Reviews For Out of Bounds
Title: Chapter 12

I sure hope to see some growth in the future. Jourdan is a liar and a user and I feel bad for David and Neymar for being used and strung alone by this little girl. Someone like her needs to by themselves and not messing with other people's feelings since she is so "confused" but not confused about lying. Her age is not an excuse and that is such a tired excuse that causes me headaches. Maybe I was just raised in a different way because I was an independent college student, a grown woman at 19. Not much has changed for me from 19 till now being 26. 

And her personality is atrocious so no I still don't see what they see in her. All that other stuff would become irrelevant after spending a day with her lol.

Right now I am not a fan of Jourdan at all, trying to find something to like about this girl....... :( nope nothing.

 

Reviewer: HermioneMalfoy08 Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 10:24 am

Title: Chapter 12

It's cool about Jourdan's up in the air love interests... Being young and dumb is normal. She's not really dumb, but like you said indecisive and trying to protect her heart. Good story, keep writing.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 05:45 am

Title: Chapter 12

1. Neymar is not a good friend. Can we talk about this? Nothing is more unlikable than someone that has no loyalty to their friends (and teammates!). 

2. Being 19 is not an excuse for being a jerk. I don't think we except perfect Mary Sue characters, just somone we can like and root for. Jourdan is not that person. Barely any incentive to keep reading except I love soccer. 

Reviewer: bruja Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 04:49 am

Title: Chapter 12

I wish the characters would have shown more depth sooner, maybe not on the 12th chapter. I think that's why people are frustrated by what they're reading. 

Reviewer: Sigh Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 04:40 am

Title: Chapter 12

I think you had a good concept but something is lacking in the delivery.

Jourdan is not a heroine that I am able to get behind. In order to appreciate her journey I have to like her in her triumphs and her failures. Something in her character is off which is putting me off this story. I like the premise so I keep trying with every update but 13 chapters in and nothing has changed. Jourdan in particular is not growing and the 19 years old crap is becoming tiring. You know right from wrong around 4 years old so the 19 crap is getting old.

Neymar makes me feel like "eh" I don't understand why he likes her so much her personality and actions leave much to be desired. This conflict does seem unneccesary and Jourdan is coming across as a user and someone unable to tell the truth......ever.

IDK these characters are just not likeable. I wish you the best of luck on this story though.

Reviewer: Kaye2008 Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 03:37 am

Title: Chapter 12

Why are you harping on her being 19? You are using that as an excuse to be dumb, I know plenty of 19 year olds who don't behave like her and 30 year old women who like to play games witm men as well. That is all she is doing is playing games while trying to hide behind an innocent persona that is very fake now. I hate, hate girls like her, she should be 15 instead of 19, even then it wouldn't work.

 Her character is becoming completely unlikable to a point where I don't care about what happens to her. She should just screw the whole soccer team to "find herself". This triangle and all the guys liking her is very cliche, like you were trying to find a conflict but couldn't decide. Not trying to be harsh this is just IMO. 19 is no excuse for anything so using 19 as why she is behaving this way is an insult to 19 year olds who are not like this and the 30 year olds who are. I am tired of age being used as an escape from her acting dumb.

It seems very unrealistic for someone what had morals to suddenly beccome like a moraless hussy overnight. I really don't get it. Age has nothing to do with this I am 25 now and never felt the need to screw a bunch of guys in order to "find myself", it seems like a lot of people think that growing up means sex, sex,sex if you dont's do this with multiple people then you are not finding yourself. She could go on a solo trip around the world to find herself what does men even have to do with it.

Watching her go back and forth is crazy at this point Neymar should forget about her and focus on someone else who is not some lying, confused, doesn't know her own mind little girl. I don't know about this story I may read it when it's complete because right now I don't like anyone thus it's hard to read.

 

Reviewer: Chocolate1Lover Anonymous star [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 03:30 am

Title: Chapter 12

She's got a tough decision to make. In my opinion, I think she really wants Neymar. It seems they have more chemistry with one another than she and David. 

Reviewer: Musicluva Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 03:24 am

Title: Chapter 12

OMG this chapter is toooo much! Like really, in a good way of course! Please do update really soon!!! I'm in love with this story!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 01:56 am

Title: Chapter 12

At the end of this I wanted to slap Jourdan. At least she knows what she's doing is wrong and she needs to pick a person and stick with them. At this point she should just pick Neymar because she doesn't deserve David since technically she's been cheating on him ... if there even are in a relationship. It's fuzzy for me really since I think they only went on one date I think?

I dunno. I like all the characters in this except for Jourdan and Neymar. That's not to say I don't like them, I just feel like 'eh'. I roll my eyes more often than not with them. Neymar apparently has no boundaries with a friend's girl and Jourdan's just ... eh.

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: August 13 2014 01:02 am

Title: Chapter 12

Journdan works my last nerve,  she maybe young but she knows that could hurt David and Neymar both with her actions.  That Marta ho must be friends with Bruna, why else would she be so evil tto Journdan? 

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 11:54 pm

Title: Characters

Be Switzerland!!! Claim alligence to know one!!! Can't make other people happy so CYA!!! Lol!!! Good cliffhanger. 

Reviewer: Khamalani Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 11:40 pm

Title: Chapter 12

Privacy. Why can't she respectfully decline to answer personal questions. She continues to answer. Why! I am loving this story!

Reviewer: SweetCoCo76 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 11:16 pm

Title: Chapter 11

Can't wait for another update!!! Thank you very much!!!!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 06:23 pm

Title: Chapter 11

Longer chapters... I like this story.

