OMG I really love the story and I'm glad you decided to finish it. Overall I like your writing style and the flow of the story I enjoy a somewhat slow build up but some action is always appreciated .I like the struggle going on between good and evil and the religious of forming between the couples. Please continue on I'm glad to see you haven't abandoned this story!Reviewer: Indigo_bluee Signed [Report This]
Date: December 04 2015 05:08 pm
So far so GREAT. I just started reading last nigh so I'm not certain if I am reading the revised version or not. If not, don't change a thing. This story is great and has awesome development. I was pleased to see that Kianna has a chance at true happiness. You have great build up, although I don't know if they made it to Alaska, I would like confirmation on that. Hopefully it will come soon. Keep up the great work. I am a fan
Please update soon
Thank you so much! Yes they made it to Alaska they are in an underground cabin seeing this review helped me kind of get out of a writing slump that I have been in so the next chapter should be up soon thanx for reading!
Reviewer: love2read918 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 04 2015 02:28 pm
Omg this book is really good please dont stop writing this n sharing your gift
Thank you very much for this comment I really do appreciate it!Reviewer: rajanee Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 03 2015 08:26 pm
What kind of critique do you want, on all chapters or going forward?
Feel free reed to email me at email@example.com. I'm not a professional, but I wouldnt mind helping.
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Date: February 22 2015 04:48 pm
I really am enjoying your story it's so interesting a different form the average romance I haven't finished yet and I looking forward to a great ending
Thank you I was starting to think that not very many people were enjoying this story and was wondering if it was my writing style or the story in general that needed work. I am really glad to see that people are reading and enjoying it!Reviewer: Indigo_bluee Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2015 11:07 pm
Hi, this is my first time posting a review on this site....just wanted you to know that your story is one of those I look forward to reading
i don't think there was anything particularly wrong with any of the chapters and you're doing a great job so far.....
oh, and what part of Africa Chidike from? cuz I'm African (Nigerian)...and in my language (Igbo) the name means God is strong.....meanwhile, the pic of Kianna is Genevieve Nnaji, a Nigerian actress *smiley*
i wish Kianna had ended up with her fellow succubi though *wink*...great job still. I look forward to reading more
I am so happy to be your first review for chidike I did not really look up the region of africa that I wanted him to be from so that is something that I am going to have to research, but I do tend to lean towards nigeria when I think of africa. I know that it is a much bigger place but that is where my childhood babysitter came from and I really admired her. Your review has just helped me figure out more of where I am going with this story so thank you! I looked up african names and meanings for Chidike and that is how I chose his name. Initially I was going to make Kianna end up with Rogelio, but I couldn't make it fit I think I want to change the image for chidike though because he is alot cuter in my headthanks again and have a good day!Reviewer: lannasage Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2015 09:50 pm
Tom's soul was never in question, he had been evil for a long time. I feel like i missed something so i am going to re-read the last chapter. So awesome!!! Kylie is now immortal, yes!!
its because every human has a chance for redemption in christianity so he had to wave that right.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: September 16 2014 01:25 pm
Wait do dtop there please no!!!! I'm in love with the story I've been hiding from it for so long (giggles and whispers sorry) ok I'm ready for everything else and love the story!
thank u so much i was getting worriedReviewer: Keyajackson Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2014 08:16 pm
Okay, so Kylie and Samantha are succubi and didn't know it. Are the fake Kylie and Samantha about to get raped?
The fake kylie and samantha were sold into sex trafficking in place of the real ones but the change is temporary so they have changed back to themselves by now though they had some traumatic experiences
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31 2013 04:21 pm
Poor Kylie...it sucks that she's going to lose Sam to the darkness, but it already seems as if Sam was interested in the darker things of life anyway by her excitement with that dark halloween club. This is my first look at this story and I am really enjoying it so far. I can't wait for the next chapter.Reviewer: dcphoenix1 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 19 2013 10:00 pm
In the first chapter, you would think that the person who posted is the person who wrote it. The second chapter looks like someone else wrote it. First chapter, you have two people speaking in both the same paragraph and the same sentense. In the second chapter 'someone' correct this somewhat or advised that doing that is horribly wrong. In first chapter, you don't know who's speaking. At least in the second chapter, you get an idea. In the third chapter we see a combinatioin of the first two chapters and that's just one of the major distracting errors in this.
I have done all of the writing and correcting yes I am trying to get it straight as I started this story in my journal and wanted to concentrate on completing my other story first. I am a bit irritated that it keeps being suggested that my story is not my own. I have been working very hard to motivate myself to finish my stories and yes some of them were started years ago and never finished. I do appreciate you pointing out the errors in the story as this is the reason that I posted the story on this site as well as to see how people will respond to it because sometimes my ideas are a little out there. So no I don't mind the critism in fact I am thankful that you took the time but it is hurtful to imply that my story is not my own so just for the record. I came up with the story, I am writing the story, and I am correcting the story. I will also go over the first chapter to try to correct any mistakes I may have made just as I have done with the other complaint about switching the name. So just to reiterate I thank anyone who takes the time to read this story and leave a critique, however, I do not appreciate the implication that what I am working hard on is the work of someone else.Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 01 2013 01:16 am