More please.
Reviewer: Paseo1993 Signed [Report This]Date: December 24 2016 02:44 pm
What does he mean no was never an option? I don't like how that sounds.
Reviewer: KeiKei Signed [Report This]Date: October 20 2015 01:16 am
Wow... That's an interesting beginning. I wonder how and why she died. I would be traumatized if my husband died in front of me too.
Reviewer: KeiKei Signed [Report This]Date: October 20 2015 01:08 am
Woah!! Why didn't I read this story sooner! It's sooo good!
Reviewer: AmmaWem Signed [Report This]Date: October 17 2015 12:11 pm
When I read this I keep hearing that song by K.Michelle, the part where she say "what you going to do when I put this pretty thing on you" well Savannah put her pretty thang on James and the man is "SPRUNG". Don't James know he can't make no hoe into a house wife, I'm just kidding. Savannah is just not feeling James that way, now when she meets Micheal that's another story because they seem like to broke souls that needs each other to heal. Thanks for the update.
Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed [Report This]Date: October 15 2015 04:22 pm
I'm feeling Micheal's pain, he needs to get out that pent up aggression, he don't have to talk he can let his strokes do all the talking for him. I like this story.
Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed [Report This]Date: October 15 2015 04:09 pm
I like the cast!
Reviewer: jacqua43 Signed [Report This]Date: October 15 2015 04:04 pm
Nice...can't wait to see how this plays out
Reviewer: alee92 Signed [Report This]Date: October 15 2015 01:21 pm
So we get to meet Savannah and James. James is like a little boy that doesn't get his way throws a tantrum. I mean why ruin the moment after you hve sex to bring up marriage that you know will push her away. He's going to push one too many times and flowers isn't going to bring her back. I would have slapped him and walked out of there. He supposedly knows who she is and what she does but he wants her to depend on him and maybe she wants that too but his attitude turned me off to liking him. I guess I am looking forward to learning more about Savannah and less about James.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed [Report This]Date: October 15 2015 11:28 am
Interesting start when I first started reading I thought of CriminalMinds one of my favorite shows. I like the relationship between Michael and Patrick because Patrick is trying to get his friend to see he isn't living. Doing your job and taking care of your son isn't living. I feel like this first chapter was telling instead of being home with his son, he is working which tells me that he doesn't have that bond with his son that his wife wanted him to have. He's there for him and he loves him but because he is in an emotional state of denial he can't really be the father that his wife asked of him. He loved his wife that if evident in his thoughts but he is stuck in a moment of time that will destroy him.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: JovanBleu26 Signed [Report This]Date: October 15 2015 11:21 am
I'm intrigued. Great start so far.
Reviewer: Musicluva Signed [Report This]Date: October 14 2015 10:55 pm
James is real possessive when is having sex on the regular with a ho. Looking forward to her meeting Michael, I'll bet she'll catch some feelings for him.
Author's Response:
Probably the best comment I've ever read! Thank you so much! Haha yes James... What to say about james. He's really intense and he doesn't play nice with others. hahah but thank you so much for reading and for liking the story! Lots of juicy things to come! 😄
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: October 14 2015 09:33 pm
My story is back!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: October 14 2015 09:01 pm
Wow, that was deep! I want to read more, please!!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: November 10 2014 01:50 pm
Great start can't wait for the next chapter
Reviewer: cdy1216 Signed [Report This]Date: June 09 2013 01:08 pm
Oh wow this is getting good
Reviewer: JoVanAdDek Signed [Report This]Date: June 08 2013 02:13 pm
Looking forward to Chapter 2. Chapter 1 was intense and makes me want more. Micahel is so raw rght now,
Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 08 2013 11:32 am
This is good really good. I love the cast and the story is a great idea.
Reviewer: FranklinsMuse Signed [Report This]Date: June 08 2013 04:48 am
Interesting start but how did his wife die?
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: June 07 2013 06:09 am
Terrific start! Can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Annie Anonymous [Report This]Date: June 07 2013 05:28 am
For some reason this reminds me of Criminal Minds...when the Reaper killed Hotch's wife..I think it was the opening line. It also seems like a conversation Rossi would have had with Hotch. Is that what inspired you? If so, good job.
The only thing I would say is try to find your voice more because it is starting to sound more like a fanfic han an original piece.. I want to hear you that was inspired by the show not you imposing on it...I hope that makes sense.... anyways. Good luck. Can't wait to see more...
Date: June 07 2013 05:10 am
Very well done, the writing. I can almost picture the who office scene like Im watching a movie and getting a feel of the atmosphere. I cant wait to read more...
Reviewer: amlaamar Signed [Report This]Date: June 07 2013 04:21 am
I am REALLY interested in reading MORE. Kepler seems like he is a good friend. Looking forward to seeing what happens to Michael.
Nyeesha
Reviewer: Nyeesha Signed [Report This]Date: June 07 2013 03:21 am