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Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

WTF! I'm speechless! This is abuse at its worst. And he's a grown man and his sperm donor is bullying him. There's a special place in hell for Colin. I can't believe this. I'm so pissed right now. How can Rory get better with these two in his life? And forgive me if I don't give the incubator a pass. Regret doesn't help Rory. She's just as guilty as Colin.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 07 2013 04:10 am

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

I really fell sorry for Rory. He's had a hard life. Poor Declan, he isn't going to get the girl.

Reviewer: jjazz59 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 07 2013 01:33 am

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

I'm glad that they didn't have sex but I hope (Rory) get's better.. like she said how can two broken people fix each other. Especially since she doesn't have her vision..In several ways she can't help him. I hope he gets help and gets stronger for both of their sakes..

Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 07 2013 01:13 am

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

WOW!!! This story is just so DAMN good!!

Reviewer: kaci Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 07 2013 12:03 am

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

Wow!!! I want to feel sorry for Declan I do but something stops me because he seems to want Mallory's happiness but he is torturing himself at the same time. He can't be her hero if he can't regain his emotions and reel them in. The fact that he was so engrossed in the fantasy tells me he needs a little distance so that he can maybe find someone that will love him for him, not because he is strong and has always been there for her.

I so want to take a knife to Collins throat he and his wife did this to Rory and now he thinks he can beat it out of him. I so hope he gets a swift kick to the nuts because Hejaz no right to beat on Rory when it's because of him Rory strives for perfection. I am glad Declan got there in time because I have a feeling Rory would have kept taking the beating because he just crumbles under his own anxiety. 

Its a shame their mother finally realizes what they all did to Rory. But it's a little too late for any type of forgiveness. The one thing that seems to always penetrate Rorys shield of anxiety is Mallory. Maybe now she will begin to understand that even though Rory wasn't there for her in the present he was never far from her in spirit. They need each other so much so that it hurts. And maybe this will heal them both. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 10:15 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

So, they added physical abuse to everything else they did to Rory. That was so painful to read. Rory needs help with so much. I feel for him so much. He still can't deal with his abusers. Because that's what his parents are; abusers. They need to be locked up.Especially that father of his.

And still don't understand how they lavished all their love on Declan and then treat Rory like that. I'm not blaming Declan for what his parents did to Rory, but he has nothing to whine about. He got the best of it all. Where is his fighting for his brother in their lives instead of crying about a girl. In some ways, I don't see him as any better than their parents. He watched and hid behind his brother so he could have a life outside of family business responsibility. Because at some point, be had to have know something was wrong there.

I need justice for Rory.

And I don't even know what any of this means for him and Mallory. Time will tell with that.

Very emotional!

Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 10:00 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

My only concern is this cliff hanger!! I want more

Reviewer: Aries-Care Signed [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 09:28 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

So she still has a place in her heart for him.  They really are two broken people that cannot be understood by just anyone.  Declam os broken hearted but with time he will heal.  His father is nothing but a monster.  No wonder Rory is such a compulsive wreck that eberyone believes can be swept under the rug.  While they are both damaged, they are what rach other needs.

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 08:19 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

Parent are needed for guidance, not for beatdowns.  A powerful update

Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 08:17 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

You got me tearing up. Poor Rory. Colin needs a beat down and Siobhan wth she must have known Colin treated Rory like that. Those parents are just twisted. This little triangle is getting muddled. Can't wait to see where this is going. So much emotion in this chapter.

Fantastic as always.

Looking forward to more

Reviewer: siennagray Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 07:30 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

Damn! His parents especially his father if you can call him that really did a number on him. 

Someone needs to give Colin a taste of his own medicine.  Siobhan seems to realize the damage they have caused but apparently Colin still thinks he did alright by his son and all he needs is a good beating well mister that didn't work then and he sure as hell not working now.  Next they'll be wanting to put him in a mental hospital when it was them that caused the damage in the first place. 

I know not to blame the secretary but when he said he did not want to be disturbed she should have took it at fast value and did as he said.  Now Rory with all the stress of hurting Mal again and then their unwelcome visit has pushed him over the edge on top of that they are talking about Imogene coming back into the picture really. Again they need their ass beat especially Colin.

Great update thank you for sharing. More please.

Reviewer: Thundakat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 07:19 pm

Title: Chapter 8 Weight of the World

This is so sad.  His father thinking that he can beat this out of him.  I hope Rory can get the help he needs.

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 06 2013 06:36 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

Rory needs to get rid of his parents.  I wonder if his mom knows that his father was freaking Rory's ex Imogene.  I don't like them very much and I thought for sure that Rory was going to punch Colin in the face when he said that Mal got what she deserved.

So being injured to the point of losing her site was what she deserved.  Apparently they don't mind that she is in Declan's life or do they only think it's puppy love where she is concerned with him or he is no concern because they have Rory they have tortured and think they have in line.

What the hell is going on with them wanting Imogene back in the picture and if the children they want to carry on the line doesn't daddy dearest sire it's not like he hasn't been in that pot before.

I wonder will Declan stop before he finishes what he and Mal has started and I wound too if he is just a subsitute for Rory?  I don't think she is feeling him like she was Rory.

If this does pan out I wonder what will be Rory's response will this take him completely over the edge?

Thank you for the update.  I hope to see more soon.

Reviewer: Thundakat Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 04 2013 01:59 am

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

Wow this was so good.  I wonder though how this will affect Rory?   This is a triangle in the making of sorts.  I can't wait to see where this goes. Once Mallory and Declan have done the deed and then Declan has to help Rory, all three of their feelings will be intertwined and then what? Great update!

