Your story is very interesting. I love the way you allow your readers to direct it.
Hmmm... I would love for him to say "no", and ask the father for permission to date the sister, but we know that would be disasterous. I have a feeling that if he says "no", and doesn't ask for permission to date the sister, that will be just as worse. What is the saying, "Keep you friends close and your enemies...", yeah. Well, if he dates the evil sister, he can almost write the good sister off.
Okay, I'm just going to read the next chapter. The anticipation is killing me!Reviewer: flgurleygrl Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 02:59 pm
A!!!! Great update
Thanks JP!Reviewer: JP Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 10:52 am
Absolutely A! That would trip her sister up AND piss her off at the same time.
Sooner rather than later, Larry must realize Shauna is making a mess of his organization and bringing unwanted attention to their nefarious practices. Had Shauna been his son, he would've exerted his hierarchy and reprimanded her ass by now. Man I can't wait to see what happens next!!
thank you for the substantially awesome and enlightening update!
I completely agree with everything you said. Thanks JV4ME!Reviewer: JV4ME Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 06:55 am
chapter 5- continued
and also ! I really want to see carter and aaron meet. Or somehow find out about aaron. Because then he'll realise that he has major competition and this is what he gets for getting with her damn sister... even if he didnt want to. WAIT (he did right? i mean before the time he pushed tam out? )
Larry needs to see how crazy Shauna is. I really want to see his reaction when he realises that it was his own daughter who dared to do that to his little tammy.
I cant wait to see Carters face either though... because he will see it as someone else trying to take what is his lol Aaron as much as im starting to love you, i only want you as her friend, an older brother kind of? but for now... stick around and make carter think twiceeeee about letting Tammy go far lmaoooo
OOOH ONE MORE THING - I FREAKEN WANT TO SEE SHAUNAS REACTION TO THIS!! AHAAHAHHAHA OOOHHHH BITCH IS GOING TO GO INSANEEE!! HAHAHAHA SHAMEEE BITCH!!! sorry ... the hate for shauna is realllllll.
Carter better tell Larry how much he doesnt want Shauna... or i'll start shipping aaron with her. .. or someone else lmao
Lol. I love your continuations.
Carter was never with Shauna before the night her threw Tam out. But what happend that night has yet to be revealed. And your wish to see Shauna's reaction to Tam going with Carter will be granted. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gordana!Reviewer: Gordana Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 03:51 am
GO with Carter! i think it'll give her time to actually let off steam... to put HIM in his place. Make sure he knows how she feels... i mean i'd want to be able to let it alllllllllll out. The two are mad for each other, but under the circumstances, it's literally like forbidden love. I really want her to be mad at him and make him feel like shit lol but then they can go and be all horny and shit hahahahah
AAROONNNN!!! ok so at first i was like YASSSSS!! GO WITH HIM FOR NOW !! but then when i continued to read, and realised aaron is a taken man? i was like NO. The one thing i dislike are cheaters and abusers. And he unfortunately is cheating on his fiance EMOTIONALLY. I was like WAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH !! because he is honestly amazingggg! and im pretty sure he and his fiance wont last... because their relationship changed once they moved in together. I mean what will happen when they get married? they will be forever stuck with each other. He is so protective and caring. I love how skilled he is. It's so amazing how these amazingly talented and strong fighters are so smitten by Tam. You'd honestly think they'd go for her whore of a sister -_- who i hope gets a beat down by tam. AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH AND WILLIAM LEVI IS FUCKEN AMAZINGGGG!! I DONT KNOW HOW TAM KEPT HER PANTIES ON HHAHAHAAH
jokes jokes carter all the way
but i do think he should suffer a little ... i mean come on... i really want to see a jealous carter lmao
Larry ... is seriously crazy. I dont understand him... he is one hell of a cold mofo but his weakness is most defffff his family. I just dont understand how he cant see how much of a trouble Shauna is? she is horrible and literally the devil.
