Title: Chapter 4

Carter, of course...it just seems...right, or fitting, or perhaps he accompanies the new mystery man. Implications would be skewed and varied and delicious! Lol Hopefully this person/relative/regulator is a no-nonsense personality who garners a level of fear in Ms. Shauna.

i absolutely love Sean but I must admit I'm a tad confused and must reread the previous chapters to gain clarity.  How many siblings are there?  I thought Tamryn's 'brother' helped buffer the wrath of Shauna and now her brother has been incarcerated for a year?

initinally I thought the Hooks children were bi-racial - thinking that the hierarchy of the clan was of Caucasian descent; thanks for clearing that up for me.  Does Larry have any assumptions of Tamryn's affections?  And why does he feel imminent doom by the hands of another instead of causes of nature? By whom? Makes ya go mmmm....

Author's Response:

There are three Hooks children--Tamryn, Shauna, and Sean.  Only Shauna is fair-skinned and biracial (her mother is East Asian).  More on Shauna and her mother coming up in future chapters.  There's no mention made of Sean until this chapter, and no discussion of his role in the relationship between the sisters, but certain inferences can be made.

Larry doesn't have any inkling of Tamryn's affections for Carter, as evidenced by the fact that Carter is still working for him and alive.  Question is, can the same be said for Deborah?  And Larry's belief that he won't live to see old age is just him facing the realities of the business he's involved in and the violence and stress that comes with it.

Thanks for reading, reviewing, and commenting JV4ME.

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 17 2014 01:42 am

Title: Chapter 4

This story IS SO GOOD, not that I'm surprised or anything. Although we're still getting a feel for these characters they're already so wonderfully fleshed out, its just awesome to read. Shauna I gotta say I would never want to run into her anywhere, lol. Most female villains are written to want vengence because some man wronged them, so its rare to read about a woman who is that hard that she would literally take out her own family. 

And yeah, Miguel is a con artist and whatnot but I have to admit I felt a little bad for him this chapter just because of the descriptive way you described his pain, and now he's been chopped to pieces to frame Tamryn I suppose, poor fellow. 

Tamryn, I like her. She's stuck in an impossible situation where literally her every step is being watched, not just by her sister but by the feds and her father's enemies. It doesn't seem like a charmed existence being able to buy whatever you want because the money is there, when you have to sacrifice your own happiness and basically live in a sheltered bubble where you have to carefully edit every little thing you do and say, and mask your inner feelings about things. 

Now come to find out her sister is trying to set her up...it's like how far is Shauna willing to go to get Tamryn out of the picture? And I wouldn't rule out murder, either and I'm glad Tamryn isn't just brushing off that very real fact like her brother and even her dad might. 

But the person I would like to come to Tamryn's aid is C, unknown male. Yeah, I'd like Carter to be the one to show up, however, Shauna's goons could still be lurking around and if he were to show up that would spell both of their deaths and the story may just end, lol. 

Can't wait for the next chapter!!

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and the insightful review, Lapis Love!  I wholeheartedly agree.  Miguel was a dirt-ball, but didn't deserve to die.  And you're right, the purpose of him dying was to frame Tamryn--as if she doesn't have enough going on.  And it's about to get worse.  More on that in the next chapter.

Reviewer: Lapis Love Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 17 2014 01:27 am

Title: Chapter 4

I know this isn't an option, but can Shauna die?  Or at least maimed? Like severely? Ijs.

Author's Response:

Lol.  Shauna's death and maiming are not up for a vote in this chapter, but that may change in the future chapters.  Thanks Khamalani!

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 06:38 pm

Title: Chapter 1

I vote C.  Shauna will be expecting either Daddy or Carter to come to the rescue.  Besides Carter needs a bit of motivation to let his feelings be known.  

Author's Response:

You have a point there...Thanks BellaLuna, and sorry for the late reply!

Reviewer: BellaLuna Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 05:34 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Thank you JJ for this looong and juicy update! :D :D :D

i really liked Sean - damn shame that he's locked up. Tam could really need him now. i knew that Shauna was CRAZY(!!!!!!!) but framing Tam and then sending Miguel's head is just.. shocking - lack of better words...!

there was just one thing i was wondering about - Larry's secret related to Shauna was that  about him not telling her Carter's answer?

