPUGH I THINK HER EXCUSE FOR NOT TELLING HIM IS LAME

Reviewer: esther Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 07:54 am

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Completely in love with this story so far. Please keep going! I'll try waiting patiently.....(Try!)

Reviewer: LuKohana Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 07:17 am

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

I'm loving this already,what a graet start.I'm glad to be able to read another one of your amazing story.Looking forward to the next update.

Reviewer: meko1975 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 05:22 am

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Looking forward to this story Brenda!

Reviewer: M_Denise Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 03:51 am

Title: Chapter 1 Why Do Fools Fall in Love?

Let me start by saying I love everything you have put on this board. This story I'm struggling with because right now I find it hard to like either of these characters which is a good indication of what an exceptional writer you are - I'm invested in these characters. Cant wait to read more to see if my opinion of the characters changes. Can't wait until the next update.

Reviewer: katie Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2012 03:36 am



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