Carter ... i loved how it showed how much panic and how much he freaken cares for her. He wants that whole life with her ! it makes me go insane thinking about it. He really really wants to be with her but he knows that their chances of being together is like 1% lmao I just dont understand why Larry wont allow others to date tam... come on man ... give carter a chance. . . lol and i loveeee how he made larry second guess himself. it was pure genius. I FUCKING SMILEEDDD SO MUCH when i read how he couldnt bring up her name or anything because his feelings would show ! and also how he hasnt seen her for a while- he believes its been too long! loveeeee it
and tam. I feel so sorry for her honestly. She has been dragged into this life and had no say in it whatsoever. She has a devil sister who seriously needs a hiding, a father who is the devil's sidekick and a man who she loves but cant do so because of his chosen lifestyle, dad wouldnt allow it, he is a freaken hard ass who hurt her, made her mad as hell and now shes ignoring him (WHICH IS FREAKEN GOOD)and not only will her dad kill him, her sister would be after her. The reason why i say the dad is the devils sidekick is because he has a soft spot somewhere in that cold heart of his. shauna has none. She thinks only about herself and wants her sister dead. She is pure evil
So my vote is for her to go with carter ONLY because it gives them alone time- time for her to make him feel like shit, make him jealous and go crazy AND THEN have make up sex hahhahahahahhaha OR AS CARTER SAID MAKE LOVEEEEE
i just think he needs to learn... that time when he shoved her... and she was like hellllll no... i was cheering her on. I think she is right to ignore him and make him feel little.
if not carter... then on her own? it'll still give carter time to see her... so she can punch him in the face
LOVED IT. CANNOT POSSIBLY WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER
Thanks Gordana! Your reviews deserve previews and popcorn.
I don't know if Aaron has crossed the line into emotional infidelity yet. I don't consider it cheating until inappropriate feelings are entertained or acted upon. After all, you can't help what you feel, only what you dwell on and do. I guess you could say he's crossed the line by staying on as her contact after realizing he cares more than he should. But asking her to be reassigned would be disastrous for her.
Carter's and Aaron's attraction defies the odds in Tamryns favor, or maybe not. Most men love to feel needed and to be a hero. Tamryn provides that, even if unintentionally. Shauna doesn't, but Gunner still wants her in some form or fashion. Different strokes... Aaron seems to care about Tamryn because he feels the need to protect her while Carter feels the need to protect her because he cares. We'll see which prevails.
The reunion between Carter and Tamryn is not likely to be a happy one, but I don't know how much fight she'll give him considering someone's after her he's taken on the responsibility and the risk of protecting her. We'll see...
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Gordana!!! So glad you're enjoying the story.Reviewer: Gordana Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 03:41 am
I just discovered this story. I got so caught up reading, I forgot I had a sandwich looking at me until my Dog went stealth mode and stole it.
Go with Carter Girl!! Go with Carter!!
Thanks Valesh1.Reviewer: Valesh1 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 02:43 am
A!!! She should go with Carter. It will piss off Shauna so much that she might get sloppy and causes her father to open his eyes to how deep her hatred of Tam goes. Larry can't possibily be that blind to it.
Larry's more willfully ignorant than blind. Why will become clearer next chapter. Thanks for reading and commenting, BellaLuna!Reviewer: BellaLuna7 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2014 12:05 am
i swear to GOD - it's like Christmas up in here!! two stories update!! YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAS!! PARTYYY!
love Aaron! what a great character and genuine good guy! i knew things were bad but learning about Tam's situation with the feds certainly put another spin to things. i was just wondering something about Miguel - was he working with the feds too? and if so, does that mean the feds knew or didn't know he was also helping Shauna with framing Tamryn?
Clearly Carter is the only one that understands the situation and since i want to PISS off Shauna i glady choose A with a big smile on my face...!
aaah, the look on Shauna's face when she hears about this is going to be priceless and if she thinks Gunner's "happy ending story" gave her anything...then Tamryn moving in with Carter will quickly put an end tothat!