Lastly i vote for C. i really thought about going for Carter. i mean he was ready to come to Tam without thinking about the consequences but then i started thinking about the many possibilities and i couldn't help myself, lol!


plus the unknown man...mmhmm...normally i would guess that the guy turns out to be a potential rival but i wonder... oh well ;) i guess i just have to wait and see - thank you so much for your hard work! Like always - look forward to more! :D


Author's Response:

Shauna is out of control, and she is just getting started.  Larry's secret related to her was the fact that he's using her to smoke Carter out even though he knows Carter wants nothing to do with her and she has ulterior motives.  More on that in upcoming chapters.  

Thank you for reading, reviewing, and voting, and for the clip, Cassius Noir!!!  I can't help but giggle everytime I see it.


Reviewer: Yuukiyanagi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 02:53 pm

Title: Chapter 4

I vote for C

Author's Response:

Thanks Cdy1216!

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Date: August 16 2014 02:10 pm

Title: Chapter 4


Author's Response:

Thanks Dounome!

Reviewer: dounome Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 05:57 am

Title: Chapter 4

Just had another thought...what if the unknown man was a woman. Say perhaps Mia? I'm not trying to hijack your story, just throwing possibilities out there. 

Author's Response:

No hijacking assumed.  This is a reader-driven story, and suggestions and comments are always welcome.  Mia (or her corpse) won't be making an appearance in the next chapter, but that doesn't count her out for future chapters.  Thanks AP!

Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 03:13 am

Title: Chapter 4

The unknown male...it offers so many possibilities.

Reviewer: AP Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 02:39 am

Title: Chapter 4

The unknown man should be C) an unknown male we haven't met yet.

Thanks for the update!!

Author's Response:

YW.  Thanks Annie!

Reviewer: Annienathanson Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 12:50 am

Title: Chapter 1

Carter is my choice! 

Reviewer: azzure1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16 2014 12:13 am

Title: Chapter 1

This is too good. Omg! 

Author's Response:

Thanks Azzure!  So glad you like it. 

P.S. Sorry for the late response.  I think I may have missed your review while responding to the others because I was going by reviews listed under chapter 4.  Please charge it to my aging eyes and brain and not my heart.  Thanks for reading, reviewing, and voting!

Reviewer: azzure1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 10:22 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Father:  no, too busy scheming and has never been there for her before

Larry:  who's Larry?

Carter:  yes, he was the last one on her mind and I bet she has his number memorized

unknown male: no, because Shauna keeps all males, except dad, out of her life

Author's Response:

"Larry" is Tamryn's father's first name.  Thanks for reading, reviewing, and voting, Penelope!

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 09:04 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Absolutely love this story.  I feel bad for Tamryn having such an evil sister.  I vote for Carter to come to her aid. Can't wait for the next update. 

Author's Response:

Thanks Liltay!  An update is in the works.

Reviewer: liltay550 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 08:52 pm

Title: Chapter 4

I want it to be an unknown male that Tamryn called for aid. 

Author's Response:

Thanks AvidReader!

Reviewer: AvidReader28 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 08:20 pm

Title: Chapter 4

I want it be Carter, since their father doesn't realize how evil Shauna is. Thank you for having Carter say no to Larry about marrying that evil ho bag Shauna. Why can't the parents see that Shauna ia psychotic? Carter get to Tamryn fast please!   Thanks for the long update even if you did ene in another gut retching cliff hanger. 

Author's Response:

Deborah knows Shauna is off and capable of violence, but the killing is new.  Larry is basically in denial.  Thanks for reading, reviewing, and voting, Pam!

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 07:13 pm

Title: Chapter 4

Carter! Then Shauna would be dumbfounded cuz she figured Tam would run to her daddy! Or vice Versa. I just need Shauna to die 

Author's Response:

Thanks SleepEasy!

