Oh my!  This was good--I am loving myself some Nicholi and Laura will be just what he needs. 

beautiful, but can you upload new chapters please.

Da' hell with Laura...lol? Did not expect that!

great update

There are a few things that have made your story more and more unreadable granted it's very entertaining and seems like a great storyline.  

Your plot has been moving along at a faster pace and therefore more interesting.

The two things that make me crazy.  And, one brand new thing that may get you sued.

(1)  The spelling of "Tomosoe".  Each and every thime I see it I have to stop and ask where'd the Japanese guy come from.  There are no Italian names and maybe no Italian words that end in "soe". If you're wanting to use the Italian version of Thomas, it is simply "Tomaso".  Or, to be different use "Tommaso"is also used."

(2) I don't know the name off the male love interest.  The spelling of his name changes here and there.  I will tell you that there is no such name as "Nicholi".  That would be pronounced "Nee-show-lee".  If that was your intention then so be it.

I believe you want the Russian version of "Nicholas", there are three acceptable spellings - Nikolas, Nicolas, and Nicholas.

These things make reading your story like riding over potholes.  It's jarring and you want to stop the car.

Keep writing but mre importantly keep READING.  Reading makes you a better writer, increases your vocabulary, and knowledge of the world.

In closing, I will say that most other languages aren't as flexible as Emglish with respect to given names.  European and Anglo-Saxon personal names don't ebb and flow w/their culture and creative parents.  Like who names their kid "Blanket" of "I want to be free" in other countries.  Almost no one.

If you want to play around with names the two obvious and most flexible names are Greece and Russian.  Their personal names have several nicknames.  In English, most personal names don't have standard nicknames.  In Italian, "John" could be Giovanni, Gian or Gianni - in Greek, Giannis w/a nickname of Yanni (what my 6th grade teacher called her son). 

Brand new thing and LAWSUIT.  There is a reason why publishers and writers change the names of their main characters - because they don't want to be SUED.  So, Harlequin spends its name making up names for fictional countries, islands, and royal titles.  Standard practice everyWHERE in the world is to never use the name of a real person.  It's called LIBEL.  In other countries (includes even England), the one writing the libelous information has to prove it to be true.

Now in your case, there's probably a 1% in .01% of them caring; HOWEVER, why link a Wikipedia page to your fictional erotic story.

If it's a true account, then don't worry about it.  A link to Wiki is appropriate.

If you're going to write, might as well write clearly and smarter. 

I'm sure I have 30 years on you so keep at and learn as you go. This info is educational.

Please, please! Change Tomosoe so I'll stop looking for the Asian guy.  I don't know what Tomosoe means but it is used in Asia.

Wow. Talk about a curve ball. Laura ain't one to mess with. The sexy Italian likes her.

Bravo! Laura can hold her own indeed and when Nicholi finds out that she is a member of the v club she may as well hang it up cause if he possessive now I hate to see how he is after he gets it.

Thanks for sharing.

What the hell just happened...lol?

Absolutely love this story please, please update soon

Niceeeee!

I WANT MORE!

Awesome chapter.

I am so into this story. Now I want know more about Laura. Nicholi is just as intriguing. I barely wait for the two of them to hook up. The fireworks between them is explosive.

I'm ready for the next update :-)