Reviewer: swirly_girl Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 09:50 am

Title: Characters

This is outrageous now. She's horrible and I feel like as the author you keep making excuses for her behavior instead of really listening to us about how your story has spun out of control into something completely unbelievable. I don't think I really want to read much more of her antics. Young woman or not, she has no idea how to treat people and deserves to end up alone.

 

 



Author's Response:

I'm not making excuses for her, what Jourdan is doing is wrong. She likes Neymar but refuses to give him a chance and remains with David Luiz while constantly lying to him. I don't get what's so unbelievable about a girl struggling to find herself in a foreign country after going through something traumatic who ends up having to juggle two men who are interested in her.  This is a story and its not even half way done yet. There has to be a conflict and the conflict right now is Jordan's morals. I completely understand if you stop reading but it's foolish to judge an uncompleted story with uncompleted characters.

Reviewer: KE; Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 06:34 am

Title: Chapter 11

I wonder if Jourdan has to end up sleeping with the whole soccer team to finally know her feelings and stop acting childish. Why can't she be honest with David Luiz? She always giving Neymar a hard time and what not, but yet she is no different. And whats up with so many male having an instant attraction or interested in her ? Its a little unrealistic. I'm not really liking Jourdan at all to be honest. I get that she is young and is trying to find herself. But you don't have to be 30 to know when you are acting selfish, childish and stupid. And that is exactly what Jourdan is. Being young is not an excuse. 



Author's Response:

She doesn't want to tell David the truth because she's afraid of losing someone who she could actually see building a real lasting relationship with. It's childish but then again she's only 19, how would you have reacted in her situation at that age? She's young and stupid and childish and only human. She has two love interests, she and Cristiano are just friends. What makes Jourdan get so much attention us that 1. She's American in a foreign country. 2. She's a good soccer player (which is very attractive to someone who plays the sport for a living and is used to dealing with girls who are less athletic and more superficial) 3. She doesn't throw herself at the players because their famous. Jordan is the type of girl that you have to chase and most men love a good chase.

Reviewer: Annony Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 03:26 am

Title: Chapter 11

I too agree with  CrimsonBlaze. What is making Jourdan so attractive to all those soccer player. Its to the point where it even sounds unrealistic. Is it indeed only because she can play soccer? Because I get that she is beautiful. But that's about it honestly. Her attitude and mix signals that she gives are terrible and not likable at all. She is very self centered and judgmental. She LOVES lying to David Luiz and doesn't seem to care that she may end up hurting him in the end with all her stupid lies. Its okay for her to hurt people, but when it come to her, she gets all defensive. Look at how she treats Neymar. Why is Neymar even bothering with her. I get that he likes her. But damn, be man and stop begging and running after a girl who judges you without even knowing you  and treat you like dirt. She is not worth it. He is better off without her. And so is David Luiz. He deserves better. Someone who can at least be fair and honest with him. Jourdan is none of that. If she really cherish what they have she would have been honest with him about Neymar. If you ask me, she is worst than Neymar. Before judging people, she really needs to take a look at herself.

Reviewer: Msroos Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 03:16 am

Title: Chapter 11

I'm sorry, but seriously, why do Neymar and David like Jourdan. Not to be rude,but she is a selfish bitch. Only caring and thinking about herself. She is VERY judgmental en self centered. She is scared to get hurt and brokenhearted, but yet doesn't care if she ends up hurting David and break his heart. She lies to him as if its nothing and doesn't even feel sorry about it. She is always quick to judge Neymar and call him a man whore, while she too is doing any great. I really hope that Neymar will leave Jourdan alone. She is a selfish girl who doesn't know what she wants and only think about her self. If she honestly care for David and respect him, she would have been honest with him. A relationship is build on trust, and she is breaking it little by little. David deserves better. 

Reviewer: Miss Starz Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 03:05 am

Title: Chapter 11

I don't quite understand what is making her so attractive to all these different men. Is it only because she can play soccer??

Reviewer: CrimsonBlaze Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 02:59 am

Title: Chapter 11

Firstly, Luiz is adorable. Since I see this story ending with Jourdan and Neymar I will gladly take him and cuddle and console him when this is over. Or slap him and then cuddle. Depends on how this turns out. And am I the only one who thinks Silva's lips are very biteable? I'm just asking.

 

Oh, Oh! And I want to be friends with Cristiano. Like seriously. I'm not sexually attracted to him, I just wanna be his friend.

Reviewer: Bajerie Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2014 12:20 am

Title: Chapter 11

Journdan is pissing me off,  she is willing to hurt David because she's scared of feelings for Neymar. What a bitch!! Right now I don't want her to end up with anyone.  Not liking her at all.

Reviewer: pmgayles Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 11 2014 11:01 pm

Title: Chapter 10

I love this story! It's so interesting and a breath of fresh air. Please continue. Can't wait for the next update. :)
~~Soulholder11

Reviewer: Soulholder Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 09 2014 01:46 am

Title: Chapter 10

Her mistakes a racking up. 

Reviewer: Kellbell Anonymous [Report This]
Date: August 08 2014 01:49 am

Title: Chapter 10

Keep upgrading!!! I love this story!

Reviewer: Anonymous Anonymous starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2014 11:30 pm

Title: Characters

no dating the players--never get your honey where you get your money.  Bruna should have been shocked when she saw J talent on the field.  Looking forward to J shaking the team up.  Great update.

Reviewer: Penelope Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2014 07:49 am



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