Hi, I haven't reviewed in awhile and I just read your note in the last chapter.  Please keep writing.  Anyone looking for a quick ending to this story, doesn't really enjoy reading.  And they are probably more use to actual fanfiction which usually doesn't take long to write and gets straight to the more exciting parts more often than not.  KEEP WRITING THIS STORY.  I'm quite sure there are more than a few people, including myself, that are interested in seeing what happen's next in Jodi's story.  I for one wish you would update more,  but I know your life doesn't revolve around this story.  Thank you so much for bringing this story to life and sharing it with us.  I hope you continue to do so.

Sincelerely,

         Seraphwalker

first let me say sorry for not leaving a comment sooner. please dont stop posting your stories. ive shared this awesome story with all my facebook friends and they love it... stay true to your style and how you want to write your story..your doing this for free.. so who gives a damn who may or may not agree with how this story is playing out..its not there story to tell its yours. so dont let other steal away your thunder for finishing this kick ass story. do you Boo!!

PAUSE! 

This is your story and it belongs to YOU, that is the first thing I would like for you to know. Second, if readers decide they want to continue on elsewhere let them. You cannot please everyone and the moment you do, you have officially lost the most important participant, you. I hate when I see writers post Author Notes like this, it just breaks my heart. Whether I like the story or not, you have built these characters and this world with all these loose ends that deserve to be tied up. Now for the sake of the story it can come across that the chapters are mere situations fused into a story, but I think not. My concern is I don't know what the hero (Jodi) wants anymore but that's why we read; to get to the end. I just want her to so realize that she is good enough and shouldn't have to use her body in order to get love. By now she should tell her step mom and brother. What's with the headaches, BBC, and Dan???? I feel like Craig's POV was insightful. But remember you are telling at story about her loneliness and how she can overcome that. Please continue being great! You are an awesome writer. Keep GOING THIS BELONGS TO YOU! 

One thing I've learned in life. EAT THE MEAT AND THROW AWAY THE BONES!

Criticims has its purpose but you must always be true to yourself, as a person, as a writer and as a creative person.

I always prefer to see things through to the end.

I have loved following this series and I like Jodi personally just remember that you got it right when you said it's an accomplishment for the story to evoke any emotion at all and by thestory's end people will be singing your praises pleased that Jodi finally got it together

continue on the way you planned and do you

I think that this story is very raw...As are many stories here. Bodies development seems a little TOO flawed. ..If you know what I mean. She seesaw too much between wanting to get help and realizing that she's screwed up and just completely jumping off the bandwagon and burning it afterwards.  That is what I think may be affecting the flow of the story. A character is bound to have relapses...but it seems that she has far too many to make be able to plausibly bread to real catharsis.  This will mess the the development and evolution of other characters. I think that once you evaluate that, then you can formulate the time line for your story. Always ask yourself "How does this character doing _______ aid in the development / progress of my story?" That will help you out if those ruts...now as for updating. That is a decision for you to make. Don't base it off of reviews you have gotten. In the long run you could be missing out on vital advise and critiques. 

Hope this helps. I did enjoy the story though. 

I never left my review with the intention to discourage you so if that's what I did, I personally apologize. It's your story you take it where you please, post the chapters. If this ends up being a 200 chapter story then do that. You have plenty of readers who love this story and will follow if until you can think of no more. Don't me a few readers undermine your entire creation. You've made an entire world for these characters and they deserve whatever ending you give them. In my review i have nothing altogether constructive to say because I really don't know where the story was going. Not saying it has to be to the point and short, but I've read long stories with clear and concise complexity. Literally, when I read your story I get confused. And that's entirely personal. I don't even consider it a big deal, I apologize if you do. 

Anyway, I thought I would come clear things up since my review was negative. I still wont continue with the story (I should have stopped at the rape scene because I've been a victim of abuse and I don't like reading about it--again personal), but you still have my support because every writer on here deserves that. We are already a disenfranchised part of the literary world and even in our stories we've been reduced to sex symbols and skin tones and hair textures. So you keep making Jodi human and keep portraying men as insecure beings who mess up too. Not every rich man is Prince Charming and not every lonely black woman is just shy. Thank you for that and I wish you completion and the very best. 

I honestly feel like nothing needs to be changed . This story is perfect . 

I have enjoyed the story but I definitely understand why some readers have jumped ship. This story is very long (over 100k words!) and it has not even reached the climax. The climax should have happened several chapters ago. Characters have been developed; no further development is necessary. 

Is this story some sort of catharsis or is it just a story?

Listen to your readers. Interest is waning because the pace is too slow. 

Post the rest of your story. Then find an editor to help you pare down the story and consider posting the revised story. Most stories that are over 100k words are working on the second or third climax at this point. 

I was so shocked reading your authors note. Personally I've really enjoyed this story and look forward to all of your updates. It can be a bit overwhelming putting your work out to the public to get scrutinized and so I hope my comment helps bring you encouragement. I would love/ hope that you continue with this story and take the bad with the good all in strive. I'm positive I am not the only one who supports this story. Also no matter what you do someone somewhere will always have something negative to say and you can't let that negate your passion for what you are doing. This is getting kinda lenghthy so just know I'm hooked and I hope this feeling of doubt passes from you! :]

Hi stop doubting your self. Please continue. The key is this is your story and dont compromise it. You will never be able to please every one. You are doing fine and there are people looking foward to your updates. When I write I update often to keep people interested. I m looking foward to writing again because of you. So stay strong there is a following. Havea great day. Diva

Keep writing and let's keep this moving. I may not agree with Jodi, but it is what it is. 

I have enjoyed your story so far. There are some editing issue. I think you have enough info for a part two story. Maybe cut some flashbacks.

I like the slow breakdown of the character but I did skip some of the repetitive everyday stuff in the beginning.

PS. I don't get the complaints about the sexual nature of the story when it is rated 17 and up. And there was a warning in the first chapter.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review Sascie88.