I had been waiting for you to update this story because I really enjoy it, and I wondered where you were taking it. My preference would be that it stay realistic, but I wouldn't stop reading it if you made it supernatural. It just seems like someone would see that something is going on in her life, another student who likes her from afar, or maybe even a male teacher that has an interest. I don't know just throwing ideas out there. I like seeing how people triumph over adversity, and those that wrong them get their comeuppance. Hopefully, your muse will return. This story really did pull me in from the beginning, and I'd love to see you continue it.
Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed
[Report This]Date: April 17 2014 10:21 pm
I say supernatural and I hope you give her some powers that not only strengthens her but completely transforms her into a sexy and strong woman. lol just a little suggestion I love stories that showcases women coming out of a horrible situation strong and empowered. Thanks for the lovely update!
Reviewer: lovedemon5 Signed [Report This]Date: April 17 2014 08:58 pm
I love the story. Your chapters seem to be leaning toward supernatural which I love and enjoy...Could her gift be dormant until or could her intended be supernatural?
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: April 17 2014 07:57 pm
please come back...Wonderful three chapters
Author's Response:
I'm back. :]
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed
[Report This]Date: November 26 2013 04:59 am
UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE!!!!!
PLEASE!!!!! :-)
Reviewer: CAColeman Signed [Report This]
Date: November 16 2013 10:23 pm
This story is very intriguing, and I'm interested to see where you're taking it & what will happen to Kensington. I hope you update soon.
Author's Response:
It wasn't super soon but I did update :]
Reviewer: dgreen1980 Signed [Report This]Date: October 14 2013 07:38 pm
Very good story. Stan is evil and I hope Kensington gets out soon. Is she in her last year of HS? Can't wait till this mysterious guy is unveiled.
Reviewer: bonitaRI Signed
[Report This]Date: August 11 2013 08:15 am
I definitely liked it. It's so sad what she is going through. I'm so interested to see who comes along to pick her up tho. Great chapter.
Reviewer: CantMatchMyJas Signed [Report This]Date: August 09 2013 06:59 pm
stan is a psychopath and shefeels there is a light at the end of the tunnel; poor child has never known love or a warm touch. I would live in the woods before i stayed and put up with stan. I take it he an important man in the town and most towns do have a stan or two. can't wait to read about the new guy you bring. your writing and story telling is fantastic
Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]Date: July 29 2013 06:44 am
I like the story, sad but good. I hope she escapes soon. How come no one is helping that poor child not even school is safe foe her.
Reviewer: luv2read Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 09:41 pm
I love the story so far but the chapters are so short?
Reviewer: PetitteBelle Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 08:05 pm
I absolutely loathe Stan.It tears my heart to read Stan beating Kesington so brutally...She's just a kid for God's sake!.Although I don't understand why people around her are not seeing her bruises and suspecting Stan of abuse....I really hope someone is out there who'll help Kesington get out of this hell hole and save her life.Love your writing and looking forward to the next update.
Reviewer: zoe zoey Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 07:39 pm
There has to be someone she can turn to, and soon. No one should have to suffer like this.
Reviewer: bayoumomma Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 07:18 pm
I hate Stan too! That man is am emotionally stunted Neanderthal with shit for brains who should loose his livelyhood and then his life. You can make it look like he was shot while on duty. I don't want Menzies to have is blood on her hands but if she did it would truly be self-defense. I am loving the progression of the story, the pacing is great. I am disgusted by the failure of all the adults that in and around her life. How is this man not in jail and Kenzie not safe from his abuse? He may be a good but they always look at the spouse when a husband or wife is murdered. Was a autopsy not conducted? Her momma's body had to had lots of bruising and untreated breaks and fractures so how could they not come to the conclusion that it was homicide?
Author's Response:
I missed this, but if only you could have seen my face when I was reading this. You went IN on Stan.
Also you gave Kensington a nickname, so cuteeeee!
With that being out of the way, let me get to answering your questions. :]
People in the city turn the other eye because of the lavicious rumors that Stan circulated through his police buddies (stan is an officer, I believe I have mentioned it somwehere) which eventualy trickled throughout the city. He framed her as a unhappy druggie who attempted to always chase the next high by using. He's seen as more of a hero for remaining strong through his wife's drug abuse and death. Him being able t function and take care of a child that is not truly his is the cards that he plays to the rest of the world. No friend would look to a friend when they can easily point blame at someone else. In this case: Camille.
It's so easy to look the other way when those in power and the right connections ask one to.
I hope that this has suffciently answered your questions and I am so enthused that you took such an interest in my story and I do hope that I hear from you again.
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed
[Report This]Date: July 28 2013 06:06 pm
Tis story is hard to read but you are doing an excellent job pulling me and making me root for Kenzie. Can't wait to read more - you definitely have my caught and desire to continue reading.
