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Title: Chapter 1

If it's the USF that I think it is then GO BULLS!! m/

Im liking the start of this story!! I'm looking forward to reading the rest.

Reviewer: Kay Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 08 2014 04:01 am

Title: Chapter 21

What a lovely surprise!  Glad to see this back! Poor Valerie, why is she still only half heartedly going for gaming jobs, she can be so determined when she wants but not on what she supposedly wants the most.  

Reviewer: Meg Signed [Report This]
Date: December 08 2014 01:24 am

Title: Prologue

Thank you so much for updating this story! It's, by far, my favorite story on the site. I can relate to these flawed charecters and that makes them so much more real. Please don't keep us waiting too long for an update. I can't wait to see what happens next!

Reviewer: Kittey Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 12:45 pm

Title: Chapter 21

I feel for Valerie. Perhaps it's because I've known people with insecurity issues like her, or maybe it's because you write her so well. Either way, I understand how hard it is for someone to just "get over" their problems, especially when the issues are so deep-seated and she sees part of the root of her problems almost every day. 


She'd made great strides, but it seems the disappearance of Henry, the first man that truly loved her, caused her to regress. That, and the overall stress of her life. As with everything in life, triumphs and sorrow come and go. If Val can learn to better handle the ebbs and flows she'd be OK. 

I'm rooting for her. I love her character and the realness of it. She may always struggle with her demons, especially if she can't get away from her parents. At some point she may be able to better keep them at bay. I wonder who that was that consoled her and what happened to them. That may be another trauma that she endured that has contributed to her state. 

The great thing is she does know how to live well. She just needs to stop "letting her get her". I'm so happy you are back and I can't wait to see what happens at that rehearsal. I can't imagine she can avoid Henry forever. Even when they're not together they are still so lovely. 

Reviewer: Giro Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 10:05 am

Title: Chapter 21

Fantastic read with complex characters with demons. I love this story all around!!! Update soon.

Reviewer: Jonesy Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 06:48 am

Title: Chapter 21

YOU UPATEDDDDD!! OMFGGGGG THE AMOUNT OF HAPPINESS COURSING THROUGH MY BODY IS INSANE! I CANNOT BELIEVE MY EYES! I AM SO BLOODY OVERJOYED!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I'VE BEEN DYINGGG FOR MORE VAL AND HENRYY!!

wahhhh val has become SO MUCH more guarded. I think her shields have been locked in place. I cannot believe the amount of pressure she places on herself, and her insecurities are so damaging. She wanted her father's approval so much, and now when she finally made him proud, it didnt have anything to do with her personally, but more so what was beneficial to his company. I wanted to cry so badly when she flashed back to when she tried to show her dad the picture she had drawn, only to be placed in a chair and told to be quiet. i mean come on. AND who was that person who stuck up for her?! Whenever she eats, she vomits. It is the most unhealthiest thing ever. I reallyyyy hope Henry finds out about this and goes crazy lmao

OMFGGGG that bit where henry came in!!! OMFGGG I WOULD'VE DIED! she honestly must've lost A LOT of weight for Henry not to of recognised her. Because he would know her body more than anybody hahaha i keep hoping for GEORGE to make an appearance ! pleaseeee it'll make things so much more crazier. She really doesnt want to see or speak to henry which i kind of love lmao I think he should be the one vying for her attention, but she just isnt going to give it to him lol i really want him to be in her seat for a while. i mean i think he suffered as well, but im hoping she holds out on him. I think he's going to go insane when he knows what she does to herself. she really has become a robot, and i think if she reacts to henry the same way, he'll be like "oh fuck no" ahhahaha PLEASEEEE

PLEASEEEE DONT LEAVE ME HANGING FOR LONG. PLEASEEE I BEG OF YOU. PLEASEEEEEEEEE PLEASEEEEEEE PLEASEEEEE!!! I CANNOT WAIT LONG ENOUGH FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER !! WAHHHH PLEASEEEEEE HAHAHAHA

THIS IS MY ALL TIME FAVOURITE READ AND I CANNOT STOP RE-READING EVERYTHING! SO PLEASEEEEE PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE DONT LEAVING ME HANGING FOR LONG.... I REALLLYYY WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXTTT!! SO FUCKEN GOOD! IT WILL LEAD TO THE BEST CHAPPIE I BET ! LOVED IT

AND HENRY you bloody beast! he better not of gotten with others -_- or else val wont be a happy camper !

