wow. first i want to say i just started reading this story like last night literally lol. and i loved it. all the weird twists and turns up to this part. i cant believe you killed of ophelia! why?! of all things to get back at raymond why this? this was the ulitmate blow. idk. i know its your story and im not trying to tell you how to write it but i thought her death was just uneccessary. what if raymond blames himself for her death? he'll figure had he never gone to her house that night and got her pregnant she would still be alive. i just dont think i can continue with this story and the heartbreak that will follow for all the characters especially poor bennie/teddy. it was just so devestating to me, i so was so intrigued with raymond and ophelia and their relationship. but thanks anyway for an interesting read
Author's Response:
I Know...
This is why I haven't been able to continue the story. The muse wants what the muse wants. I didn't really want to kill her off, but the muse was persistent. I felt like I was having a major battle with myself over this. In the end the muse won, but the story lost. Thanks for reading. Maybe one day I can go back and redo it not killing her off.
Reviewer: babygirl23 Anonymous
[Report This]Date: March 19 2014 03:20 am
more of this story soon
Reviewer: faye Anonymous [Report This]Date: February 27 2014 11:53 pm
I'm sitting here in shock. I didn't see this coming, I didn't want it to happeen, I don't like it. I just started reading this story a few days ago, and just as quickly as I began is how quickly I'm going to stop. I understand drama, but killing off an already unbelievably sympatheitc character like Ophelia (a woman who's dealt with unfortunate events in her life prior to her rape, teenage pregnancy, custody loss of her child and discovering her mother's deception, AND who hadn't even begun to heal from those traumatic wounds) is discouraging. The least you should've done was 'warn' readers about it by tagging 'character death' as a 'warning' for this story. At least then I would've been prepared for this or just not read the story to begin with. I don't agree with 'punishing Raymond' at the expense of a good character and those that loved her. Her taking away his rights to see Justice would've done that (if it had to be done in the first place). Smh, well at least you didn't put this off any longer (like by waiting until the last chapter), so I can't be too upset.
Author's Response:
Believe me. I know that a lot of people were upset about that including myself. It was the hardest thing I've ever had to do since I started writing because I've never been in that position before.
The best way I can explain it is that my muse was insisting on going that route with Ophelia, but I didn't want to do it. I argued wit myself back and forth almost like I was two people or something. I could not move the story forward. Finally, I gave in, but I cried and told my readers that I was sorry and that I was going to take a few days off.
I think this is why after that, it was hard for me to continue the story. I hope nothing like this ever happens to me again. The Muse is a strange thing indeed. It's easy to say, "don't do it, just write somethng else" but your mind just shuts down.
Anyway, I understand why you don't want to continue the story. I really want to finish it and I will finish it eventaully, but this thing with Ophelia was a bit of a set back for me also.
We'll have to see where it goes after this.
Reviewer: guest Anonymous [Report This]Date: September 29 2013 11:34 pm
Great update don't rush. Just let it flow.
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed
[Report This]Date: July 27 2013 09:26 am
I'm happy that Raymond is doing much better...
Reviewer: nightseer Signed [Report This]Date: July 21 2013 08:19 pm
Brenda1257, thanks for a great update. I was LOL when Alicia told the racist that her cousin went for a gun but the cousin came back with Emancipation Procumation.... to funny .
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: July 19 2013 05:51 am
I'm glad to see Raymond is getting better.
Reviewer: 1nadali Signed [Report This]Date: July 19 2013 03:16 am
I like that Raymond is taking care of Justice. It like she has given him a reason to continue. He seems so happy. I'm glad Kevin and Alicia are going to be exclusive. I feel for Bennie. It seems by the time he and Keisha hook up agian, she be calling him Captain Hook...from choking his chicken...LOL!!
Reviewer: VeMo Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 19 2013 01:13 am
Yay!
Reviewer: Apple Signed [Report This]Date: July 19 2013 12:40 am
Damn this chapter was on fire. For return of that red head heffa to Bennie's fantasy about Keisha you had laughing so hard.
Reviewer: juno Signed [Report This]Date: July 19 2013 12:17 am
Bennie is still in the dog house with Keisha give the man man break. His life has just imploded be supportive and less accusatory! Bobbie reared her ugly continence and should have gotten squashed. Good stuff Brenda!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 18 2013 11:08 pm
I'm so honored to get a mention. Bobbie is bold ass hell. She's lucky Shay didn't take that book and shove it down her throat. Backwoods Barbie is going to mess with the wrong one someday and find herself with Smokie from Friday standing over her saying, "You got knocked the f out!!" LOL
Bennie has to realize he hurt Keisha and it will take her a little time to come around but he can show he's understanding by not being so impatient. Forgiveness always come right away just because you say you're sorry. It takes time. I hope Bennie will come to terms with his feelings about Ophelia's death so he can be a better big brother to Justice.