Reviewer: SleepEasy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 15 2014 06:44 pm

Title: Chapter 3

gaaah noooo i missed the voting with one day but dammit i hope people chose a secret that will CRUSH Shauna and answered the second question with - hell to the NO...! LOOL!

i'm simply in awe. i think this story is so damn thrilling. i'm sitting at the edge of my seat every single time...! so thanks for the thrill! :D

p.s. just in case you happen to pop in here's my vote:
Tamryn's secret that affects Shauna like a nuclear bomb(!!)
Carter's secret that affects Tamryn

and to answer your second question


Author's Response:

This is a good news / bad news scenario.  The bad news is, even if I count your vote, Larry's secret concerning Shauna and Shauna's secret concerning Tamryn are still the winners.  The good news is the vote as to whether Carter would agree to be with Shauna was unanimously no. MMMMMM...  NO.  NO!  LOL! 

Thanks for reading, Cassius Noir, and for the fantastic review!!!  Glad you're enjoying the story so far.

Reviewer: Yuukiyanagi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 25 2014 11:44 am

Title: Chapter 3

Larry's secret relating to Shauna that greatly affects Carter or Carter's secret that greatly affects Hooks

That's a HELL NO to Shauna - I bet that bitch made it up to manipulate Carter! Can't STAND her.

wow, I felt for Tamryn and what she went through.  She is more of a stand-up guy than the lot of them.

loving the intrigue, and criminal edge, and the ingenious idea to include the readers along this journey.  Although there's votes...you still apply a fresh spin to the plot. LUV IT!

great job

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 22 2014 03:45 am

Title: Chapter 2

Oh gosh!  I hope he didn't sex Shauna.  Doesn't sound like they've been intimate at all and I hope that's true.  (How presumptuous of Shauna to acquire his key and enter his home.  Carter needs to set that heffa straight; right now he doesn't appear to be a pushover by allowing daddys witch to rule him...this too I hope is true). Carter was a bit rough with Tamryn but he had to 'sell' their cover.  However this is what I'm trippin' off of...Shauna is a complete bitch and I'd Tamryn is truly the apple of their father's eye...the I'm quite sure he wouldn't allow Shauna to assault Tamryn either.  Tam needs to stand up to the biotch!

tamryn took a big risk by going to Carter like that...she should've chosen another rendezvous site than Carter's home.  

Kudos for not going the girlfriend/wifey route with the female choice of 'who's at the door'.  Didn't expect this twist.

Looking forward to the next chapter.  

Author's Response:

I get what you're saying about Hooks not taking too kindly to Shauna assaulting Tamryn.  But I think a glimpse into who Tamryn is and who Shauna is becoming in the next chapter might shed some light on why Shauna would be willing and able to hurt Tamryn.  Shauna has shown a recent escalation in violence and daddy hasn't been able to rein her in.  He would undoubtedly punish Shauna, after the fact, if she harmed Tamryn, but that's only if he finds out.  Tamryn is no snitch and has always been one to fight her own battles with her sister rather than taking them to their father.  Shauna knows this and seems willing to take full advantage of it.  If she gets caught, there's only so much daddy'll do to her because he's a sucker for her too, or so she thinks.  More on all that in upcoming chapters.  Thanks for reading and reviewing, JV4ME!

Reviewer: JV4ME Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 22 2014 02:09 am

Title: Chapter 3

Shauna's secret concerning Tamryn.

Carter saying he'd rather have a colonic everyday in hell rather than date Shauna.

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Reviewer: Darqchild Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 21 2014 09:49 pm

Title: Chapter 3

Shaunas secret! 



Reviewer: SleepEasy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 21 2014 08:34 pm

Title: Chapter 1


Reviewer: PurpleLover23 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 21 2014 07:35 pm

Title: Chapter 3

Carter's secret that relates to Tamryn.

Carter says No

Reviewer: cdy1216 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 21 2014 04:51 pm

Title: Chapter 1

I love this story soooo much!!! Please, please, please update soon!

How could Chase sleep with her sister...? :( I feel that Tamryn is going to get a new guy in her life to get some revenge on Chase.

There is no way Chase can marry her sister.

I would like to hear Tamryn's secret on her sister and her sister's secret on Larry.


Reviewer: Twin Anonymous [Report This]
Date: July 21 2014 04:13 pm

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