Reviews For Never Let Me Go
Title: Forgiveness

Aria so young and dumb!!! Looking forward to reading more!!



Author's Response:

Haha ya she really is but u know u live nd u learn....be there will be ALOT of surprises in this book :) ~mya (co-author)

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2013 04:07 am

Title: Good Times

I really like this story, especially the leading cast who are multi-dimensional people with intriguing life-stories so,  let’s start with Arianna…she’s witty, intelligent, feisty, she has diva-potential but she’s humble, almost shy or timid about her appearance even though she masks her insecurities well.  When she tenses as Colin innocently touches her back or tells Jennifer she has no family and that she’s ‘not worth’ ruining Colin’s reputation were quite telling about who she is.  And  as their journey progresses, we learn snippets about her past and why she’s emotionally challenged…at that point one realizes she’s much more than a pretty façade. (btw, I like the image you chose in the banner to represent Arianna.) Somewhere along the way there was a disconnect with Arianna’s character- so-much-so that I had to start from the beginning to reevaluate and appreciate the complex nature of the material and as I absorb her diverse persona, I feel strongly that Arianna remains ‘intact’, a virgin. Yes there’s mention of abuse, however, below the exterior of brazen attitude…there’s an underlying innocence about the way she reacts to men, to her spouse- an unconsummated farce their union may be- but her husband none-the-less.


Which poses another question…why didn’t they consummate their marriage on their wedding night?  Did she divulge something about herself or her past that neither can remember due to excessive intoxication?  Makes ya go mmmmm


Colin is an aloof, open-book piece of sexy! LUV the strong, silent types yet he’s charismatic, approachable, accomplished, knows how to have a good time- an undercover nerd and a genuinely nice guy.  The way he dotes on his wife without being overwhelming or sappy is adorable:  he dropped whatever he was doing to give her and her ‘sisters’ a ride, he called Kay and Maya to accompany them to the party just so Aria wouldn’t feel out-of-place, he spent the night watching movies with her and hell…buying a total stranger an expensive ass ring says a lot about the man he is. The fact that he’s not afraid of her ‘issues’ nor is he willing to walk away from their potential future endears him to me.


Love your writing, grammatical errors are virtually nonexistent…my only complaint is that it would be nice to include scene continuity between chapters every now and then. For example:  Aria and Colin’s beach scene should’ve – imho – continued in the subsequent update. I know this is hella long and I apologize for that but I had to share my thoughts with you.  Looking forward to the next installment. Great job! J



Author's Response:

Oh.My.God.

You have no idea how big a smile I had on my face when I saw your review. Ironically, I was on the phone with my co-author when I read it. I was beyond estatic and so was she. This has to be the most thorough and detailed review I've ever had. Than you a million times a million. I'm always questioning this story, my writing, the plot, etc. But it's people like you and reviews likes yours that always seem to keep me going. Yes, Aria is an extremely complex character. She's not always likable and that's what I want. In the past, I've struggled with making my main characters too Mary Sue-esque. (lol). So, I'm attempting to make this one the complete opposite. No, she's not the antagonist, but she's not always so pratagonist-like. I really like Colin. His character is so chill and nonchalant. He's probably the easisest one to write for. It's funny though, I ususally have a bad habbit of making my stories drag on. So, I've been trying to keep things going, but I will definitely start alternating with continuing certain chapters and mini time-jumps. Oh, and as far as my grammar......THANK YOU. That's another thing I'm also double-tripple questioning all the time. You have to admit though, I do tend to make a lot of simple mistake. They bug me to no end, but that's one of my weaknesses as a writer: effective and thorough proofreading. Okay, I'll wrap this up now. Again, thank you!!!!! 

The next chapter should be up in a couple days.

:)

Thanks for reading and REVIEWING!

-Amby

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 18 2013 06:41 am

Title: Good Times

Loved it! Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thanks! :)

-Amby

Reviewer: ogechiokafor78 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 13 2013 12:48 pm

Title: Good Times

THis was a feel good chapter, I really Colin and Arianna to work out.  Arianna deserves to have the love that Colin feels for her even if she is stubborn and crazy which is not a good combination.  More please!!



Author's Response:

Omg. I love your reviews. They always make me smile. Yeah, Colin and Aria......they're an interesting pair. That's for sure. 

Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

-Amby

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 13 2013 05:43 am

Title: Good Times

So I know that this is Aria's story but since all of the girls were in foster care don't they all have skeletons in their closet.



Author's Response:

A little thing about me? I try my damn hardest not to give away the "important' stuff. Yes, this is an Aria centric story, but Kay and Maya will also have their seperate storylines.

Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

-Amby 

Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 13 2013 05:07 am

Title: Yes or No

omg this iz a gudd story ive been reading the previous chapters nd maya nd derrick are really funny nd lmao kaydence iz a sex addict nd i think arianna should i guess open up more to collin nd i think she would look better as ashanti then nicki minaj. nd i NEED to to know about the girls past cause u said they all were in the foster home so i wonder wat happend?? nd i wanted to know if there iz gonna be anything between maya nd derrick ohh nd iz there gonna be a person (besides ricoardio) for kaydence she needs sumbody tht will set her straight or sumthing (just a suggestion) ok well im sorry i left u this long review but ya.....(GUESS WHO BIATCH!!)

XOXO



Author's Response:

Lmao. Tell me why I figured out it was you before I even got through the second sentence. You a crazy bitch, but I still love you boo boo. Haha. Yeah, I been thinking that maybe I should change aria to Ashanti, but you know Nicki is my girl. Lol. Oh, and tell your bro don't let me catch his ass in the street. I'm so don with him. Making me delete my shit. Smdh. Lol. I'm almost done with the next chapter but I'm having a hard time getting it right. :-/ So it should be out shortly.....hopefully by the end of this weekend. 