Reviewer: Brenda1257 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01 2013 12:45 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

Noooooooo noooooo noooo. As much as i dont like Rory, she shouldn't be with Declaaan!

Reviewer: chatty504 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 30 2013 03:38 am

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

Uh oh not good. If Mallory allows this to go on, her and Rory will be completly done. Screwing around with two brothers is never a good thing. I don't know how to feel about Declan, why you would even be interested in someone that your brother has been with is beyond me. If Mallory and Declan have sex, I would be done with the both of them.
I feel bad for Rory and even worse because in a way he is being betrayed by his brother. Rory may not be with Mallory technincally but Declan knows that he loves her and should never have fell for Mallory like that. Just my oppinion.

Good chapter though.

Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29 2013 06:34 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

All i can say is that everyone has to make choices in life that will only get difficult with time.  They are only trying to move forward and not dwell on the past.  And for the record his parents are the cause for his pain and only want him to live by their standards.  

Reviewer: reader101 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2013 07:33 am

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

I used to like Declan because of his support for his brother however based on the conversation that Rory had with his parents you can't tell me that Declan couldn't help his brother more. Even if he was the younger child. Sounds like Declan was the golden child and Rory was the one to make feel as if there was a problem with him.

I hope this is a dream of Declan because on so many levels it is not good :(

Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 10:51 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

IS this a dream????? I think so.

Reviewer: Qsmommy05 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 10:09 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

@ JovanBleu26:

I'm not even sure Declan has ever even thought about it either! Getting more pieces to this puzzle, I'm now wondering what exactly Declan has been resentful of all these years? He doesn't seem interested in the "family business" yet he reaps the benefits of the torture Rory is put through. And now this has me kinda looking at Declan with some fresh eyes. Not saying he's a bad guy, but, yeah, what exactly has he been witness to growing up in that house? He had to have noticed something, right? Or was he too busy being lavished with love, healthy attention and normalcy?

Reviewer: flikchick Signed [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 09:55 pm

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

D. wants her so bad and it is just bc he never had her.  He knows she loves him, but is 'in' love with Rory.  I hope if they do go through with it then she calls him R. name, but I don't think he will care.  If they do go through with the sex then she should not have anything else to do with R.  

Hopefully, D will answer his phone before doing the deed and she can get R. away for his own sake and then they can repair their relationship.

Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 09:23 pm

Title: Chapter 1 : Chance Meeting

@FlikChick,

You brought up an interesting point, I find it interesting that they are all about running Rory's life but let Declan do wjhatever he wants to, they aren't pushing some woman onto. But Rory, is the one they focus on like he is the prince to the kingdom and all Rory really wants is to be free of them. Declan seems to be free and able to feel the way he feels and its funny how I think Declan resents Rory, but in away Rory protect Declan from the cruelty of their parents. And I don't get the feeling that Rory resents Declan but I think Rory doesn't understand how he was treated the way he was and Declan was loved and cherished.

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 08:01 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

I think this will kill Rory....

Reviewer: RedMoon Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 07:31 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

What's going right now with Declan and Mallory isn't a good idea. It for sure ins't healthy for either. Whether they admit it or not, Rory is between them. I just don't think Mallory can switch gears like that; from one brother to then next. If she really had a thin for Declan at any point since they've known each other, then Rory would never have found a way in. She gave him her virginity, right? That''s huge. She was smitten with Rory from day one. I think this is reactionary, from both of them. And Declan is just trying to claim a missed opportunity from way back. But I think that has come and gone. 

And Rory....my lord! I'm just agonizing over him right now. This man has been abused in the worst way by those two parasites that call themselves parents. They both make me sick! I really wanted him to stand up to them; instead he just fell apart right before their eyes. I didn't want them to see how much power they still had over him. He can't even be in the room with them and hold it together. How any mother could think that all that they put him through was "best" for him is beyond me. I want Rory healthy and his parents dealt with and exiled! I'm understanding Rory a lot better now.

And I also wonder, like Rory, how is it they forgot they had another son to share in the "legacy" they seem to be so preoccupied with? I can see now that Rory took the hit for Declan as well.  

This was a full chapter!

Reviewer: flikchick Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 07:19 pm

Title: Chapter 7 Just Give Me a Reason

Welcome back. But you are killing my anxiety with this story. I feel like Mallory wants to be loved by Declan but wont be able to give him what he needs in the end only because her heart is tied to Rory no matter what she thinks she wants in the moment. Rory has a lot of issues that stem from his parents and their treatment of him. Declan was loved and he knows how to love. Rory was treated like a prisoner and the only way for him to survive was his OCD. His parents don't get that, his parents seem to think that he can just over come this because he is an adult now. I don't think there is an drug that will magically help him get better. Because the fact is the more Rory fights it the more it over takes him.

Declan needs to back off of Mallory, I know he loves her but he seems so obsessed with her that he is going to be hurt when Mallory stops hurting. Per her words she is tired of hurting but either she or Declan are going to have to stop because this may feel good in the moment but when all is said and done is ewveryone will suffer in the end. Poor Rory is spinning out of control and I don't think Declan will be able to save him. Because at some point like at the end Declan will start thinking about himself. Mallory is the only thing that makes Rory feel alive and "normal" but Rory even knows he's not good for her. That to me shows how much he does love her. He knows he can't give her the things that Declan can. And that's what breaks my heart because Rory has had to suffer for Declan to have what he has had.

Looking forward to the next chapter even if it kills me and my anxiety. I just hope something stop Mallory and Declan from making the biggest mistake. Because I don't want anyone to get hurt.

Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 04:21 pm



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