Reviewer: katie Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 06:02 pm
good to know that stan isn't her real father and i can't wait to find out who is and the story behind that....at least she does fight back and doesn't allow stan to take advantage of her but i also wonder why doesn't she run away instead of staying there and dealing with fighting for her life everyday..she's better off by herself right?
Reviewer: sandradee Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 05:49 pm
I need to see the light at the end of the tunnel quick, coz this is so dark and sad... :-(
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 01:12 pm
Kensington can't seem to get a break but there has to be a chink of light somewhere. The unrelenting brutality would wear down even the strongest of us.
While I'm not sure I agree with all of the points made by Cholyn, she does have a point re no one seeing anything. No matter how small the town/city or how upstanding the citizen someone must have noticed something. Whether they do anything is another matter.
Everyone needs encouragement in order to exist. Where's Kensington getting hers from? Where has the formidable strength of character come from? How is she able to go on day after day in this sort of misery?!
A ray of light for the child please! It would be great if it where an interested adult or friend before her prince comes along to rescue her. But those are my thoughts and you are the author.
I'm really interested to see how you'll develop the story going forwards.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! :]
As I wrote in the response to Cholyn, individuals get outstanding at hiding thinfs that they would rather not have anyone see. Just as adults in abusive relationships are capable of "hiding" the abuse, children and teens are as well. There are too many people in the world that simply don't care enough to help. Also, it is quite hard to help people who do not seek out help.
In regards to her encouragement, you'll see that in the next few chapters. :]
Thank you tons for reading my story and taking the time to review it!
It means a hell of a lot to me. :D
Reviewer: londongirl Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 10:34 am
This story requires some serious well thought out exposition. I know that kids are abused, but i find it hard to believe that not a single person has noticed this girl has been physically abused for fifteen years?? I get that he's a police officer, but unless they live in a teeny, tiny town there is no way someone wouldn't have said something. He's not even rich. The excuse of him being her only family doesn't fly either seeing as social services would have put in her foster care. There's also no excuse as to why she stays. She's what, seventeen, and she can't run away, get a job, enroll in school somewhere else. Hell, she's saved some money, but she can't get on a bus go to a different district, report his ass, show the bruises, etc?
I like this story, but I don't feel like you've done the necessary ground work to tell it convincingly. I know it's only the third chapter, but there's so much missing within the exposition phase of this story. I could see if she stayed with him out of some kind of psychological issue. If he were like some abusive men: the ones who beat females, apologize, and pretend that it'll never happen again.
I feel bad for the heroine; nevertheless, I don't feel the depth of emotion for her that I normally would for anyone in her situation. This story could use more show and less tell. This could be a really good story, but it needs to be fleshed out more.
Author's Response:
I appreciate the feedback that you have given and understand your concerns.
It's more of a "The Boy Who Cried Wolf" sort of thing. If you claim something yet everyone already sees you as a liar or a screw up, it doesn't matter how much evidence you have to prove that what you have to say is true. In Kensington's case, she can't escape the bad gossip that floats around about her nor can she stop how Stan presents himself as an upstanding citizen and her as someone who places no value into her life. Perhaps she's thought to be suicidal and the wounds are self inflicted. Maybe everyone chooses to ignore all the signs and turn the other way because it's "none of their business". Also, most kids do not want to get put into Foster care because it does not gaurantee a better life, if anything things can get worse. When you go through something long enough you become very good at hiding things that you do not wish to be seen. I apologize that my story does not connect with you on an emotional level and that you see this as a hole in my expostion. I will attempt to look into the things you have suggested and see if I would like to taper things in my future posts.
With that being said, I do love the fact that you took the time to read my story and take the time to write a very informative and well thought out review. Thank you. :]
Reviewer: Cholyn Signed [Report This]
Date: July 28 2013 09:44 am
This story is amazing!!! I feel every emotion she feels. And Stan is a MAJOR SICK FUCK!!!! I can't wait till he gets his!!!! Can't wait for the next update!! Keep up the good work!!
Reviewer: Treale Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 09:42 am
Poor Kenzie, I hope she'll have the strength to fight Camden back. She's right, education is her ticket for freedom and safety. But at this point and at this extent, safety is beyond priority. She could have fled to another city, there's always a shelter for stray children. Poor child. Your story is well written, I can feel the depth of her despair, she can't control what's happening to her and the violence her body is subjected to, but she still has her soul and mind. Great job, I can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: Peanut Signed [Report This]Date: July 28 2013 09:38 am
That poor child. But, she remains strong.
Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]Date: July 27 2013 09:37 pm
Why did Kenzie's mom marry Stan? More children die because mother's bring in me. That aren't the biological father's. I can't waif to find out why Stan wanted Kenzie so bad especially since he loved neither or mother or her. Stan is evil and vile and I want him dead!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: July 26 2013 10:59 pm
I love it...please give us more
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: July 26 2013 05:36 pm
This story is very sad but it is soooo true in all of its contents, thank you for writing maybe it will help someone.
Reviewer: kimyso Signed [Report This]Date: July 26 2013 04:48 pm