Thanks for the updates! & take care! :D
Thanks Yuukiyanagi!!! Love the clips, especially the first one. It's good for an endless stream of giggles.
To answer you questions, yes, Miguel was working for the feds, all of them knew the evidence was fabricated, and at least one knows it was Shauna who put him up to it. More on that in future chapters.
And prepare to smile, because per majority vote, Tam is going with Carter and Shauna will be one of the first to know.
Thanks for faithfully reading and reviewing! I so appreciate it!Reviewer: Yuukiyanagi Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 03:03 pm
A) Go with Carter, which will piss her sister off even more and at the same time show their father and everyone else how much Shauna hates her sister. But the question is why does she hate her so much? And I'm thinking that Larry left Shuana's mother for Tam's mom
Not quite, but you're very close. A full explanation of why Shauna hates Tam and why Larry is so resistent to acknowledging that and all her faults coming up in the next chapter. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Keikei!Reviewer: keikei2 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 12:17 pm
Not only do I enjoy your story but I love your reviewers! Excellent chapter. ***GO WITH CARTER!!!
Thanks Pearlcat!Reviewer: pearlcat Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 04:14 am
Tam is going with Carter bc she is about to lose her mine and deep down she still trusts him.
Carter is going to take one look at her interaction with Aaron and realize he has competition. I am liking me some Aaron, soory erica.
Tam with Carter will push Shauna around another bend---Larry the dad needs to watch his back with Shauna, bc I think she will take him out. Too bad Shauna can't tell on Aaron and Tam, bc that will tell on her. Maybe she will go after Aaron and get Erica in the process.
Why does Carter want Tam with him, and it is not all about caring about her either? I think everyone is using the girl like a puppet and she is going to wind up snapping.
Lol at you plotting ways to free Aaron up for Tam! Shauna will surely lose her sh*t when she finds out about Tam staying with Carter. Everyone needs to be concerned about being a target for retaliation, including her father.
Carter wants Tam with him for several reasons. One, he knows she's not safe in a house with Shauna--the person he believes set Tam up. The others will become clear in the next couple chapters.
Thanks for reading and reviewing, Penelope!Reviewer: Penelope Signed [Report This]
Date: September 07 2014 03:30 am
Tam will go with Carter although why can't she disappear with Aaron? Her father doesn't realize how psychotic Shauna is and as a result won't be able to protect her. So good Joelle!!
At this point, Tam can't go with Aaron because her father doesn't know about her deal with the feds and being found with a federal agent would very likely alert him to it. Thanks for faithfully reading and reviewing, Pam!Reviewer: pmgayles Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 11:32 pm
Woah ! Or will carter go to her house !?
Awesome update ate by the way! Didn't see this Aaron guy coming or that she got manipulated into being a narc.
Per majority vote, Tam's going with Carter to his house. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Jesslove!Reviewer: Jesslove3205 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 10:52 pm
I think she'll go with Carter, but not before she goes, all "HELL TO THE NAW".
And because it can't be said enough... Shauna is a soulless b!tch.
She really is. Thanks BellaChica!Reviewer: BellaChica Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 09:06 pm
Gorgeously long update. I think she'll choose to go it alone. She knows what's bound to happen if she stays with him and she may think they'll be compromised because of it. In order to protect both, and staying with her father isn't an option, she'll take "c".
Good point. Thanks AP!Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 07:54 pm
Thanks for the update! A) she will go with Carter
Thanks Annie!Reviewer: Annienathanson Anonymous [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 07:49 pm
I can't wait for the next chapter !! I love this story. I cried when Tam told him how she had to look for her car & stuff. Her sister is RUTHLESS .. It's scarey. Live by the Gun , die by the gun? This story could go so many different ways idk what's going to happen next which is great!! I also love the detail !