Reviewer: Gordana Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 06:46 am

Title: Chapter 21

Okay, I had to come back and comment because at first I wasn't quite sure what to say and I honestly still don't know.  I want to wish the best for Val but she is making it so hard.  I wish everything she just told Elle about her day and it isn't about anyone else was so insightful that I wish she could listen to herself and relate it to herself.  She is lying to her therapist, she is gaining weight, binging etc.  I mean she couldn't even talk in an interview, like WTH. How old are you again?  I don't like to say when someone has experienced emotional abuse to just say get your life together but I mean she is stuck in this one track mind, thinking and behaving process.  She needs to go away after this wedding, tell Daddy she needs a vacation and go to the wilderness, I don't care where and truly reflect on what she wants out of her life and get the determination to DO IT.  Her daddy ain't gonna stand next to her on judgement day.  I really feel sad that she regressed while Henry remains happy go lucky.  Maybe that is his outer shell and he is still struggling but dang something positive for her.  I really feel like Val needs someone to truly, truly not cater to her feelings and tell her the brutal honest truth.  Anything else at this point is enabling.  Now you know I can't wait for another update.  I need something to keep me going thru late night writing papers.  You most definitely have us emotionally vested and it is a wonderful story.

Reviewer: lajack1 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 03:50 am

Title: Chapter 21

Okay I'm so excited you updated! yay! love this story.

val val val....gurl what are we going to do with you? I feel like this might be it for her. she might just have made it to the bottom. I feel for her but at the same time i'm starting to not anymore. I know its a hard process getting yourself self together especially when your not ready all around(mentally physically and emotionally) but its time for her to do what she has to do. She's going to have to truely seek help. I think val needs to take a step back and start talking to her therapist, tell her dad she doesn't want the promotion, hell maybe even quit her job I know she has to have money saved. Take that money focus on getting herself where she needs to be maybe even go back to school refresher course for gaming build her skills up again. She needs to start from the ground up.

okay enough of my ranting. great update

I really don't know how I feel about Peter I think he's just an ass just because and him and val will always clash so...

But Its good to hear Henry was doing well or atleast thats what he is telling peter only time will tell with these characters but I'm definitely here for the ride!

Reviewer: jetzero Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 01:16 am

Title: Prologue

Thank you for the update!

Glad Henry is doing better, but so tired of the po-pity-me party Val insists on having.  

No one can make her better; she won't go to therapy, properly prepare for an interview or even take classes to improve her craft.  She is now at the point that I see her as a lonely, sad, and unhealthy (mentally and physically) person.   And quit blaming your daddy,  especially if you are going to continue working for the man.  Almost had a breakthrough with her flashback--she put downs from dad and brother.

Has she changed so much that Henry thought she was someone else?  I know her hair is straight, but he couldn't recognize his love from behind?  Damn! I so wanted her to have progressed in building her self-esteem, but you kept it real bc change takes a while when you have beat yourself down for years.

Too bad they couldn't get better together, bc Henry was able to move on just fine. 

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 07 2014 12:07 am

Title: Chapter 21

Wow you updated! Thanks a lot this was amazing 😊

Reviewer: M3l4n1_C4rt3r Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 11:42 pm

Title: Chapter 21

Val seems to have regressed. She can only blame herself. She really needs to focus on getting herself better.  Henry is not the solution. SHE is the solution.

And yeah, Peter might be an a-hole, but I think it's more that he sees Val as being way too self-involved and a drain on people with all of her negativity. At some point, folks get tired of it. He's not her friend and as such doesn't give her a pass on some of the things she says. And how can Ella guarantee that Peter's best friend wouldn't be there to spare her feelings. Dang, sorry, but NO. Can't she suck it up for one friggin' day? It's Ella's day, not Val's.

Right now she is a MESS. IMO, she really is not ready to deal with Henry in any rational way.

This story is da bomb!

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 11:31 pm

Title: Chapter 21

I freakin love this story so much, but please do not make Val continue to act stupid over Henry. After their last run in, I felt like going thru the floor for her. Now she is going to be all nervous and fidgety, great. I know its her character and it most likely would boost anyone's ego to know that they can still affect the person they once with, but goodness. Henry does not need an ego boost.

Henry, I love him, but I am certain he is still cocky as ever and Val will most likely do something that makes her look like a scorned, angry lover and Henry will be there to asure her everything is fine. I know it's his character too, but Henry is always so nonchalant about things. He seems to be laughing (although I know it's just a cover for how he really feels) when it comes to Val's feelings and it makes me sick. Can't she have it together at least once in his presence. I know she is in love with him, but d*mn and honestly I would not be ready to see him yet either, but I would try my hardest not to fall apart. I'm not telling her to pretend, but she she is a grown up and there is more in life besides Henry. He's a great plus do not get me wrong, but life goes on. Get your sh*t together Val. I know you are angry you have to see him unannounced, but deal with it without falling apart. Loved the update!!! Please, more..

