Reviews For In the Dark
Title: Chapter 1

Oh gosh. I can't imagine waking up to discover a stranger in my bed

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous [Report This]
Date: March 02 2014 03:18 pm

Title: Chapter 4

HAHA! I like it. It was entertaining seeing through his eyes and his thoughts are a riot. Definitely a guys and definitely workable. Im not a writer but Im a hard core reader and lover of all things literary and you my dear very well. Thank you for sharing.

Reviewer: amlaamar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2013 02:09 am

Title: Chapter 4

loved it

Reviewer: peachmartini Signed [Report This]
Date: May 19 2013 07:53 pm

Title: Chapter 4

i really really really enjoyed this story, it was short and sweet :) i think you did a good job so i'll look forward to upcoming stories - thank you!!



Author's Response:

You're most welcome. Now I have new respect for all the writers on the Chamber... y'all make it look easy, whipping out ten chapter story masterpieces. I can only bow down and hope it gets easier with practice.

Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 04:37 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Being a Trini I would say Lara is the best..lol. That's for sharing.

Reviewer: Trulyme35 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 03:09 pm

Title: Chapter 4

This chaper was especially good. What an unusual way to find each other. I liked it a lot.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 02:10 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Being West Indian myself, I found that last part utterly hilarious. And it's Sobers, BTW, :-P

Reviewer: caramia_darling Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 01:10 pm

Title: Chapter 4

VERY GOOD! I liked the story and found it really funny and great to read. The only bad part is was.... WAY TOO SHORT! I wanted more, LOL!

 

I hope you plan to make more stories. Good job :)

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 09:43 am

Title: Chapter 4

VERY GOOD! I liked the story and found it really funny and great to read. The only bad part is was.... WAY TOO SHORT! I wanted more, LOL!

 

I hope you plan to make more stories. Good job :)

Reviewer: sweetlooking218 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 18 2013 09:42 am

Title: Chapter 3

Oh my God is this funny, this story has me rolling.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 10:44 pm

Title: Chapter 2

This is hilariuou! Jason, shouldn't drink ever again.  It is generally considered a no-no to lust after another woman that isn't your girlfriend.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 10:42 pm

Title: Chapter 1

That man should never drink again!!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 10:31 pm

Title: Chapter 3

I like it, please continue.

Reviewer: IRJunkie Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 08:22 pm

Title: Chapter 3

this story is crazy and cracks my up - keep them coming! thanks for In the Dark!



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for helping me figure out how to post it. :-D I'm glad it brought a laugh or two.

Reviewer: Cassius_Noir Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 07:28 pm

Title: Chapter 3

Thanks for the update! This story is great so far!

Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 05:45 pm

Title: Chapter 3

You stopped there!!!!!!!!! OMG, please update and can you make the chapters longer? This story is too good for its chapters to be read in less than 2 minutes.



Author's Response:

If you knew how long I agonize over each word, you would take more time with it. Don't wolf it down. Enjoy it. I'm trying to make a gourmet meal for you... LOL

 

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 04:26 pm

Title: Chapter 2

hahaha...that last sentence is LMFAO-funny in light of the situation.

Reviewer: amlaamar Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 03:26 pm

Title: Chapter 3

WOW...this story has me fascinated. I'm still a little puzzled at Marianna's latest actions but that I hope will be cleared up with some more back story. As to dude...rofl. I guess that's the last time he will be crawling through a window.

I agree wholeheartedly that most Jamaican woman do have a low tolerance for bullshit. Although the misnomer that Jamaicans are violent/passionate expressives it does hold some weight IMO. Marianna's immediate reaction though peppered with hilarity was so typical Jamaican and appropriate of any woman in that circumstance. 

Excellent premise.

More please!

Reviewer: siennagray Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 02:38 pm

Title: Chapter 2

:/ he raped her though. I can't imagine anyone being okay with some random guy being in their bed and actually coming inside them and not feel threatened or call the police. 

 

 

 



Author's Response:

Thank you for your response. I agree with you. Rape is rape.

I would like to resepctfully point out that this is a fantasy. It's not logical, or PC. That's why I tried to put as many warnings on here as possible. If you feel uncomfortable with the story, then please do not read on. I would hate to have ruined your day. 

If you would like me to write something else, then please post a challenge, and I'll see what I can do.

Reviewer: LolaWrites Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 02:22 pm

Title: Chapter 3

I honestly didn't think I would, but I like it a lot!

 

Please continue, I would love a little back story, but this is great. 

Reviewer: idiotendenial Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 02:08 pm

Title: Chapter 3

Chapter was great. I wish it was longer.

Reviewer: SandyBrownEyes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 01:47 pm

Title: Chapter 3

Dare I say this is entertainingly crazy, yes being a woman the rape thing should bug me but Mariann is taking it in such a steady stride I'll be the crazy one to complain.There's some rationality in their insanity  (I hope). So please do your thing, I would like to see some more.

Reviewer: Lindy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 12:33 pm

Title: Chapter 1

At least it was a woman. This could've gone real wrong, real fast. :)

More, please.

Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 04:43 am

Title: Chapter 2

I likey.do you have the cast picture?



Author's Response:

I don't know how to do pics yet.

Reviewer: Trulyme35 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2013 01:29 am

Title: Chapter 2

The single fact that she's a Jamaican and he hasn't been beaten bloody tells me this is crack-fic. But seriously, Jason....you want to get the attention of the girl you like, so you thought breaking and entering (and uninvited sex!) was a great idea? Here's another r-word for you, son : RAPIST!



Author's Response:

LOL!

Reviewer: Leo the Yardie Chick Signed [Report This]
Date: May 15 2013 11:35 pm



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