And glad to see Raymond is a good father for the sake of Justice. He's still icky but at least he's trying.
Reviewer: Happy2bNappy Signed [Report This]Date: July 18 2013 10:46 pm
I truly love this book...wonderful update
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: July 18 2013 10:19 pm
I am glad that Bennie finally decided to seek help and talk about his feelings.Although he should really some spend time with Justice....She's really cute. Raymond is doing a good job of being a father.He's trying really hard to be a good person.....I adore Alicia and Kevin so much.....LOVE their conversations. Shay,OMG she was hilarious. Emancipation Proclamation,seriously?God that was sooo crazy,I laughed so hard that my stomach started hurting.I don't even remember when was the last time I laughed so hard,so thanks for that......I wasn't expecting Bobbie to make an appearance...She's a crazy b**ch.Excellent chapter:)
Reviewer: zoe zoey Signed [Report This]Date: July 18 2013 10:18 pm
“I went to get a copy of the Emancipation Proclamation I had. I was going to read it to her so she’d know that the slaves were freed.” Shay remarked dryly. “Maybe I’ll walk into the store and read it out loud for everyone to hear. I can do that. I have rights.Let’s see what her ass does then.” that just killed me Alicia and Kevin have crazy time. But Shay lol Shay did me in lol i was laughing so damn hard. How is readin her Emancipation Proclamation going to scare the redneck heifer.. Lol phew that was really crazy i tell you. Hats off for another perfect chapter. Im glad Bennie and Keisha are working out again. But Benny needs to stop treating Juju like a leper i mean she is just a baby and cannot help who she looks like besides ive fallen in love with Juju and am now tolernt f Ray because he is learning to be a good father for her sake.
Reviewer: Hawtgurl Signed [Report This]Date: July 18 2013 09:46 pm
Emancipation Declaration?!?! Roflmao. Oh my! Just too good. Great series
Reviewer: Bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 18 2013 09:35 pm
I really enjoyed the Alicia and Kevin moments. About time those two got together. Yeah for Jacob for taking a stance and talking to his son Bennie. I am glad that Bennie saw Keisha with someone else even if is only her cousin. Her cousin should kick his butt just because he has been evil to his cousin. Thanks for a great update. I hope you have a great vacation Brenda. Take care.
Reviewer: Divsionred Signed [Report This]Date: July 15 2013 01:51 pm
Loved the update.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: July 14 2013 03:27 am
I am glad that Teddy Bear is going to get help.
He does need to beg some. LOL
Great update.
Reviewer: Mocomath Signed [Report This]
Date: July 13 2013 05:08 am
Yeah, Kevin and Alicia....thank you for getting Kev and Licia together maybe they can get the other 2 on the right track!
Reviewer: KittyOh48 Signed [Report This]Date: July 13 2013 04:06 am
Bennie needs to grow up. Get down on his knees and beg Keisha for forgiveness. Accept that Raymond is his biological father and move on. Be a good brother to Justice because she is going to need him. And let his parents and friends be a part of his life.
Reviewer: juno Signed [Report This]Date: July 13 2013 02:55 am
Love Kevin and Alicia! Oh Bennie, Never wanted to slap someone and hug him right afterwards! Snap out of Bennie! Your going to loose yourself and a good woman. So loved this story from the start! Always to a happy dance when you update!
Reviewer: Cali2mt406 Signed [Report This]Date: July 13 2013 12:57 am
loving this story!
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: July 12 2013 09:51 pm
I really feel bad for Bennie.....He seems so lost.After all the things he went through the year,I kind of understand his hesitancy to talk about his emotional problems.But he should really get help because it's affecting the relationships with his family and friends big time.He should be there for Justice....she needs him.Although I'm little mad at Bennie for dumping Keisha...They should be together.Hope Bennie gets her back and I hope Keisha makes him beg.Kevin and Alicia are super cute.LOL I just love them.
Great chptr as always Brenda.
Reviewer: zoe zoey Signed [Report This]Date: July 12 2013 09:40 pm
thanks for the update brenda! not lovin bennie right now AT ALL!! more please......
Reviewer: brownskingurl Signed [Report This]Date: July 12 2013 09:15 pm