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 11:22 pm

Title: Chapter 21

Ecstatic to see this update! 😄💥💖 I'm sorry to hear that Val is having a difficult time. Anxious to see where things go when Val and Henry actually see each other. Great update! 💖💖💖

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 11:00 pm

Title: Chapter 21

Peter was never nice to Valerie I know that, but just because of her doesn't mean that he should leave his friend out of HIS wedding. This is his and Ella's day. He should be able to invite who ever he wants to share his wedding day with. His opinion of Valerie is low because of how negative Valeries attitude is. People will always judge you based on how you behave. I get that Valerie went trough a lot and all. But at this point she can't continue to use that as an excuse anymore. The problem is also that she knows that what she doing is not right. But yet she still continues doing it. She just don't care anymore. And if she doesn't, then no one else should either.

Valerie is a grown woman. She should know by now that its not up to other people to make her happy. Its her job to make herself happy. She is not even making an effort. I used to sympathize and feel  sorry for her in the beginning. But now I can't. I really can't anymore. She is depressing and not likable. I won't even say that Valerie needs help because she already have a therapist. But in order to get better, you should also want to get better. And Valerie clearly does not. She comes over as needy, as if she is desperate for approval. She is being pathetic and incredibly stupid. 

Also I know that there are people like Valerie in real life who doesn't get passed this issue that they have. But this is a story, and therefore at some point you expect to see a little bit of improvement of the characters. This is already chapter 21/22 but  she still never seems to get better. Not even a little bit of improvement. Its still the same Valerie with her weight issues, her "nobody loves me or understand me" attitude and her low self esteem. Nothing have changed. I really don't want to give up on Valerie because everyone deserves to be happy. But she is making it very difficult to root for her. I'm even doubting if she will ever learn to love herself. 

Reviewer: grazylisa Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 09:37 pm

Title: Chapter 21

You know you've got an excellent story on your hands, when most of us readers are so vested in your chracters and thier lives, like they are real. I agree though, Val is draining me, she really needs to stop attending the pity party for 1, it's like 1 step forward 15 back with her. I feel like a pigeon that you're throwing bread crumbs at, I would like the whole loaf instead of bits and pieces :) ( more updates, pretty please) You really have a way with making this story so life like.

Reviewer: jlly16 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 09:13 pm

Title: Prologue

If Peter got mysteriously hit by a car... I wouldn't be surprised. He is legitimately an awful person. 

Reviewer: TheCrossroads Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 08:39 pm

Title: Chapter 21

I am so happy to see this story, I love it.

Reviewer: Dallas5star Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 02:35 pm

Title: Chapter 21

Is there a chapter 21 that didn't get posted or did you just type 22 instead of 21?

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 02:07 pm

Title: Chapter 21

Yes, I have missed this story!  Peter is a asshole, what does Ella see in him?  Why is opinion so low of Val?  I see she is still not going to therapy which is not good.  Added to the no therapy is the fact that she binging and purging. She has gotten worse since the last update,  WTF? ! More please!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 01:01 pm

Title: Chapter 21

I used to feel for her but now she's depressing me! I think I'm going to pass on her for a while. She never seems to remotely get better, do better be better. Sure she claims to want a better life but I dont really feel she's trying. Even though you show how her past was it's no excuse for how old she is and not making any small improvements nothing has changed with her in over 20 chapters. Everyone deserves better even Valerie.

Reviewer: lilsunseeker Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 12:46 pm

Title: Chapter 21

I'm disappointed in Valerie. She really needs to get help, but at least she's still out there trying to make progress. I think I'll hold off on reading any updates until the story is finished, Val really is a downer and not knowing what's coming next drives me crazy. I want the best for her even if it's not with Henry, but does she want the best for her? All of her growth has been dependent on others and so far there's been so little development in her character. Perhaps I'm being too harsh, I just want her to be okay and it upsets me that I can't grab her and shake her. 

Reviewer: SleepEasy Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2014 10:00 am

Title: Chapter 20

OHMYGOD, COME ON!! I need to know what happens!!!!! I'm frigging dying!

Reviewer: anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 21 2014 02:45 pm

Title: Prologue

I just read the last or latest chapter and was blown away. So love doesn't always conquer all  just like in real life. At least she found out about his demons.   

Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 11 2014 09:27 am

Title: Chapter 20

Please, tell me this is nt the end!

Reviewer: katt Anonymous starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 05:57 am

Title: Prologue

When are you going to update? Pls, soon, I hope!

Reviewer: UnwrittenConfessions Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 01:54 am



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