So far so good. To drag out the opening to two chapters is perhaps a bit much. You could have happily condensed them into one chapter.
Also, please check your spelling and grammar. For example 'foster care' rather than 'froster care'. Those are things a spell-check won't catch. And 'don't' rather than 'dont'.
All the same, thanks for posting, and I'm looking forward to the conclusion.
Reviewer: bookbutterfly Anonymous [Report This]Date: January 18 2018 08:23 am
I thought the detail the author used was vivid & incredible. I'm def a fan. I look forward to more of her work. Especially interrational love stories
Reviewer: Anthony Love Anonymous [Report This]Date: February 12 2014 03:35 am
Interesting start! More please.
Reviewer: baha_malo Signed [Report This]Date: January 31 2014 05:23 am
I like the pictures
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: January 30 2014 09:40 pm
What a wonderful start
Reviewer: Bredreaway Signed [Report This]Date: January 30 2014 09:40 pm
Treale I love vampire romances!! I am sad that is father was murdered bt a rogue vampire. Looking forward to reading more even if it a short story. Have a great day!!
Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]Date: January 30 2014 01:04 pm
Goodlooking cast. Now you need to write more that 3 chapters. Why? The brothers needs mate too. Lovely dark skin mates just like Lana. The adventures these brothers could have finding, fighting others for their mates. So more than 3 chapters please.
Reviewer: skriver Signed [Report This]Date: January 30 2014 11:00 am
Readable first chapter. I like vamp...stories, so yeah more please.
Reviewer: skriver Signed [Report This]Date: January 30 2014 10:54 am