& im im gonna go with B.Carter because.. Who exactly could this un identified male be? Cz like how would you introduce a guy best friend... If that's already her brother. & idk lol
Thanks Jesslove! So glad you're enjoying the story. The wait for an update and an answer to your "who could the unidentified male be" question is over. I just posted the next chapter. Enjoy, and thanks for reading, reviewing, and voting.Reviewer: Jesslove3205 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2014 04:04 pm
CHAPTER FOUR *NEW FAN ALERT ALERT*
OMFGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG this is really dark and emotional and freaken awesome!
First of all- i love your main female character Tamryn. We dont fully know her yet, but I love the person you've portrayed her to be. my heart aches for her... you can see how much she loves and cares for Carter, even though she knows she cant. I feel like her life is so controlled on so many levels, that she's going to snap soon. Her dad... i find him so cunning. I mean who can be so ... mobster like and be all 'no bullshit' YET at the same time, full act like a gentleman who is in love with his wife who he is or isnt with? He confuses me the most i must say. I hate how he wont let Tamryn choose who she wants to be with. I would love for her to be with Carter! well not right now ... since he's not in me good book until he treats her like a queen that she is ! lmfao OOOOOOH i got so mad when he shoved her so hard. I was like "OOOOH YOU BETTER NOT GO BACK TO HIM!!!" LMFAO i wanted her to stand up for herself and she did... when she chose to ignore him and shit. I think she's stronger than her sister personally... but she hasnt shown it. I hope she makes carter beg... lmfao She deserves the best, and if there's another guy who shows her interest... maybe that would set carter off lmfaoooooo i loveeee when they go cray cray and the girl is like zzzzzz hahahah
Larry doesnt "spoil" Shauna. that is literally an understatement. He seriously over does it and it annoys the crap out of me ! Like yeah the little bitch wants carter, but clearly the boy doesnt want her! goodness meeeeee
shauna is the WORST MOST EVIL DEMONS SPAWN FUCKEN WITCH BITCH SHIT i've ever heard of. i hateeeeee her!! omfgggg she is pure evil. If she were my sister... ohhhhh shit would go downnn! hahahahah I hate how she treats tam :( she's so evil and is a little bitch who is so jealous and crazy. This is what makes me so happy about the whole carter situation. She wants him so badly, but he doesnt even like her.
carter ... well you havent gained any points back yet. I do ship you and tam ... i call you TAMER ... hahahahah anywho it's not easy ... because her dad is a bloody psycho but try your hardest to make him see that you aint going with that hoe shauna. I hope he saves tam ...
I FUCKEN LOVE THIS !!! WHOOOO HOOOOO !! more carter and tam pleaseeeee ! even if it's just them arguing lmao i'll love you forever and ever hahaha xxx
Thanks for the thoroughly entertaining review, Gordana! I could feel your enthusiasm for the story while reading it, and it did my little writing addicted heart good.
Larry is a man with many faces. His love for the women in his life is probably is only and greatest weakness, especially Shauna. He does whatever is necessary to protect Tamryn but indulges Shauna--sometimes to her detriment and others. But I wouldn't assume his plans to help her get Carter are as altruistic as they might seem just yet.
You will definitely get more Carter and Tamryn in future chapters. I'm glad you'll take them any way you can get them, because I'm not sure what readers will want to see happen between them after they read the next chapter and meet Tamryn's rescuer (an unknown male by majority vote). Stay tuned...
Thanks for reading, reviewing, and voting!Reviewer: Gordana Signed [Report This]
Date: August 22 2014 07:53 am
Little Sophie is adorable!! I loved this update, it opened up a lot of doors to the possibilities this story can take. I will of course vote for B) Carter becuase I would like to see more interaction with him and Tamryn. Can't wait for the next update!
Thanks Julia W.! The next update is in the works.Reviewer: Julia W. Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 17 2014 10:29 pm