I MISSSSS YOUUHHHHH TRIICCKKK 

 

Reviewer: diamondbaby101 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 05 2013 09:03 pm

Title: Yes or No

I really enjoyed your 1st sex scene. Don't back down keep writing them they will get better.



Author's Response:

Haha. Thanks! Yeah, I know you're right, but that was just too difficult for me to write. Maybe, in the near future, I'll try my hand at it. But, for now, I'll leave the erotic stuff to the pros on here. 

Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

-Amby

Reviewer: mrmalone Signed [Report This]
Date: July 01 2013 04:39 am

Title: Yes or No

Marianna got some serious issues maybe she could benefit from repeated slaps upside her head?  She is working my last half of nerve, take a chance little girl Colin is worth it! I this update two thumbs up!!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 30 2013 06:33 am

Title: Yes or No

Good "sex" scene.  I guess you are channeling Arianna  because she has her own issues with sex.  If you do write another scene put some of Ari's own aprehension and insecurity in this and hopefully Colin will be patient and can begin Ari's healing process.



Author's Response:

Thanks! Yes, Arianna and I share some similiarities, but as far as the sex thing.....you'll just have to continue reading to find out if Aria's issues are simply her issues. Not mine.

-Amby

Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2013 10:22 pm

Title: Yes or No

Great job on the sex scene! I'm glad arianna is opening up.

Reviewer: LiLi Signed [Report This]
Date: June 29 2013 09:04 pm

Title: Car Rides and Motivations

It is hard for me to visualize Arianna's character with Nikki Minja's face but the story is very good and I love how you make Collin and Derrick's characters so fun and friendly. Ok the one or two things that has been bugging me is.....we're all three girls in foster care together? And was Ari or Kay the ass abuse victim? Maybe both were!  I as m liking this story more and more! I will give you a 9 out of 10.



Author's Response:

Well she seems to like nicki so plz stop saying she should be someone else.....SHE IZ STILL GONNA BE NICKI SO GET OVER IT....but didn't u read the part were she said kaydence nd maya were in da foster home with her so to answer ur question. Yes all three of them were in the same foster care... But ya don't mean to be rude but just saying ~mya (co-author) :)

Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 29 2013 04:46 pm

Title: Hope

I like this story but I feel that It's missing something. 

Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 04:49 pm

Title: Hope

Derrick cracks me up Mays will kill him though then revive him to ride him like a horse.  Aria is stubbornly stupid but Column is good for her. Love Colin!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 04:57 am

Title: Hope

I don't know who any of these players Re but Im assuming they are celebrities. I am enjoying this story. I like the youthful way the characters interact and talk. I didnt find this chapter boring. Good update.

Reviewer: Acdromance Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 04:57 am

Title: Hope

Amazing story! Update please!!

Reviewer: jamea12 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 03:20 am

Title: Hope

Not boring at all, loved it! Keep it coming, I missed this fic. 

Reviewer: channessa Signed [Report This]
Date: June 28 2013 03:08 am

Title: Confessions and Interruptions

Very entertaining! All the main characters have mega-personalities...LUV Derek- love him!  He cracks me up.  (Unless there's a specific reason, it would probably be best to have one spelling of his name. For some reason, his persononality seems to fit 'Derek' rathan than 'Derrick'.) 

Clever technique of gradually introducing the heavy intermittenly with the light-hearted banter

Colin and Arianna's chemistry is off the charts;  they gel nicely- certain aspects of their past circumstances have commonality...both similar and completely different challenges.  So far they've been honest and forthcoming with one another and I hope that continues throughout their journey.  One other thing to note is that the ladies seem to have a 'potty' mouth around their gentleman counterparts.  Before you trip, I have a trash-mouth too..., actually...I cuss like a sailor whenever appropriate to do so.  From their dialogue, all the hella fione gents have been respectful around the ladies (just an observation)

Can't tell you how many times of read NLME and loving forward to reading more...SOON!  :)

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 27 2013 07:00 am

Title: Confessions and Interruptions

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: ogechiokafor78 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 26 2013 07:50 am

Title: Confessions and Interruptions

I really can't wait! Let the drama unfold for Arianna and Colin invovling everyone including his nasty brother, like eww (from previous chapters)! LOL, I so love the chemistry and this story so far keep up the good work, and please do update! Thanks so much!

Reviewer: V Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2013 09:19 pm

Title: Confessions and Interruptions

YESS! Was waiting for this. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: Dallasstar1725 Anonymous [Report This]
Date: June 25 2013 05:52 pm

Title: Confessions and Interruptions

Welcome back... Love the new chapter

Reviewer: keikei2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2013 04:04 am

Title: Confessions and Interruptions

So what was Aria's childhood trauma... please tell us soon.

Reviewer: 1nadali Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 25 2013 03:57 am

Title: Meetings

Love Colin but Arianna works my last nerve, but now I know why she has personality disorder. Derrick and Maya are still the comic relief of the story.  The jury is still out on Ricardo I am not sure how I feel about their conservation both verbal and nonverbal.. Great update hopeful the next one won't take as long.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 25 2013 02:57 am

Title: Car Rides and Motivations

this is a really good story but we need you to finish.

Reviewer: cullensjonas Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2013 12:46 am

Title: Car Rides and Motivations

Loved it! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: ogechiokafor78 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 19 2013 10:09 am



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